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A recent RP session I had that I've adapted into a 2nd-person POV story for your enjoyment. I've been stuck on the notion of writing 2nd-person stories recently, kind of like a single-player RP (maybe with a CYOA twist or two), to put the reader directly in the scene.
Would anyone be interested in 2nd-person POV stories? Or should I stick to standard 3rd-person?
As always, I'd love to hear what you think! Thanks for reading.
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Posted by DarkSideOfTheSun 4 years ago Report
Great story! Definitely one of the better ones for my taste in a while :D I always love casual vore (for the preds ;P) settings, and this definitely hit my buttons about it. The idea of designated "student lunch day" is novel and very kinky, I love it :D
Tbh, I didn't pay much attention to the 2nd person viewpoint, so can't give much feedback about that.
Posted by TheRealRD 4 years ago Report
Thank you so much for the detailed comment! It hit almost all of my buttons too, so that’s great to hear.
Also, the fact that you “didn’t pay attention” to the POV is very interesting, because I thought the biggest drawback of 2nd-person fiction is the reader becoming tired of being bombarded by “you.”
“You say, you look, you do, you try, you think....”
I’m not going to make it my gimmick or anything but it’s fun to experiment. Thanks again!
Posted by Genericcook 4 years ago Report
Love it! I think my preference is still 3rd person, however its always engaging to try new things, and it was super solid and fun overall!
Posted by TheRealRD 4 years ago Report
Appreciate the comment and the honest answer, thanks!
Posted by KaiserDunk 4 years ago Report
Interesting story format from the perspective of the female longpigs. I do wonder, though; is this an all-girl school, or was it just an unlucky day that it was all three girls selected to be cooked for lunch and no male longpigs?
Posted by TheRealRD 4 years ago Report
I’m all about equality in meat but the gal I was playing with just wanted girls on the menu, so that’s how this one went. I have plenty of Vore stories involving male prey, and I’m kicking around a few cannibal stories featuring male meat.
Posted by Genericcook 4 years ago Report
I do want to mention though, the 2nd person perspective really let shine the predicament of the meat, and personal attitude towards the situation. While 3rd person is subjectively my preference, don't let anyone dissuade you from experimenting more with any style. Despite being a pred, the perspective of the meat is ultra important to me, and to a great story like this one.
Posted by ragnar 4 years ago Report
It's wonderful to see you back!
Posted by TheRealRD 2 years ago Report
Sorry for the late reply but I can't believe ragnar is commenting on my stories! Thank you so much, man! I love pretty much all your stuff -- the surreal cruelty and casualness of your vore art is right up my alley! Thank you so much for reading and commenting!
Posted by ragnar 2 years ago Report
You're kidding, "Chris' turn" is one of my absolute all-time favourites. I'm happy to hear you like my stuff too!
Posted by TheRealRD 2 years ago Report
WTF, I'm gonna die from blushing! You're one of my favorite kinky artists of all time so hearing this is just blowing my mind to pieces. Keep making your super-sexy art and let me know if there's something particular you'd like to see me write!
Posted by Lockou 4 years ago Report
Just out of curiosity, you mention a girl almost making it before being tackled in the parking lot, if she had gotten off the school grounds. would that have made her fully safe?
Posted by TheRealRD 2 years ago Report
lol no
Their fate's already sealed no matter what, but there's always a couple who panic and run anyway.