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The third chapter of Talana's adventures, defending the galaxy against those pesky rebels!
The opening scroll, set to John Williams' music, is here: http://goo.gl/FTTzoq .
As with the previous chapters, I'm using the canon of the Star Wars Expanded Universe, and the website Wookieepedia has been of invaluable help in getting the chronology and events right. The worlds and cultures and overarching setting in this story are drawn from that canon, although the characters and specific events are my own.
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Posted by saintheartwing 9 years ago Report
I LOVE how well this is written. It's so rare to find GOOD works that include vore in them and have characters you can identify with.
ONE issue though.
"“Your war,” Talana said. “And it shouldn’t have been war; not today. All these years, all those deaths… Everyone who’s died in this war, it’s your fault. It’s on you. You, and your rebellion.”
Nobody put a gun to the Empire's head and MADE them kill, slaughter, enslave or commit genocide. Her empire caused great harm to countless worlds, yet she feels they're more wrong for RETALIATING then they are for doing the awful things to begin with. And evidently she poo-poos the idea of people HAVING A VOICE IN THEIR GOVT. Social darwinism. Ugh.
Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report
Thank you! I enjoyed writing it. And I'm glad Talana is a relatable character, despite her views.
Talana is an Imperial, through and through. She thinks democracy is a silly and dangerous idea. She's been raised to believe that the Old Republic was a disaster. She values order and security rather than freedom.
Remember, she hasn't really ever experienced the Empire at its worst. She grew up on a quiet little planet which nobody bothered much. Her husband is from Chandrila, where Imperial rule was not particularly oppressive. Now she's living on Storinal, which is a peaceful little paradise. She's hardly ever met, or interacted with, non-Humans, who were the Empire's main victims. She doesn't really get why the rebels felt the need to start a war of liberation. She's angry at them for overthrowing what she saw as a rightful order that kept people safe. She's not seeing the full picture.
Posted by saintheartwing 9 years ago Report
Understandable, I suppose.
Posted by Adseria 9 years ago Report
Also, you have to remember that this is a different universe to the canon one. In this universe, the Empire kept things like the Death Stars secret. According to the way French_snack has written this story, Talana believes that the Empire was a good and righteous government who would never commit genocide.
Posted by saintheartwing 9 years ago Report
But it really wasn't a secret, everyone saw it used in the battle over Endor. That's even a plot point in an earlier story, she's confronted by rebel authorities and flat out told that Alderaan was blown up. She's like "That's impossible" and they counter that she SAW the Death Star blowing up huge spaceships over Endor, but she refuses to believe they'd destroy a planet.
Posted by Adseria 9 years ago Report
Precisely. My point is, she was shocked when that happened, which meant that a lot of the pilots in the navy, and probably most of the Empire, never knew about the first Death Star, or the enslavement of trillions of non-humans, or countless other atrocities that were hidden behind Imperial propaganda.
Posted by Vixen20 9 years ago Report
Awesome! Keep up the good work :)
Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report
Thanks. :)