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Hello everybody. I bring forward a new story for you all. It is not one of the two which I had planned to upload next but it is a story nonetheless! Don't worry I am still working on those other two for anybody interested! I ended up writing this one because I got really burnt out with the other two. Hopefully I'll be able to get back to those soon. This story comes it at 9,000 words, bit shorter than normal but I think its still a fun story to read.
The story is about an ego driven magician doing everything he can to become one of the greats. Although he is truly an incredible performer, his ego and drive can get in the way of normal safety standards for volunteers. Want to know more? Gonna make you read it >:)
Again - I know I sound like a broken record at this point - please leave what you think in the comments below! I really appreciate your comments and/or feedback! Did you like it? Did you hate it? Was the story too silly? Was it too short? Was this pred your kinda thing or do you like other types of preds?
Cheers!
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Posted by quest 4 years ago Report
nice story and thanks for the story
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
Thanks! I'm glad that you liked it!
Posted by theheadsn 4 years ago Report
very good build up and especially love the accidental(ish? lol) vore angle. Great story for sure
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
Yeah, the angle could be a bit hard to believe but I think it's pretty fun. Thanks for the comment!
Posted by Altimos 4 years ago Report
A fanTASTIC scenario... loved it. Excellent job <3 <3 <3
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
Ah thank you! Awesome to see that you loved the scenario! It is definitely unique as far as im aware.
Posted by phantom131 4 years ago Report
Always loved the idea of vore situations in magic acts
The buildup to the final act seemed phenomenal, at least in my opinion.
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
Yeah, I felt like magic shows don't get enough macro/micro love and I needed for my own sake to write a story about it. I'm happy to hear that the buildup to the final act was effective! Thanks for the comment. Cheers!
Posted by JustSomePrey 4 years ago Report
It'd be funny to see her reaction, say he survived the trip. Would she keep her new toy, would she realize he's real, would she care?
I do think at some point though as he's struggling away and screaming for mercy she, or her friend would realize he's real. Especially since one would think she'd be interested in talking to him about it and try to find him.
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
I think it would definitely be interesting to see what would happen if he survived. Especially because the pred didn't eat him "intentionally" (strong emphasis on intentionally lol). I would hope she would realize eventually that he is real and, 'would she keep him?' is a good question... we don't really know much about Kristen. Maybe she has a bit of a fucked up mind and would keep him as some sort of pet? But yeah I feel like if she did get a lot more time to talk to him she would have at least been convinced that he was a real tiny human. I feel like maybe I should try writing stories where the prey survives the digestion process but I'm just so into the whole fatal digestion thing right now that I don't see it happening soon :(
Anyway, thanks a lot for the comment Justsomeprey, hope to see ya around! Cheers!
Posted by JustSomePrey 4 years ago Report
I'm just glad to hear you might be interested in writing a non-fatal story.
Posted by C107galaxytachyon 4 years ago Report
Reformations’ always an option, y’know.
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
Hmmm, reformation to me still feels like non-fatal to me. Technically the prey dies with reformation but its just not the same. I dunno, maybe just how reformation doesn't have the same consequences as pure fatal... Not sure tbh. If I was to do a non-fatal story I'd probably just do a more traditional non-fatal without reformation.
Posted by shortprey20 4 years ago Report
Loved it! The teasing was my favorite bit! Just well done characters and vore scene!
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
I fucking love teasing in stories. Cheers dude.
Posted by henry19991217 4 years ago Report
Incredible work!Just keep going.The vore part is fabulous!Love your writting style.I wonder if Andy still alive?Can he escape from the fucking hell of that belly? （*¯ㅿ¯*）
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
Ahh, you're gonna make me tear up, you're too kind! Now I just wanna never stop writing lol.
...Is Andy still alive? Is there still much hope for him? ...I guess the answers to those questions are now all up to what you think! ...I think Andy got rather lucky...
Anyway, cheers!
Posted by Hozomat 4 years ago Report
Well, once again, you are really good at building up the story and the tension! Clearly, we could guess where it was headed, but it was hard to guess how the vore would happen exactly! Good job on keeping the suspense, although the outburst of the public wanting Andy dead felt a bit exagerated, but it made sense.
However, I think the build-up could have been a tad shorter, while the vore scene could have been longer! Less magic tricks, more belly scenes...I think you could have described how Andy felt as Kristen was walking out of the theater, bumping him around, for instance!
That's a subjective opinion, but I'm kinda straigthforward when it comes to vore. ^^
I'm currently writing a new giantess vore story, I'd be curious to hear your criticism on it for once, whenever it's out! ^^
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
Mmmmm yeah, the audience was bit bit pushy I have to admit. I had to make them pushy to try find some excuse to why in the world would someone, who has no interest in vore(Kristen), eat a tiny person. Definitely will have to try re-think the whole, 'having a pred that isn't into being an actual pred'. I think it can work but sticking to a pred that actually wants to eat prey for the sake of eating is a safer route.
As for the length stuff, while I agree the vore scene should have been longer, personally I don't think the build-up should have been shorter. I like having buildup to establish the setting, characters and mood. (Now how well I established all that is debatable lol). The scenes with Andy in the stomach should have definitely been longer though. Looking back at it, I'm not sure why I thought it was enough. I went into this story with the intention of making it shorter than my others, but looking back, a mindset like that is probably not a good one. Fortunately I have another longer story probably coming out soon, with MUCH more vore.
Thanks for the feedback Hozomat, I always appreciate honest feedback and thank you for taking the time. I will be eagerly waiting for your new giantess vore story to come out! Very much looking forward to that.
Cheers.
Posted by Adelais 4 years ago Report
Wow! Magnificent. What lucky volunteers!
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
:) Cheers Adelais!
Posted by Insideurstomach 4 years ago Report
Very interesting story, never read anything with a plot like this before (in terms of the situation in which the consumption takes place). I agree with some of the criticisms that other people have had but overall really enjoyed the story. Great job! Can’t wait for the next story, I’m very excited for “much more vore” lmao. (Sorry for commenting so late, I like never log in on this site).
Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report
Thanks for the comment Inside. Was wondering if you'd read this story or not so its nice to see your comment. This story was a bit of a quick little one I just made for fun. I didn't try too hard on it and i'll probably try avoid writing shorter random stories like this is the future. In somewhat good news, I've been sitting on a big story thats been finished for weeks now but I haven't published it yet because I'm just too lazy to fix some parts up. I'll probably try force myself into finalizing it soon. If you have the time, I'm curious to hear what kind of stuff you like in vore stories. Like, whats your favourite part of your these stories when you read them?
Anyway... thanks for the kind comment! See ya around!
I might also be working on Vore University 4 on the side but thats a secret!
Posted by Insideurstomach 4 years ago Report
That’s great to hear! I’ll be looking out for that new story soon, can’t wait! And I’d be glad to share some of my opinions and preferences and such in vore stories when I get a chance (like I said, I barely log into this site).Vore University is probably my favorite series of stories so I’m glad to hear there’s another installment coming.
Happy writing!
Posted by kbDArt 2 years ago Report
Really liked the story. You really come up with some good ideas for stories. Would you mind if I do a rewrite for it?
Posted by iliketoread 2 years ago Report
Thanks! For this one? Sure, just make sure to credit me for the original version of it :)
Posted by kbDArt 2 years ago Report
Thanks! I will certainly do. :)
Posted by zhanye_00 1 year ago Report
I wanna be in this magic show !
Posted by iliketoread 1 year ago Report
God I wish that were me...
Also, glad to see you back on the site. Love your work!
Posted by zhanye_00 1 year ago Report
You are one of the reasons i came back (i wish was a carrot haha )