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When a lion learns his rabbit girlfriend's family is about to lose their home, he decides to open his doors to them. Can a lion live peacefully with a house full of prey? Will their neighbors even give them the chance?
This story was written based on a prompt that I saw on combat 's recent poll. I thought it would be fun to write, and it was, but goodness did I let this get out of hand. It comes in at 18,000 words, just reaching novella length.
This story features soft, fatal vore and implied but not explicit sexual content.
If you read and enjoy this story, please leave a comment letting me know! Friendly criticisms and critiques are also welcome.
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Posted by ShadowedFigure 6 years ago Report
Great story!
Posted by Arta_Shrike 6 years ago Report
Glad you enjoyed!
Posted by Combat 6 years ago Report
Bloody hell. What a story! Fantastic as hell too.
Posted by Arta_Shrike 6 years ago Report
Haha, thank you! And thanks for the inspiration, too.
Posted by nbe21 6 years ago Report
Was a really good read. Like not even for the nomming. The story was just good!
Posted by Arta_Shrike 6 years ago Report
Very glad to hear, thanks for reading!
Posted by Wolfsage 6 years ago Report
Before I start reading, I need to know. Does it contain F/M or M/F vore?
Posted by Arta_Shrike 6 years ago Report
The vore scenes within the story portray a male pred with male and female prey. There are no female preds.
Posted by Wolfsage 6 years ago Report
Ok, then I guess it's not for me. Thanks for the warning :D
Posted by charlesdeleroy 6 years ago Report
I can't get over the fact that a world like this is so absolutely unstable socially, it'd devolve into brutal civil war within a week. No matter how they're constructed, these sorts of commonplace vore worlds ignore that there's simply no way the vast numbers of prey creatures would agree to live like this. They'd build weapons and slaughter predators before they even reached the Stone Age. It's just not plausible. Humans showed just how lethal a species becomes once they learn to fit sharp stones on sticks.
Then there's "Zootopia" which went too far the other way, unrealistically eliminating all trace of predatory behavior without explanation, save for the Night Howler effects.
I would love to see a society somewhere between these two impractical extremes: a place where the endless conflicts between multiple sapient species resulted in an uneasy truce and supplementary food had to be found for predators, yet some yearn for the hunt and some prey still harbor hatred and fear... you know, an world which somewhat resembles our world.
But even then, there's the one nagging question: How on earth do so many species gain sapience at the same time? And manage not to kill each other to the extent that only a handful remain before forming any civilization? Consider our Earth again, practically every other human ancestor was gone before even the first hints of organized society, with only Homo floresiensis perhaps lignering in Java until around the last Ice Age's end.
Life fights endlessly for survival, it's own survival, at the expense of any competition. Frankly, a story about how such a multi-species world could ever come into being would be far more interesting than just another preexisting construct.
Posted by Arta_Shrike 6 years ago Report
I can understand your frustration at the idea of the world prefabricated to allow for commonplace predation and vore. Something like this, with its own ethics and sense of the individual, really is alien to anything we see in our own world. If the world in the story was portrayed to more resemble our own, and there were truly no other source of food for preds than sentient prey species, then they certainly would not live peacefully side-by-side. Either prey species would develop the means to defend themselves and cast the preds out of civilization, or preds would take over and treat prey species like cattle. Especially the ones that actually were cattle.
But there we get into an assumption: that the story would be better if the world were to more resemble our own. And, frankly, I disagree. A common storytelling exercise is to take the world as we know it, throw on an assumption, and see how things would play out from there. The assumption could be "man is capable of space travel and can visit alien societies" (Star Trek), "a secret world of professional wizards exists hidden from the non-magical world" (Harry Potter) or "everyone is animals, and stereotypes from real-world ecological relations have become prejudices in this world" (Zootopia).
I don't doubt that you're right that a story examining how a multi-species world finding ways to overcome instinct and serious power discrepancies to create an actual, livable society would make for a fascinating story. But it wouldn't be a story in which I could examine how someone deals with living alongside a bunch of small people that law and instinct tell him are alright to eat. I wanted to explore the growth and emotions of living with a family of prey long enough to see them as more than that.
Clearly, getting past the very premise of the world was too big of a suspension of disbelief for you, and that's fine! Not every story is for everyone. But some stories can be quite resonant with those who can accept a story's assumptions. And no matter how well the backstory is fleshed out, all stories make assumptions that the emotional core of the tale itself is founded upon. I'm sorry my story's assumptions about its world were too much for you to accept, but thanks for your feedback anyway!
Posted by charlesdeleroy 6 years ago Report
My issue is, as I said: How does this world form in the first place? We can understand technology advancing. We've seen it. We can understand that wizards with magic would and could need to hide themselves.
