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What if Julie, Lori and the Carraways, felt bad for Markus, what if they felt bad for what had happened to him and decided to try something drastic, to make it right?
My half of a trade.
Cover art credit goes to original artist. An' don't ask me who it is, I have zero clue, I just found the picture on google.
Original: https://aryion.com/g4/view/575613
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Posted by FireRed2 4 years ago Report
Nice work
Posted by elliotalien08 4 years ago Report
This is awesome!
Posted by Spider8Fiend 4 years ago Report
Oh, oh my... this was fantastic ^_^ Great job, I loved these characters and their story!
Posted by Lewdghost 4 years ago Report
Well, here's hoping Markus either retains his memory or he(and perhaps even better his sisters too) regains his/their memories as they grow up again.
Posted by doomed 4 years ago Report
I’m assuming that part two esults one him getting feee and killing them when he grows up. Or that he grows up to hate them and leaves them to never return .
Posted by WillingWombPrey 4 years ago Report
I don't think there's gonna be a part2 unless the person I made the trade with, will request it for another trade.
Posted by LemonBarb 4 years ago Report
Frankly, part 2 wise? I think this is, the part 2? Or "better a looming vore fate, than just left to simmer in angst, suffering and hatred." Until a possible murder bad end happened, if not something just as dark...
But eh, that said. Nice to see you writing little stories and alternate endings again, WillingWombPrey!
Posted by elliotalien08 4 years ago Report
I like this ending, they all get to atay together and start a new life, the orphanage remains open abd the ladies get their family i think its a win for everyone
Posted by doomed 4 years ago Report
Lol That’s definitely not a win for everybody, they essentially forced 4 people into a state of Stockholm syndrome and hit away with it . To call that a win-win implies that no one lost anything. Clearly , Darius lost his life , his inheritance, his memories , and even his sisters . In fact I’d even go as far to say that in this version they killed Darius . As you can’t say he’d be the same person as he was when he went in.
Posted by elliotalien08 4 years ago Report
I don't know what Stockholm syndrome is, but i prefer this ending, the ladies get their kids the orphanage owners get paid and the children get a fresh start with a loving family. I get it was Unwilling but if they don't remember then technically they are happy its a grey area where morals and philosophy come into play but id rather they all be together and happy than him alone and depressed
Posted by doomed 4 years ago Report
Stockholm syndrome is to put it simply , a condition where a victim begins to sympathize and want to protect they’re captors. It can even result in the victims feeling a sense of “ love “ for they’re abuser .
In this case , it’s forced Stockholm syndrome as in this ending hes forced into it by them murdering his original self .
And him if he had his memories Darius would rather live free and depressed then enslaved lol
Posted by elliotalien08 4 years ago Report
Maybe so but thats just it would it be better, be alone with little chance of rescuing his sisters viewed as that guy with the insane story. Or the kid with a loving family and his sisters beside him. Maybe he didn't agree and maybe if he remembered he would hate it but what are the alternatives
Posted by doomed 4 years ago Report
Hilariously, the author wrote two alternate routes to this story .
The first being murder them In Cold blood and get his sitters back ,
The second was to get someone else to unbirth the kids and give them back their memories .
Posted by elliotalien08 4 years ago Report
I read those both were great but i gotta admit i like this one best, just my preference though
Posted by doomed 4 years ago Report
Understandable, you’re preference is that he join them rather than be given back his sisters and the Calloway find three other children .
Posted by elliotalien08 4 years ago Report
It is, though i guess im mostly thinking they dont have to remember all the bad events anymore and the orphanage ladies can rest easy. What about you? Whats your favorite ending
Posted by doomed 4 years ago Report
Given the fact that irl , a child has the right to refuse to be adopted by certain parents , the fact that this is blatant child endangerment, I like the ending where they are stripped of the kids immediately . Rather then him being forced to gi through all the trauma . The murder ending is too dark but it’s also the outcome I’d expect from this story . As the moment he goes through puberty , if her embers anything , he’s going to kill them
Posted by elliotalien08 4 years ago Report
Thats a fair assumption i dont like ghe murder ending but this and the rescue endinhs are my favourite
Posted by WillingWombPrey 4 years ago Report
I wrote the murder ending one, because there are cases where someone snaps, Frank Castle, when they lose their loved ones for one reason or another.
Posted by elliotalien08 4 years ago Report
Where have i heard that name... i swear ive heard frank Castle before. I understand that ending but its just not my preference thats all
Posted by WillingWombPrey 4 years ago Report
Marvel's Punisher.
Posted by elliotalien08 4 years ago Report
Ah that explains it and yeah that is a good example
Posted by doomed 4 years ago Report
The murder one is the most logical tho tbh . You should do more versions like that lol
Posted by LemonBarb 4 years ago Report
Honestly, can't help but think if it got that far. There's probably a chance that if a "Snap ending" might have happened, the alternative might have been Markus being vored, and regretfully 'had' to be digested. And if I did a take on that, even if the predators got away under "Self-Defense", it'd still be a bit (less?) Tragic, in how his demise 'might' have happened there..
But enough about alt endings. Still got alt "ideas" that I need to spend some time to write up, at some point... :|
Posted by doomed 4 years ago Report
See that is pretty much what happened In this version already . They essentially are killing Markus . If they did it again, then no matter what they do the girls will never truly love them . The way I see it ,, their only hope is to be decent enough parents that when Markus tells the sisters what these murderers did , the sisters don’t hate them as much as Markus : that rift can heal . Because if they kill Markus even if it’s before he tells his sisters ; the b words lose lose their “ daughters “
Posted by Nightcrawler99 4 years ago Report
This was really good! I would love to see a sequel to this.
Something set like, 18 years later, with Markus and/or his sisters remembering EVERYTHING threw a series of nightmares they soon realize are repressed memories. Like they figure it out while talking about the dreams in secret and that's when they realize the truth.
It leads to a rough confrontation the Carraways aren't expecting.
However... having been given such a good life, they can't follow threw with any serious revenge plots.
Posted by darkmoon64 4 years ago Report
I don't understand, This is a peaceful ending or a tragic ending
I thought women were going to regret it, but they kidnapped him too
I was hoping that the story would be calmer
Posted by Sanserror 1 month ago Report
Does anyone have the og downloaded because i remember reading it but not fully