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When the surreal is placed squarely in front of you, is it wrong to take hope from it? What do you gamble on? Words of warning might be a safe option to follow, but is it worth it to put all your hope in another? Waiting too long to make your move always comes with its own consequences, after all. Choose, human. Your life depends on it, whether you realize that or not.
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A poor, innocent human wakes up in the middle of the woods. She meets a friendly naga, and decides to touch scaly tail. She gets the bad ending. Also, wow, .rtf files space like hot garbage when uploaded, and I have no idea how to fix that.
Today I make my writing debut, dragging a world along with me. This is the introductory piece, and while I intended it to be a slow burn, my worry is that it comes across as more of a dumpster fire. I can only hope my definition of "teasing" is not functionally equivalent to "tedious." Still, I'll note here that my writing style tends towards the flow of the horror genre. What this means to me, at least, is that I wound up having a ton of buildup, with what I hope is seen as a lot of detailed payoff.
As this story comes in at about 25,475 words, and just over 138,000 characters, I have separated the individual parts by beginning and end so readers can skip around to the parts they want to see, or skip over the parts they don't. I hope this is clear, but you can ctrl+f the document with the listed symbols to find the described scene.
symbol - act
=== - explicit sex
=/=/= - end of explicit sex
*** - actual vore
+++ - "soft"/melty but still explicit digestion
+/+/+ - end of explicit digestion, return to exposition
I already have three other mental scenes in the same setting, waiting to be taken to the page. One's a shorter tale that involves the ins and outs of the Serpents' main city, focusing on the Nagaraja's feeding habits. Another one is alluded to at the end of the piece, and I get the sense that one will appeal to a broader scope of predilections. It features the white-haired vampire, and still has samesize vore. The last one is a recent interest of mine, it would feature a male Siren; as of yet unalluded to. Said Siren will be an absolute monster; not physically, but mentally, and I think that would be fun to write. All of these scenarios are M/F, so with that in mind, tell me which of those sounds best to you, if you want.
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Posted by Chameleonette 7 years ago Report
This was a really great read! I love the build-up from start to finish. And possessive predators like Joseph are wonderful~ Thanks a lot for sharing! I enjoyed it a lot.
As for your other ideas---all of them sound great! I'd say go with whichever happens to be inspiring/motivating you the most? Personally, I lean a little toward the siren (out of personal bias), if just because of how rare male sirens are and the fact that I've loved thinking about scenarios with them, myself! But honestly, I'm super happy for ANY M/f content like this. Superb work!
Posted by Predilection 7 years ago Report
And thank you, as well! I definitely appreciate all the kind words! It does mean a lot to know I have such appeal, especially so early on. The majority of my predators will probably be of the possessive personality type; filtered through the different cultures that surround them.
I'll be fleshing out all three of those characters as my next 'branch' of projects, but I am also leaning towards the Siren as the first endeavor of the lot. I have a rather clear idea of how I want all three to go, though, so I figured I'd ask for the input of anyone else who likes this sort of thing. As such, thank you as well for your input!
Male sirens are definitely an interesting anomaly. I feel the idea I've come up with involves taking an already dark concept and, through applying humanity, making it even darker. I do hope it's not too overtly so as to ruin its more pleasant potential effects, but alas, that will depend on my skill.
Posted by KinoTheCat 7 years ago Report
Holy wow.
That was absolutely amazing. It was a really great read and I loved the slow roll in the beginning that built itself up more and more until the final climax of the story.
I feel a little bad for Sarah, but if you didn't touch on literally everything I love about vore, from the romance to the love and that desire to keep someone you love as apart of yourself forever... it was wonderful~
I also can appreciate the soft melty goopy digestion over burning acid pains, its a really nice touch and I love it~ <3
This was fantastic, and I can't wait to read more about this world in general. I'm very curious about the Nagaraja, the sirens, the vampires, and everything else really.
Posted by Predilection 7 years ago Report
Thank you for the kind words! I'm very glad you're excited for the world; your enthusiasm means a lot! I'm hoping to flesh it out a lot, though I will probably not be making many traditionally serialized stories. There will definitely be recurring characters, of course! Just, featured at more spaced out points in time, rather than a few days apart. This is another horror inspiration, and my hope is that it conveys a broader sense of "events in a world."
It's great to know you enjoyed the themes! That desire is pretty much my favorite part of it, too, and it's nice to see it appealing to others! Possessiveness is the motivation I like best in my preds. I really like the visuals of soft digestion, though I need to work on emphasizing them more in my writing. I also like it because a lack of pain lets certain undertones carry more mental weight. Isn't it that little bit more terrifying to know you should be begging for your life, even when your body's natural response to harm isn't going off? Doesn't that make it all the easier to give up, and surrender yourself to the pred? It certainly broke poor Sarah, here, with its temptation. Though, unlucky girl that she was, she was already well on her way to breaking. In a species capable of doing such things so easily, I think a slow but painless process leaves it with more potential as an act done without malice.
Thank you for commenting! I hope to live up to your expectations in future installments!
Posted by BondaBonda 4 years ago Report
Dayum, this is super hot! ???? This was such an enjoyable read! Loved the possessiveness of it all <3
Posted by Predilection 4 years ago Report
Thank you very much! I'm really glad that you liked it! The possessiveness is easily my favorite quality. I must say, your work is amazing, so I really appreciate the kind words.