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A Night With the Princess By InvalidResponse -- Report

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To keep her hunger for ponies a secret, Twilight satisfies her needs on a helpless stranger.

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Redpod

Posted by Redpod 7 years ago Report

nice digestione je :d

SmaxTheDestroyer

Posted by SmaxTheDestroyer 7 years ago Report

Awesome story! Twilight Pred is great!

AuraDrak

Posted by AuraDrak 7 years ago Report

Very immpressive!

Voraverit

Posted by Voraverit 7 years ago Report

Lovely story, but I have two editorial notes:
1# In paragraph where twilight is swallowing Ray you have the wrong gender pronoun at one points you say she swallowed "her" tail.
2# is also the slight word choice when you talking about Twilight walking around with digested Ray in her bowels you effectively say she lumbered lumberously, best not to use verb with its adverb form.

InvalidResponse

Posted by InvalidResponse 7 years ago Report

Thank you.

DethXev

Posted by DethXev 7 years ago Report

Not a fan of MLP but I just loved the digestion/scat details ;)

TrixietheVoracious

Posted by TrixietheVoracious 7 years ago Report

Nghh, Trixie approves. Twi as a pred is just too cute.

dudey64

Posted by dudey64 5 years ago Report

Nice work, Twi giving a lucky pony an experience of a lifetime.