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Tags: angst Drama Existential Existential horror F/F F/M Fatal feels Fox Fox Pred Hard Vore horror Long story M/M Male Pred Male Prey Multiple Preds No Sex Novella Rabbit Rabbit Prey Reintroduction reluctant prey Society Setting suicide Trauma Unwilling Pred Vignettes Vixen Vixen Pred Willing Pred Willing prey world building
A world colonized by rabbits. A staunch belief in the right to breed freely. A swelling population that is straining the resources of a planet that is still being terraformed. And a shocking idea: clone predators, and send them out into society to control the population.
This freaking novella explores the ramifications of creating people to kill in a society not accustomed to vore, it's effects on the general population, and more importantly, it's effects on the innocent predators forced into the role of judge, jury, and executioner.
There is so. Much. Drama. So many feels.
This story was written for CindyTaur in my continuing job to write whatever the hell she tells me as best as I can. As always, it was a freaking blast. I rarely get to really explore characters, and it's so much fun to torture the poor babs.
And I'm just going to say up front: Barkil is my fault. Sorry bout that.
Speaking of my work with Cindy, we have a Free First Friday coming up this Friday. 3F is a monthly project sponsored by Cindy.
Basically, she pays me to write four or five free requests on the first Friday of every month, submitted by fans! You can still submit ideas up til Wednesday, Aug 1 at 11:59pm EST.
To submit, just go to this link, read the rules and click the link to submit!
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Posted by x9comega 6 years ago Report
Good Lord man, this is something I'll need to print out and bind with leather to read!
Posted by immortalsane 6 years ago Report
Lol, woman, but yesh, it's pretty hefty!
Posted by supersaiyango 6 years ago Report
This was beautiful.
Posted by immortalsane 6 years ago Report
Thankies!
Posted by Tsubasa17 6 years ago Report
So you made Watership Down, but without humans and for vore...
Must. Read. Alot.
Posted by immortalsane 6 years ago Report
You know, I have never read Watership Down? I really need to...
I hope you enjoy!
Posted by CindyTaur 6 years ago Report
I, however, am a fan. It wasn't on my mind when I was telling Sane the details of what I wanted, but I can't say it doesn't fit.
"Long ago, the great Frith made the world. He made all the stars and the world lived among the stars. Frith made all the animals and birds and, at first, made them all the same. Now, among the animals was El-Ahrairah, the Prince of Rabbits. He had many friends and they all ate grass together. But after a time, the rabbits wandered everywhere, multiplying and eating as they went. Then Frith said to El-Ahrairah, "Prince Rabbit, if you cannot control your people, I shall find ways to control them." But El-Ahrairah would not listen and said to Frith, "My people are the strongest in the world." This angered Frith, so he determined to get the better of El-Ahrairah. He gave a present to every animal and bird, making each one different from the rest. When the fox came and others, like the dog and cat, hawk and weasel, to each of them, Frith gave a fierce desire to hunt and slay the children of El-Ahrairah."
Posted by immortalsane 6 years ago Report
That is glorious. I REALLY need to read it now.
Posted by VampireBunny 6 years ago Report
when you come for the lewds but stay for the depression and existential dread of horror and entropy
Posted by immortalsane 6 years ago Report
Rofl,thanks!
Posted by VampireBunny 6 years ago Report
Jokes aside though I can tell your really talented and did a good job, not your fault this kept me up all night with a pit in my stomach lol
Posted by immortalsane 6 years ago Report
O.o I'm sorry! I mean, I'm glad it resonated with you like that, but I'm sorry you had a bad reaction to it! Should I tag it existential horror?
Posted by VampireBunny 6 years ago Report
Don't bother yourself for just for me, my reactions to things are my fault for being stupid.
