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Unicorn Noblepony Cane Crecca books passage aboard an airship captained by pegasus mare Skyheart, and bound for Zebrica. Cane should probably have vetted the captain first...
A hello to anyone reading this. This is my first step out of vorish rp and into vore fics. This is also a complete short story. I hope to write more, but we'll see how that goes. As this is the first, feedback is super appreciated and junk. If it's terrible and I should get off the stage, then feel free to ready the tomatoes and such. Don't hold back no punches.
In case you didn't check the tags, this story contains: Soft Vore, Digestion, Disposal, Fart Torture and some Sexual Stuff so... if you don't like, then don't read. You know. Although it is segmented by time skips because of the disjointed way I wrote it to keep it short, so you can skip sections if so inclined.
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Posted by Mariofanboy64 10 years ago Report
Very nice
Posted by Cainiam 10 years ago Report
Thanks! Anything you didn't like?
Posted by Mariofanboy64 10 years ago Report
The part where she tastes his scat and says he's "full of shit" was kinda over kill and yuck.
Posted by Cainiam 10 years ago Report
I'll keep that in mind. Thanks for the reply.
Posted by simalst 10 years ago Report
Hm, one more story like that and I think I'm going to watch you!
Posted by Cainiam 10 years ago Report
Then I'd best start another story. Heh. Thanks for the comment.
Posted by SmaxTheDestroyer 10 years ago Report
This is really your first story? It's really good! I enjoyed the swallowing and disposal scenes particularly. Great story! Hope to see more of Skyheart's adventures!
Posted by Cainiam 10 years ago Report
Thanks! Good to know the vorish parts are strengths. I rp quite a lot, so I know how to write rp. Was just paranoid about the changeover from rp to fiction. This was intended as a one-off experiment, but I could use Skyheart again for sure. Thanks for taking the time to comment.
Posted by Lenumanuma 10 years ago Report
I'm not a big fan of disposal but meh, that's just me. Great story and I hope to read more from you soon.
Posted by Cainiam 10 years ago Report
I'm glad that didn't put you off completely. I will most likely include disposal in most vorish things I write, but I'll keep them separate like I did here with dividers so you just need to keep in mind to skip off the end.
Posted by martyr 10 years ago Report
I'm not really a fan of MLP, but I'm a sucker for disposal scenes with this much detail.
Posted by Cainiam 10 years ago Report
Thanks. I'll be sticking to MLP for now, but there's the potential for Anthro stuff down the line. I'm not a fan of humans though.
Posted by Straxacore 10 years ago Report
That's a great story. Awesome stuff, I loved it from start to finish, plus Skyheart is a great character ^_^ I can't wait to read the sequel you just posted.
Posted by Cainiam 10 years ago Report
Thanks! I hope the sequel meets expectations. Skyheart was supposed to be a one-off, but people really seem to like her. It's a pleasant surprise.
Posted by Straxacore 10 years ago Report
Well she is a great pred ^_^ I very much like her
Posted by 48th agent 10 years ago Report
Very excellent! I really enjoyed this one, the story was believable and kinda unique compared to a lot of what else is out there, plus the sexy parts really got me. Heh, I see that the role playing must have come in pretty handy. Maybe a tad quick on some parts, but still enjoyable nonetheless ^^
That being said, I may also have a slight bias, because you touch upon some fetish material I like that isn't often used, so...heh, I really liked that too -//w//-
Can't wait for my labido to come back so I can read the next one!
Posted by SilverHornedDeer 10 years ago Report
Everything here is basically awesome, although I'm not a real fan of farting. Although, you (thankfully) didn't go that far with it so it was still really bearable/enjoyable for me. I'm gonna go through your whole gallery in the next few days, and I hope I'll enjoy the next ones just as much as I enjoyed this 83 you really wrote a lot and it's time for me to catch up!
Oh and thanks for making them!
Posted by Base54 6 years ago Report
Okay, so I know I'm a little late to do this, but since no-one else points this out, I will. Early in the story, when Skyheart first started torturing Cane, there was a mention of blood. But later on, no more blood is shown, which is a bit unbelievable since his second torturing, and even hours afterwards, no blood. The only mention of an injury was a perceived broken rib, and I would think somebody pressing against a place where my rib is broken would hurt like hell. This is a minor nitpick, but I feel as if I'm not the only one who noticed it. Otherwise, a good story.