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Mistakes aren't always a bad thing.
This one took a bit longer because I fussed a lot about getting the timing right, but going forward I'll just say that stories can be as long as they need to be. So, good news for everyone who's enjoying the banter and bits of lore.
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Posted by Artthegreat 3 years ago Report
Wait, is she about to eat the girl she came to rescue? After making the effort to save her seems a bit like it defeats the purpose of saving her.
Posted by Birichino 3 years ago Report
Well, she was trying to do it without revealing she was a predator. I guess you'll have to wait and see...
Posted by Mechdragon1k 3 years ago Report
She could just kidnap her or being trying to comfort here.
I do like the terrifying rescuers trope.
Posted by TheBlindSalmon 3 years ago Report
Calling it now, Maggie's surname is going to be another one for the set mentioned in part 1 and that will somehow be the deciding factor that she lives.
Posted by Birichino 3 years ago Report
Hey, now, are you saying Rosemary would hinge someone's fate on such a shallow thing? Because she might.
Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 3 years ago Report
Isnt Maggie a type of flower? Have we found our third plant person lol. Either way I hope she can keep a secret, otherwise Sage the negotiator is gonna have to work his magic.
Posted by Birichino 3 years ago Report
I was loosely thinking "Margaret" instead of "Magnolia", but cute idea! If nothing else, I'm sure she has no intention of making an enemy out of Rosemary now.
Posted by chance10 3 years ago Report
hope maggie becomes a adorable Reoccurring character, also I just love your character writing so making the main this trio would be dope
Posted by Birichino 3 years ago Report
Well, anything's possible. Aside from her keeping that delivery job, at least. And thank you! I'm really proud of my characters.
Posted by chance10 3 years ago Report
btw calling it now, rosemary has a crush on maggie
Posted by Birichino 3 years ago Report
An interesting theory...
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
AAAA, the *cliffhangers*!! Every time! LOL
No but seriously, what a spot to end off on after this 3-chapter binge of mine. I couldn't put it down!
I'm a sucker for all these little back-and-forth interactions, whether comedic, genuine, or flirty and lewd, and for all you said about how this storyline would be much more story-focused than vore-focused, you've done a really good job at integrating the two together. Like, it always feels like it's *about* both aspects, even when switching between the two. Neither feels sacrificed in favor of the other at any point.
You can definitely feel a strong bond developing between Sage and Rosemary in spite of (and sometimes driven by?) his apprehension and her instincts, and it's lovely. They really seem to be opening up to each other (a bit moreso her than him, but I mean she's the pred here, what can ya do). Perhaps she'll be opening up *literally* soon enough, if Sage's "curiosity" ends up getting the best of him any time soon...
The climactic face-off at the end was quite something, too! Even if it was mostly a one-sided beatdown, perhaps that's to be expected. We've yet to really see Rosemary show off her strength until now, and it's clear that all her training was put to good use. Surely that's not all just stuff you pick up from working out at the gym. Perhaps she did some self-defense training back when she aspired to be a cop?
And I'm really interested in seeing where things go with Maggie! Where she'll fit into things, and all. She's a real cutie, and I'd hate to see her have to suffer any more than she already has, but something tells me she's not out of the woods yet... Best-case scenario, even if she's gonna be just fine, after an encounter like that, I doubt your life ever quite returns to normal...
Great stuff, as always! I'm looking forward to what comes next, whatever and whenever that may be!
Posted by Birichino 3 years ago Report
You're in luck! I literally just posted the next one before I saw these!
I would say the vore has been a pretty light touch so far, but if what I did include is satisfying, that's great news.
Their relationship is...well, whatever and however it might go, it's sure to be fairly intense. I hope it's not moving too fast when not even a week has passed.
Rosemary's got a lot of experiences behind her smarmy attitude! Eventually, these two will have to talk about their Tragic Backstories(tm), but until then, that's a very good guess.
Maggie is an interesting one. If I were to hint at anything about her, I'd say that she has a lot more inner strength than you'd think. At least, strength enough to resist that brunette's innards.
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
Oh, nice! I'll be sure to jump on that right after writing this, then.
Well, the vore itself has been light, true, but honestly the teasing and discussion of it can be just as satisfying. There's something about discussing these topics semi-casually but with the proper amount of caution that I find appealing. And I must admit that the setup of Rosemary holding herself back for the sake of companionship while always having the offer open is alluring in itself.
No, I don't think things are moving too fast. If you're worried you could maybe toss a couple of day skips in there or something, but I don't think it's a problem. What we have here is a couple of individuals who are both going through unfamiliar territory. Sage is learning more about the nature of predators for the first time and overcoming his preconceptions, while Rosemary is opening up about her inner workings and doing some introspection as a result. And by the looks of things, both are just generally not really quite used to such agreeable company. For two people in such a position, it's only natural for things to move a little quickly. It seems like they're both what the other needed for quite some time. (And it's not like there's been any massive developments juuust yet, "the offer" aside.)
And yeah, about Maggie, that is true! There was all that stuff mentioned earlier about willpower in relation to digestion. Clearly Maggie has the resolve to keep in one piece at the very least. So what might that say about her? Knowing you, I'm sure there's gonna be something I won't be expecting. You always are good at making characters multi-dimensional.
I was expecting to keep this brief, but it looks like I've dropped another rambling wall on you... Sorry about that.
Posted by Birichino 3 years ago Report
Well, as of that next one, I'm finally clear to skip ahead without it being strange that nothing exceptional happened in that time, so that's a nice option. I may use the space to explore other ideas for a bit, but I do have more ideas for these characters.
Thank you for the compliment! Any actual developments with Maggie may be far off, but she'll at least have a presence until then.
It's okay. At least you're passionate, and that makes me feel I've accomplished something.
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
I certainly am passionate! I can't say any other writer or artist on this site has given me this much to say about their work, haha.
Posted by Birichino 3 years ago Report
I'm flattered! Thank you for appreciating it.