But have you ever heard of the uncanny valley? I feel like it exists for writing too now, like if something is written extremely outlandishly and unbelievable, no problem, if somethings partially outlandish, same thing, extremely realistic, no issue as well. But theres just one tiny area when somethings both outlandish and believable which causes that uncanny feeling, like with those robots with faces. Probably just me though, its all in my head, but its interesting anyway.
Sorry I got off track there but yeah I love your writing skill, just struck a psychological weakpoint in my psyche I didnt know was wide open and made me throw up XD I'm sure everyone has something like this that triggers and unsettles their consciousness in a way they cant fully understand.
If I were you I would add the tag, because in this kinda community tags like "angst" can just mean some goofy sonic fan fiction, I don't think it specifies enough, but thats just me, I never want to feel like im pressuring people into stuff they don't like for my sake. :c
Posted by immortalsane 6 years ago Report
Rofl, you are the second person to ever admit that something I wrote made them vomit.
I definitely shoot for that uncanny valley feeling, where the preposterous feels possible, creating cognitive dissonance. When I write dystopian themes, I want people to feel it in their bones, that this could happen, no matter how ridiculous it seems. The discomfort you feel is kinda intentional, but I didn't think it would hit anyone that hard.
I will deffo add that tag, no pressure needed. I didn't think of it as existential horror, but now that it's been pointed out to me, I totally see it.
Posted by VampireBunny 6 years ago Report
Hmm, I guess It's nice to hear I'm not just crazy then.
But yeah, since you're intentionally shooting for that uncanny sour spot, I take it back, you should definitely use that tag. I couldn't tell for sure though because I'm a stupid sensitive bunny so I thought I was alone in that.
I feel a little bit more mature talking to you though. 14 year old me 4 years ago would have just wrote something rude and mad in all caps. But here I am, chattering and making peace with the person who gave my spinal cord a bad cold. Well, social peace, the back of my mind doesn't agree and is still very upset XD
I've become aware theres kinda a split here on this site and community about the line between story and sexy, and how hard it is to tell what something is before going into it. While I never want to do anything remotely like this, I'm writing alot of stories (I just havent uploaded any because i'm nervous) and I think I'm going to try to separate them into content with dialogue, battles, and backstory, and etc, and then a separate thingy for those who want to just quickly jump into the lewdness, I'm thinking it could catch on, or maybe its a dumb idea. But my thinking is someone can go for the lewdness first, then when they are finished and calmed down, see the story behind it kinda like a prequel.
But probably dont follow me because it's going to be the polar opposite of this.
Anyway thanks for responding kind and gently to me, In fact... Don't read this part if your bored and hate hearing me talk, but I've never actually told this to anyone before and you just reminded me of a life lesson I learned...
When I was a very, very, young child, I went trick or treating around my neighborhood, When I came to the house across the street from mine, a lady came out to give candy to the other kids with me, I was a nosy bun though, and saw the tips of shiny dress shoes around the corner and peered over to see them, then slowly looked up and saw a scary person hiding in the shadows. I never knew what he was but remembering just now I realized he was cosplaying Heath Ledger's Joker with the face paint and everything, needless to say I ran away screaming and hid behind some bushes while everyone searched frantically to find me, I thought it wasn't a costume because they were hiding.
But heres where you come in. I think about 2 days later I was invited over back there by my neighbors and this man shook my hand and told me he was the one I saw that day and that he was only hiding because he would only jump out and scare the big kids.
After that I wasn't afraid anymore because the curtains came down and like in the wizard of oz, theres a person behind it. Meeting the real life normal person behind what scared me, is comforting.
Same thing with you, I imagine 14 year old, yelling at you, me would be much less comfortable and stable than me because he wouldn't see the person behind the scare, the normal, everyday person just like me, that I'm happy I got to talk too.
Posted by immortalsane 6 years ago Report
Sorry it took me so long to get back to you!
Lol, I like all kindsa things, hun. I'm just known for horror, so that's mostly what I write. So I may follow you, see what you're up to, see if I like your style.
