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Daisy is feeling rather bored with her life lately, but decides to change it all with a little bit of ancient magic.
Yee, I finally finished this!
It's been quite a while since I wrote anything, but I decided to come back for a bit, or a while. Who knows! Anyway, I hope y'all enjoy this.
I wanted to experiment with transformation sequences as you probably could tell.
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Posted by 10younameit 5 years ago Report
There are problems with this story
1 why would daisy get bored and decied to digest the mushroom kingdom and princess peach it doesn't make sense.
2 why would daisy use magic to turn herself into a koopa.
3 why didn't daisy just go see luigi where are the mario bros in this story.
I give this story 3 out of 10 you could of done better in writing this story why 3 out 10 well the story didn't make sense,there are problems with daisy's motives the idea of daisy digesting peach and her people for enternment is just wrong and sick. A rewrite would be a good choice
Know what I think I would give this story to youtuber shadow reader.
Posted by Twisty22 5 years ago Report
i agree with literally everything this guy said. why didnt daisy use magic to turn herself into a mother friggin koopa
Posted by 10younameit 5 years ago Report
You misread my comment what i meant by why would daisy use magic to turn herself into a koopa. Was what happen in this story she did transform herself
Posted by ItsSongxing 5 years ago Report
There are problems with this comment
1 buckets said why daisy was bored, nothing happens, but then she got hungry so she ate peach
2 why wouldn't daisy use magic to turn herself into a koopa, why be a lame human when you can be a giant fire-breathing turtle
3 clearly mario was trying to stop bowser from stealing historical treasures and driving jirard khalil to murder while luigi was then trying to find mario somewhere instead of somewhen
I give this comment 3 out of 10 you could have done better in writing this review why 3 out of 10 well there are problems with the grammar and buckets explaining daisy's motives, the idea of daisy digesting peach and her people for enternment is as wrong and sick as the rest of this fetishized not-cannibalism and thus hot. A rewrite of this review letting kinks be would be a good choice
Know what I think I would give this story to twitterdotcom aryion_txt
Posted by 10younameit 5 years ago Report
1st the reason is stupid there are no consiquesyes for her actions and it makes daisy look like an jerk aka a**hole
Posted by Eka 5 years ago Report
Is this supposed to be a meme? If so. Less of it. This site isn't for you to meme on.
Posted by 10younameit 5 years ago Report
No it's not a meme unless your talking about somthibg else it's just cristism
Posted by Eka 5 years ago Report
Like this part for example:
> There are problems with daisy's motives the idea of daisy digesting peach and her people for enternment is just wrong and sick.
And especially this part:
> Know what I think I would give this story to youtuber shadow reader.
That is not "criticism" that is just "telling off on personal preference".
It sounds like you have a hard time understanding the intent of a story and the demographic target. Or you don't understand the purpose of this website. Stories here are not written for you. They are written for people who find them pleasurable. Criticism should focus on language technicality rather than personal preference. For the reason highlighted above I think you should ease off on your so call "criticism".
Also it is really difficult to take your "criticism" seriously when your "criticism" is full of grammatical and spelling errors.
Posted by Messiah 4 years ago Report
Nice story also this man got burned just yikes