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Melissa goes on a date with Talia, the tattooed waitress. Everything goes pretty well... until it doesn't.

Finding herself in a fight for her life, Melissa decides to surrender.

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A rather dark potential ending for the series. I enjoy writing a mixture of dark stories and lighthearted stories. Too much darkness just becomes depressing, and too much light becomes boring. Mix them together, and you can hopefully keep people guessing where the story's gonna land. A little bit of light makes the darkness so much blacker, after all.

VoreFans Part 11 is out now on Patreon! Melissa encounters her adversary, Azrael, who finally reveals her true nature. If you're interested, click here to read! https://www.patreon.com/posts/65213752

Oh, and I just broke 700,000 views. So, thanks for reading so much of my stories, everyone!

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2good2btru

Posted by 2good2btru 3 years ago Report

Interesting, this alt. Ending sure was a dark one, now I wonder how the first Azrael encounter will play out in a alt. Ending or if Jessica storm found out the truth about marlene sabotaging sejin. Overall, the story was quite the read. :3

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Vesari

Posted by Vesari 3 years ago Report

Those would be fun as well! I have a few ideas for how the "end of story" charts would play out slightly differently depending on which part got an alt. end.

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Winny

Posted by Winny 3 years ago Report

Loved the ending there is nothing hotter then putting prey items in their place. To be honest I love her new make over. It's so very her! And we just know that video at the end would be favorited forever~ Delightfully dark and delightfully degenerate Vesari. Would love more "Alternate endings~" <3

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Vesari

Posted by Vesari 3 years ago Report

Well, I'll be doing more alternate endings in the future, and I have a few ideas in that regard for VoreFans specifically!

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Winny

Posted by Winny 3 years ago Report

As a writer, there is no better seasoning to a story then having main characters ending up on the chopping block. After all, the best ingredients are those that we would not touch for the main story~

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Vesari

Posted by Vesari 3 years ago Report

That's a rather exciting way to look at it, for sure.

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Pokemon007

Posted by Pokemon007 3 years ago Report

by Azrael's fate hinted that Azrael's motive for chasing Melissa would be because she wants to turn Melissa into her apprentice, this would be a clue that Azrael Plan to Melissa ?, along with the scene in which Melissa was dying and saw Azrael as an "angel of death"

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Vesari

Posted by Vesari 3 years ago Report

Indeed it is a clue as to what Azrael's plan is. I intended it to be a little bit of a taste of what's explored in Part 11.

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HamsterScratch

Posted by HamsterScratch 3 years ago Report

It's alright if I treat this as the canon ending in my head, I think. I just enjoy Talia's personality so much, and "no second chances" is just way too cruel for her aaaAAAAGH
You did wonderfully with bundling this alt. It was even more than I hoped for. I hope I can match your level of skill (and more importantly motivation) someday. It always takes me ages to finish one of my stories.

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Vesari

Posted by Vesari 3 years ago Report

Haha, wow! I’m glad you like Talia so much, it’s rare to get such direct feedback on a character as a writer! It always makes me gooey inside when people like one of my characters.

As for the motivation, it’s different for everyone. I managed to break my procrastination cycle by promising to do one story a week, and I have a strong weekly schedule of when I write and post. I hope you manage to figure out your own motivation, and get writing too!

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PandaESL

Posted by PandaESL 3 years ago Report

I feel bad for saying I was super bummed when I read the original of this story lol. I like where the series has gone at this point, but I was soooo ready to read this originally XD I love that you write these alts; I wish more people did them really. Keep it up!!

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theonlymatt

Posted by theonlymatt 2 years ago Report

I loved the lead up in the original, felt teased by the lack of follow through. Though of course that would be a terrible thing to do WRT writing a series.

Getting an alt ending for this is amazing.

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Shevron

Posted by Shevron 2 years ago Report

This story is amazing! I haven't read other stuff yet. But this one is really driving me nuts. The suspence you've created, its fantastic!
I wish I could write like this for my game

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Vesari

Posted by Vesari 2 years ago Report

Oh, hey! I love your art! I'm super flattered that you enjoyed the story!

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Edddd

Posted by Edddd 2 years ago Report

the ideal timeline <3
Totally not fantasizing about Lindsay eventually finding Talia, only to end up the same way, or maybe even being so broken by it all, that she decides to just join Mel so they can in a way be united at last

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maximusking2

Posted by maximusking2 2 months ago Report

I think this has to be the hottest story ive ever read and id like more of this character tbh

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