That is an awesome story, hun. I'm glad you got that opportunity, to see the man behind the mask, and I'm glad you took the time to see the woman behind the existential horror this time. You've been a delight to talk to, and again, I'm sorry I've been out of pocket and haven't responded.
Posted by VampireBunny 6 years ago Report
No worries, It's no problem, I mean yeah I was really embarrassed thinking my story was so pathetic that you ignored me but thats just my low self esteem and anxiety not you XD
But you'd probobly only see something after you've forgotten about me because I don't intend to upload anything until I have alot more vore stories written, In case I find my style more and would want to go back and change things and etc.
But I really did enjoy meeting you, I'll see ya around! ...Well actually i'm going to have to avoid your stuff specifically.
...Maybe instead, Best wishes! ^w^
Posted by nomnomvore 5 years ago Report
Wow that was an adventure! I didn't sign up for this feels trip!
Posted by immortalsane 5 years ago Report
Rofl, thanks! And uh, yeah, it turned feelsy fast, lol.
Posted by Tahg 4 years ago Report
Ah, why do stories like this always make me cry but only when they get to the happy ending? (In this case about the time the testimony to Parliament started.) I get what others are saying that Horror is probably appropriate, but it's also IMO, at least as much as a situation like this can have one, a HEA ending. As I sit here currently trying to avoid paying attention to the insanity going on in the real world atm, I wonder if we'll ever recover like the foxes managed to do.
Posted by immortalsane 4 years ago Report
Heh, to be completely fair, that's kinda by design in this case? It boils up, and that's the bob and turn point, the point where the feels climax and start to crescendo. That's the part that I, THE AUTHOR, cry at.
but also, that kind of cathartic expression, of things going well unexpectedly, or relief, of the trauma being released and starting to heal, is a massive emotional whammy. Part of why I hate a lot of horror films, cause they always hit that point and in the last second or two of screen time, slam it in reverse and bring the horror back online so they can sequel it.
Also why my own horror stories tend to just grind straight down and wallow in it, then fade to black. I don't like the "Happy Ending...sike!" fakeouts.
Posted by TestAccountPleaseIgnore 3 years ago Report
Huh, this is basically what I'm writing.
Not vore as a fetish, vore as "holy fuck this world is fucking fucked up and insane".
Posted by immortalsane 3 years ago Report
LOL, I write a lot of crapsaccharine and straight dystopia, it's an underserved market. Glad you like it!
Posted by HungryFox3586 1 year ago Report
Where would I find that, I don't see anything on your account.
Posted by gingerkitsune 3 years ago Report
This was amazing. It's quite different from the works I've seen from you thus far, and while those are more vore and gore for the sake of itself, this is far deeper. Complex existential battles, world building, vignettes that tie into a master story, along with self-determination and fighting for acceptance - this is perfect.
That there are fox preds that bite into their prey and crunch through bone slowly over several days is a total bonus - even if they are guilty about eating willing prey.
Posted by ponylucario 2 years ago Report
I really cannot express how much I love this. Jera was easily my favorite character, she was so kind and caring and just wanted to live a happy life and let the rabbits around her enjoy life, too! The whole story was so fleshed out, all the characters had wonderful arcs. The ending was so cathartic, all the trauma of these poor characters being addressed and allowed to heal. The willing rabbits were so cute! There's so much to say about this and I wish I could say how much I adored this. I wasn't expecting to cry so hard at the end but it was so good. Thank you for crafting this masterpiece.
Posted by immortalsane 2 years ago Report
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! This remains one of my favorite things I've ever written.
Posted by ponylucario 2 years ago Report
I love the kind of intimacy you put into your writings, the romanticism of it all makes it such a treat! I'm not even really into hard vore, but the way you describe it without really focusing on the body horror too much while making everyone act casual like this is just an awkward part of life is so neat! Your worldbuilding and character building is so good and I wish I knew how to properly gush more haha ^^