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A very lewd story about a Japanese Vorarephiliac, tries to make you her first meal... In first person...
May make a third person version if asked, I tried to keep it gender neutral.
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Posted by Cryos 8 years ago Report
Fantastic work. Glad to see her first human meal worked out in her favour...
Posted by ClaudiaNatsuno 8 years ago Report
As good as always
Posted by GregTheGrimm 8 years ago Report
How do I view the thumbnail full size?
Honestly don't know if you can do that,
but that's the point of asking.
Posted by Makuta 8 years ago Report
Wow it is an awesome story and yes for first person. ^^
Posted by hibbyjibby 8 years ago Report
Barring a few, "ahem", elements added near the end of the story, and on a more technical term the punctuation, it definitely isn't bad for someone who I assume, doesn't have English as their first language. Am I correct?
Anywho, good work, and avoiding the usage of gender-specific pronouns makes it easier for the reader to immerse themselves into the story. That and, an Asian/Japanese woman wearing latex fits a little too well into my own personal likes, haha. Hope you keep that sort of stuff in your stories, be it one or the other now.
Incidentally, and these are stupidly minor things, I'd probably change the name of the story to be more, well, Japanese as opposed to Chinese, along with the food they ate. The first and last meals are Chinese dishes, and this I know wholeheartedly, haha. Just mentioning it, some people get offended over the smallest of things.
Posted by Portal124 8 years ago Report
I expected there would be grammar mistakes, never was to good at it my whole life, and english is first just dialect makes it off.
I knew I might have slipped and used a wrong pronoun, as you can guess it's quit difficult to guess the reader.
And I really showed change her homeland to china, and other themes throughout the story.
Thanks!
Posted by hibbyjibby 8 years ago Report
Really now? Well I wouldn't worry too much. I myself have two backgrounds that aren't involved with English, so I know it can be a hassle sometimes. You still did well, I think. In all honesty I'd love to offer my services to proof-read and help with that sorta stuff. One of the few things I'm good at, now.
I think using neutral terms is a good way to avoid the issue of 'immersion'. Granted, while F/M is waaaay too popular for my tastes, and the easy way out is to do that, this way you avoid all the issues, so no harm no fowl right?
And it's not a big deal, just something I wanted to point out, haha. Some people can be stupidly easy to upset, so figured I might as well mention. Aside from just changing the words to be consistent, not sure there's much you'd need to change in terms of theme.
Unless one of the themes is curvaceous Asian women in latex, haha. Then I won't complain about any changes.
Posted by ScaledWall 8 years ago Report
There was a bunch of grammar issues. Like I think you meant breasts instead of breast. Or maybe I'm wrong. Among others.
I did enjoy it though. Don't get that wrong.
Posted by Portal124 8 years ago Report
I know, I should just leave first person to the video games, this was more of an experiment.
Posted by darc22005 8 years ago Report
An experiment gone right in my mind though :P
Posted by JackNoName 8 years ago Report
I do not mean it bad, I liked your story a lot but this isn't written in the first person, its in the second. A story with "I" "me" and "mine" are first person, "you" "yours" and "your" are second and "he" "her" and "hers" are third. You tell the story from someone elses perspective TO the protagonist not from the protagonists perspective to the reader. If that makes sense?.
Just wanted to point that out. Keep writing ;)
Posted by darc22005 8 years ago Report
I loved this one.
You dont seem to do sequels do you, cause this one, Maria's lucky night, Jessies Sexy meal, Queen of the Birdos, and Bulmas Jealousy I think they would all be great stories to have another pt to them.
Posted by darc22005 8 years ago Report
Also one thing I would love to see is the character checking the scale before and after to see how much they gained
Posted by Portal124 8 years ago Report
I would love to do sequels, but there is a lot to cover, sometime in the future for sure though
Posted by darc22005 8 years ago Report
Amazing to hear ^_^ I always look very very forward to seeing you have a new story out
Posted by Nyven 1 year ago Report
I love this