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Cloud vs Daisy By CloudieLover -- Report

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Cloud skipped breakfast today.

(I would appreciate if someone were to draw this story)

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thicceater

Posted by thicceater 12 days ago Report

Ooo this is really lovely! Very nice for your first fic here <3

CloudieLover

Posted by CloudieLover 11 days ago Report

Are your commissions free

thicceater

Posted by thicceater 10 days ago Report

Nope ^^;
But i am willing to do trades! :D

RexLou

Posted by RexLou 12 days ago Report

Some good ideas but this should be fleshed out more in the future. You tell us about some cool things happening but don't spend much time on them, and that leaves this feeling more like an outline than a full story. Still, these are some fun ideas. A smash tournament that turns into impromptu vore? That can be super great! This just needs some more time in the oven. Flesh out the fight, study the swallowing, devote some to digestion. If you wanna read a really good smash-themed vore fic, check out Family Matchups by lllll1337, or some of thicceater's fics. The time they spend on the postvore and the swallowing really sets those stories apart and could make your stories great too. Again, not a bad start, some super fun ideas here. There's just a lot of room for more.