OMG... editing 10 years later. Sorry for the obnoxious warnings. I'm quite a bit more secure in my sexuality another decade on!
This story is about a girl who finds herself with a very unusual growth. That is, she has a penis. In the story you'll find excessive masturbation, sex and some Futa/F cock vore.
With this being my first CV story, I'd really like feedback. I hope you enjoy!
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Posted by Archangel 16 years ago Report
Great story. Loved it.
Posted by Houyo 16 years ago Report
Pretty awesome.
Posted by EveAra 16 years ago Report
Fun story!
Posted by Vorefreak 16 years ago Report
Awesome!
Posted by Thebob 16 years ago Report
Fantastic.
Posted by Rhewin 16 years ago Report
Thanks to all of you for the positive feedback so far. Glad to know you guys like the story. I wasn't too sure how it turned out myself.
Keep an eye out, I'll probably keep this character in reserve for a rainy day.
Posted by gr8fzy1 16 years ago Report
Well written, looking forward to more!
Posted by Bitter 16 years ago Report
One thing I'd point out in the way of constructive criticism is that your tone is fairly clinical at the very beginning of the story. Part of it is word choice; "hugely aroused" is an awkward phrase, and "engorged" is not a word that rolls well off the tongue. The other part is cadence-- I notice a lot of quick, simple sentences that feel overly terse and informational more than passionate. It smoothed out once you got into the character interactions, however, and for the most part the writing is well-formed.
Thanks for writing this, and I look forward to what else you produce.
Posted by Rhewin 16 years ago Report
Yeah, I see your point. I mostly write that way because I think that way. I want my readers to know exactly what I mean when I say something, hence the informative-style writing, but I could see how that might take away from one's experience. The character interactions are easier for me because I view it as relating a conversation rather than describing an event. I will definitely work on trying to smooth it out some.
As for word choice, that's kinda my thing (assuming I know what you're talking about ^^). Like said, I write the way I think. What's the best way to describe this? Well, in short, I get some sort of sadistic joy by bending the English language to a point in which it screams for mercy. Then, realizing just how badly I have harmed it, I let it unbend itself and the two of us go get a coffee while I apologize for my rude behavior. As it begins to forgive me, I slap it and call it a whore. Make sense?
Needless to say, you don't want to read the unedited version of this. It is an unfortunate trait that I do try to suppress for the sake of my readers. Unfortunately I really do enjoy writing with unusual wording, so it's going to pop up from time to time. Don't take me wrong, I deeply appreciate this kind of criticism as it keeps me grounded. But I write stories like this for myself, and they're going to sound the way I like them to sound.
Posted by soullesschao 16 years ago Report
Wait was Mr.brown in the last story?
Posted by Rhewin 16 years ago Report
Yep, reocurring character ^^ .
Posted by chargerse 16 years ago Report
This story is awesome. Please write more about Kelsey she is my favorite cock vore character ever.
Posted by Rhewin 16 years ago Report
wow, thanks!
Posted by Imrhys 16 years ago Report
OMG, its rare I find CV I like *I am a major fan of futa, but at times the area is lacking story wise* and this was wow.
Nice twist of it needing to be fed to keep performing and that constant size growth as it grows hungrier was an excellent answer to my age old problem of how to feed these things <3
Posted by Rhewin 16 years ago Report
I hold to the belief that there's nothing a good futa cock can't do. I'm glad to know you liked it so much :)
Posted by chargerse 16 years ago Report
To true sir. So please write more stories with huge futa cocks.
Posted by dragon32078 16 years ago Report
I too, love this character and hope to read another story with hir in it.
Posted by futavorelover 16 years ago Report
LOVE this story it's my all time fav futa cock vore story
please make more
Posted by Doom-Guy 15 years ago Report
Only one nineth of the way through it and I LOVE it!
Posted by koga_3456789 15 years ago Report
got to do another one
Posted by LastRider100 15 years ago Report
Brilliant :)
Posted by wolf_3456789 15 years ago Report
You have to more of this story
Posted by Julia 14 years ago Report
Honestly? It would NOT be better with a man. This was outright orgasmic, imho. I'd like to see more like this, maybe a sequel?
Posted by shabbacabba 14 years ago Report
This cannot be the first time you wrote CV, its way too amazingly awesome!
Posted by TootCore 13 years ago Report
By far the best CV story I've ever read.
Keep it up ! :D
Posted by VoreLover9012 12 years ago Report
Best cock vore story ever
Posted by VoreLover9012 12 years ago Report
I'm planning on turning this into a comic sometime in the future, is that okay?
Posted by Rhewin 11 years ago Report
Sorry for the late reply. I'd love to see that ^^
Posted by mallowsal 10 years ago Report
Follow up story PLEASE
Posted by G0DF1RE 10 years ago Report
need more that was awesome !
Posted by Valorie 4 years ago Report
Good story!
Posted by KittyKayBee 4 years ago Report
I gotta tell ya, this was THE story that led me to the portal. So, in some roundabout way, I've got you to thank for my current career.
It's great, too. That helped a lot :).
Posted by gtgod 3 years ago Report
Great story!
You did wonderful work
Posted by gva274 3 years ago Report
13 years later, still holds up, I'm a big fan of this