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Starcross and her friend Danica find a nice private beach to enjoy some sun. Before long, Dani finds a new way to have some fun.
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This is my half of a trade with the extremely talented Starcrossing, who is also responsible for the gorgeous thumbnail. Keep your eyes peeled for the other half of the trade soon!
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Posted by DestinyLust 9 years ago Report
I'm usually not too much of a fan of stories without digestion or other fatality. This was regardless amazing... Keep writing like this and you'll make me an endo fan yet.
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Always proud to know I wrote something fun even for people with different tastes!
Posted by Modern45 9 years ago Report
Heck, that's really a nice story! I love all those intimate details about delicate sinking inside Star. :3
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Thanks! The descriptions of my sensations are sort of my specialty.
Posted by ShadesofBlack 9 years ago Report
Oh my goodness! A trade between one of my absolute favorite authors, and one of my absolute favorite artists! *starts reading*
Posted by ShadesofBlack 9 years ago Report
Oh lovely! I didn't realize that Star was quite this shy about her abilities. For some reason in my head, I had this idea that she did this sort of thing in public all the time. But this is wonderful, and I like her even more now.
I love how the moment things started, she switched from reluctant, timid cutie to dominant, sultry pred. Also the way you described the act and the sensations was... MMMm. I want to be that girl even more now.
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
I'm happy you liked it! Great care was taken to match the characters' behaviors to Starcrossing's specifications. It's nice that I achieved a fun result. There MAY be at least one more bit of collaboration in the future.
Posted by narcissist 9 years ago Report
I feel the same exact way
Posted by SlasherFiction 9 years ago Report
I love this, especially the peristalsis part. I like it when I have to look up something... but... *groans* My OCD. I am sorry. I found three errors. If you do not care, disregard the rest of this.
1.) First paragraph, fourth line starts with . It is missing the connecting or .
2.) Halfway down, there is a paragraph that starts with , two paragraphs above the first . On the second line of that paragraph, you wrote instead of .
3.) First paragraph after the second ends with . Either or, please. Though I think works better here.
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Thanks for the sharp eye! If there were only three errors, I'm astounded. I'll make corrections at some point in the next few days.
Posted by vasp 9 years ago Report
A beautiful story from start to finish! I loved how sensual you described everything, and it's always a pleasure to see anything involving Starcross!
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Thanks!