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Beach Exploration [TRADE] By marloweny -- Report

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Starcross and her friend Danica find a nice private beach to enjoy some sun. Before long, Dani finds a new way to have some fun.

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This is my half of a trade with the extremely talented  Starcrossing, who is also responsible for the gorgeous thumbnail. Keep your eyes peeled for the other half of the trade soon!

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DestinyLust

Posted by DestinyLust 5 years ago Report

I'm usually not too much of a fan of stories without digestion or other fatality. This was regardless amazing... Keep writing like this and you'll make me an endo fan yet.

marloweny

Posted by marloweny 5 years ago Report

Always proud to know I wrote something fun even for people with different tastes!

Modern45

Posted by Modern45 5 years ago Report

Heck, that's really a nice story! I love all those intimate details about delicate sinking inside Star. :3

marloweny

Posted by marloweny 5 years ago Report

Thanks! The descriptions of my sensations are sort of my specialty.

ShadesofBlack

Posted by ShadesofBlack 5 years ago Report

Oh my goodness! A trade between one of my absolute favorite authors, and one of my absolute favorite artists! *starts reading*

ShadesofBlack

Posted by ShadesofBlack 5 years ago Report

Oh lovely! I didn't realize that Star was quite this shy about her abilities. For some reason in my head, I had this idea that she did this sort of thing in public all the time. But this is wonderful, and I like her even more now.

I love how the moment things started, she switched from reluctant, timid cutie to dominant, sultry pred. Also the way you described the act and the sensations was... MMMm. I want to be that girl even more now.

marloweny

Posted by marloweny 5 years ago Report

I'm happy you liked it! Great care was taken to match the characters' behaviors to Starcrossing's specifications. It's nice that I achieved a fun result. There MAY be at least one more bit of collaboration in the future.

narcissist

Posted by narcissist 5 years ago Report

I feel the same exact way

SlasherFiction

Posted by SlasherFiction 5 years ago Report

I love this, especially the peristalsis part. I like it when I have to look up something... but... *groans* My OCD. I am sorry. I found three errors. If you do not care, disregard the rest of this.

1.) First paragraph, fourth line starts with . It is missing the connecting or .
2.) Halfway down, there is a paragraph that starts with , two paragraphs above the first . On the second line of that paragraph, you wrote instead of .
3.) First paragraph after the second ends with . Either or, please. Though I think works better here.

marloweny

Posted by marloweny 5 years ago Report

Thanks for the sharp eye! If there were only three errors, I'm astounded. I'll make corrections at some point in the next few days.

vasp

Posted by vasp 5 years ago Report

A beautiful story from start to finish! I loved how sensual you described everything, and it's always a pleasure to see anything involving Starcross!

marloweny

Posted by marloweny 5 years ago Report

Thanks!