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Samuel St. John Imonje is a talented CGI artist with larger than life ambitions for his skills. He is also fighting a terribly painful and increasingly futile battle against cancer. And he has artist's block.
His only hope lies in a solution offered to him by a long time online friend. A crazy, out of this world solution that he would never have even imagined.
AUTHOR'S NOTES:
The story is in alpha release. It needs a severe beating. Unlike my previous Eka's Portal Writer's Group stories, I expect MANY major improvements to be made. One of the big problems with my EPWG entries is that they weren't bug checked before the public got to see them. That won't happen this time.
I expect big changes to this story to give it polish.
Finally, when you read this story I have questions:
1) Is the whole cancer scenario actually plausible?
2) Do you think this story meets the goals I set in this blog post?
https://aryion.com/forum/blog/Jacquelope/i_call_it..._the_french_snack_riddle_b-4710.html
3) Do I need to massacre a lot of commas?
4) Did the story end properly or should it have ended sooner?
Also see my inspiration for this story, Writer's Block by Groblek:
http://aryion.com/g4/view/113836
And I may have been inspired by this cancer-related story Last Request by Cameilla:
https://aryion.com/g4/view/165914
AUTHOR'S NOTES 5/9/2015:
I added a historical tie-in between this story and the Cassandroids. It was Samuel Imonje and Saelihn Nualis's invention that enabled Trevor "Buck" Denzhou to create the gynoids that caused the Great Die-Off of the 23rd century.
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Posted by Imrhys 10 years ago Report
Next question, are you gonna drop this into EPWG April (or May if that round falls through)? Groblek is wrestling with time constraints to get one in for April and I've got a second chapter to drop in there myself, around again, time constraints.
Posted by Jacquelope 10 years ago Report
April? Not likely. I need input from people on how to polish this. My last set of EPWG submissions were disastrous SPECIFICALLY because the criticisms that I got should have been ironed out BEFORE EPWG. EPWG was receiving pre-pre-pre release level writing.
Posted by Imrhys 10 years ago Report
Just to let you know, three, four years later, EPWG has changed some, and my own Starting Over #1 was alpha alpha copy. To the point I've done more face palming than anything from comments thus far >_>
Posted by Imrhys 10 years ago Report
BTW, this was as clean a copy, grammar & punc, as you ever did in EPWG. And not sure why you thought this needs a "severe beating." You've improved since Ian days. You have taken the lesson well to heart that "audiences relate to the personal not the universal." Major improvement over the Ian days. Major.
Posted by Jacquelope 10 years ago Report
Part of it was how easy it was to stick to the first person single perspective. IIRC there were many other issues that people brought up with Ian Scranton besides the lack of relating to the personal. I expected those to surface here until I could get down to spotting and fixing them.
Posted by Smb64 9 years ago Report
wow is all I can say.... I don't know why.... but all this tech talk is making me hard as well... and normally it's just the unbirth doing that... you have one hell of an imagination... or should I say.... Imonjination