Posted by Whereaminow27 1 year ago Report

She wasn't a very good roommate at all. Or a friend.

Would have preferred her to be shy. ;?

Posted by Ohgra 1 year ago Report

we all make mistakes lmao

Posted by Welcometocave 1 year ago Report

Dark but very good! a good accidental digestion

Posted by Ohgra 1 year ago Report

thank you! i love that accidental type shit

Posted by Welcometocave 1 year ago Report

my favorite part about the dark part is that it just keeps coming back to your mind through the day. wicked shit lol

Posted by Ohgra 1 year ago Report

hell yeah love that

Posted by doomed 1 year ago Report

well now shes killed her roomate and nina , i wonder if this ruined her act XD jo seems like a nice person so this might be traumatic

Posted by Ohgra 1 year ago Report

she has regrets but it still is a pretty impressive act.....

Posted by Assimilation 1 year ago Report

I enjoyed this story a lot! The hammerspace/compression angle is a longtime favorite vore "mechanic" of mine for various imagined settings, and I'm a big fan of tragedy befalling characters. I have two small critiques but know that I already enjoyed it enough to have read it before going to bed and again after waking up, so your content's good stuff overall.

I was pulled out somewhat when Alicia said "It's fine... I need to get back to my dissertation." I absolutely get the needed twist of "vore logic" to write scenarios without characters giving real-life responses, but to me this moment felt internally inconsistent. Alicia had been mostly resistant and impatient with Johanna, very precious with Nina, and directly questioned whether keeping Nina in the belly was safe.

I would have expected more conflict for Alicia to be convinced to let Johanna have time with Nina, and/or for the narration to have a much more constant hammering that Alicia had her dissertation on her mind and that there was an urgent deadline. If there was anything that Alicia wouldn't be generous to her weirdo roommate for, I expect it would be 1-on-1 time in a risky situation with her beloved soon-to-be-fiance.

Aside from that, I was also surprised that it wasn't *more* harsh of an end. I expected a few more paragraphs spent on Alicia's terror within the stomach, more pain described for Johanna when Alicia swims through the folds of her tracts, and lastly a little more apathy on Johanna's part (though I appreciated the final thoughts before returning to sleep were on her act). It's not that these simply didn't meet my (admittedly psychotic) vore preferences! I just saw the "tragic" tag and your description of it being "dark" and "graphic" and assumed there would be a more intense color than a simple accident and a quick denouement of the rescuer finding the corpse and then befalling the same fate. It definitely is tragic and dark, just not as tragic and dark as I would expect from your previous corpus! (That is a compliment from me.)

All in all, this is a good story and I'm pleased you've shared it. Hope to see more from you!

Posted by Ohgra 1 year ago Report

you're hitting on some stuff i felt was a weakness of the piece for sure! i wanted to get across that over time Alicia had developed an actual respect for Johanna and there was a level of trust there. between the urgency of making enough progress on her dissertation to get time with Nina and her actual real belief that Johanna's act is harmless, coupled with Nina's enthusiasm about the whole magic show, it was an opportunity for her to work uninterrupted while Johanna could give her a distraction instead of just sitting there waiting. for sure it is ultimately a vore trope to give an excuse for Nina to stay in the gut, but i definitely could have communicated that more clearly. i might do a revisit and update.

regarding the ending, it's brief because i personally get more of a kick from the implied consequences of dark vore stuff than the actual play by play of the moment. that's why i usually don't explore the actually ghoulish digestion stuff in my works; it just doesn't do as much for me as the weird feeling in the pit of your stomach when you think about it after the fact, if you get what im sayin!

but hey thank you for the praise and the good feedback, i really appreciate it! i love discussing this kinda shit,

Posted by Sizetyme 1 year ago Report

While I'm not usually one for digestion or weight gain, I really enjoyed this story! You hit a lot of good notes when it comes to accidental vore/digestion, plus the bit where we get to see the compression in action was cool. It always fun to see how the trick is done so to speak, and using the act of the compression itself as a driving force that leads *into* the digestion due to it wiping her out and making her fall asleep was really smart!

As well, you really hit the nail on the head I'm balancing the sexy/silly/scary trifecta that all good size/vore stories have. I think, in a nutshell, that's why I enjoy your stuff in general. Because, while your actual stories differ in tone, subject matter, and plot, your thematic balance is more often than not tuned just right.

Posted by Ohgra 1 year ago Report

thank you, that means a lot! the trifecta of humor, horror, and horndog is actually super important to me in my works, im really glad that comes through!

Posted by Zerg 1 year ago Report

Great story!

Posted by Ohgra 1 year ago Report

thanks zerg!

Posted by Kelly 1 year ago Report

:< Sad to see all your stories now being pdfs v.v they are very hard to read for me on my phone as the pages and text dont scale like word files

Posted by Ohgra 1 year ago Report

hmm. this is a tough one because i really cant stand how my stuff formats when it's not pdf. i also primarily read on my phone, and ive found the best solution for me is to download a pdf and read it on google docs or something, it formats way better than this site. ill look into other options for the future.

Posted by Kelly 1 year ago Report

Yeah I meant downloaded PDFs. Micrsoft word allows me to zoom in and have a very easy reading experince but PDFs dont scale and stay the way they are and google docs cant open pdfs

Posted by Ohgra 1 year ago Report

i've put in an rtf version dropbox link in the description, should be easy enough to do that on any future stories!

Posted by Kelly 1 year ago Report

thank you so much <3