But aside from that, I did find some of the events in the story itself rather far-fetched. After seeing the lion eating people, and some of their own kin almost eaten, knowing how close they are to death... the kids throw a rave in the lion's house.
Now, maybe they really are just that stupid... but in that case, I nominate them for Darwin Awards and WANT them to die! Not a single one showed a trace of common sense or hesitation... and in their situation, that doesn't seem plausible.
And it's not the first time I've seen this exact type of scene either.
One must always think of the CONTEXT and FRAMING of events in a story, such that they make sense within the world, AND with the characters taking part.
Posted by NaughtyHungryLion 6 years ago Report
This is amazing do keep up the good work!
Posted by Arta_Shrike 6 years ago Report
Very glad you enjoyed, thanks so much!
Posted by NaughtyHungryLion 6 years ago Report
no need for thanks it's you who is to thank for such wonderful writing! we need more lion preds in my opinion. ^^
Posted by BizzareBlue 6 years ago Report
Wow! I saw this a while back and have been meaning find the time to read it since then but didn't realize how gripping it was going to be. The moment I started it I was trapped. I just love the characters as well as the entire world and the rules it follows. The working-prey scheme in particular is an awesome concept and one I might have to borrow at some point. Absolutely loved this.
Posted by Arta_Shrike 6 years ago Report
AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH
Blue...really, you don't know what your comment means to me. You're one of my favorite vore writers, probably second only to rabbitinafoxden, so I'm knocked flat to learn you'd read my story and enjoyed it and took the time to let me know!
You are absolutely welcome to use the working-prey scheme concept in one of your own stories, please let me know if you do! You might have noticed I stole a bit from you, too, specifically a modified version of your hunting hours rules. Really, your writing was a big inspiration for this whole story.
Thank you again, very glad you enjoyed!!!
Posted by BizzareBlue 6 years ago Report
I'm really flattered to hear that and that my stuff helped inspire this. It is such a great story and I'd love to see more of this world.
Posted by Marked 6 years ago Report
Thank you very much for pointing me towards this wonderful story. Sigmund really is a gentle giant.
Posted by Arta_Shrike 6 years ago Report
D'awwww...And thank you for reading! I'm very glad you enjoyed!
Posted by kiba_surion 6 years ago Report
Very fun read indeed!
Posted by Arta_Shrike 6 years ago Report
Thank you! I’m very glad you enjoyed!
Posted by twilightwings 6 years ago Report
I dont have much to say but... this story is honestly one of the best I've read on this site. I wish a little more detail had gone into the vore... but otherwise it was mostly perfect.
Posted by Arta_Shrike 6 years ago Report
Thank you! You don't have to say much more!
Yeah, maybe I could have gone into more detail...but my goal was mostly to tell a good story with vore as a central element, moreso than to have detailed graphic descriptions of vore. I'll take it by your comment that I was successful!
Just out of curiosity, what sort of detail would you have been wanting? Detail about the prey's thoughts as they were swallowed? Depicting the digestion?
Posted by twilightwings 6 years ago Report
Its more om the actually eating of the prey that I like. I like reading about them liking their target over, maybe teasing them a bit on the way down.
Posted by xvx17 4 years ago Report
OMG esto me encanta! La forma en la que escribes es estupenda!
Posted by xvx17 4 years ago Report
Wow! Se que tal vez no leas esto, pero esroy realmente agradecido por tu trabajo, de las historias mas completas y buenas que he leido! La forma en como funciona la sociedad, los sentimientos de presas y depredadores, todo es tan perfecto! Gracias por escribir esto!
Posted by Arta_Shrike 4 years ago Report
Y gracias por leerlo! Sí, quería pensar detenidamente sobre cómo funcionaría el mundo y cómo interactuarían los depredadores y las presas, ¡me alegra saber que mi trabajo fue apreciado! Y en cuanto a ti, espero que puedas leer esto bien, no hablo español y tuve que pasarlo por un traductor. Pero gracias de nuevo por el amable comentario!
Posted by SnowbellWinters 1 year ago Report
I. Love. Sunny. So much. Fantasic characterization all around, but this overly-horny, dorky little ball of fur literally brightens every scene she's in. Great stuff, really!
Posted by juicefox 1 year ago Report
This is one of those stories that has stuck with me, and which I look back on time to time. The world building and character development is some of the best I've seen. The pred-feeder pair are very likable, and the motivations and actions of all the characters all makes sense. I really love the main couple tho, they are just so fantastic and really fun for vore.
Posted by HedoroMonogatari 1 year ago Report
Absolutely love the size class based system! Such a fun concept. And I adore the family dynamic! Odessa is a real trooper and such a lovely lady. And the ending has me so hooked! I've been meaning to do some chickens in my stories so this has me more than ever excited to try writing something like this. The romance was also very sweet. I really like the back and forth Sunny and Siggy have with each other, they are a fun couple. Excellent work!