Posted by Gypa 14 years ago Report

I guess Allison is goner in next show.

Posted by miranda_dragon 14 years ago Report

Well done!

Sometimes I really enjoy a good over the top multi prey story.

This one was wonderful!

Posted by MeTheMe 14 years ago Report

I love overstuffed preds, though I do wonder how she kept so lithe while weighing over 5000 pounds.

Gotta feel a little bad for all those other contestants though...

Posted by Gimlet 14 years ago Report

Yeah, I don't normally do digestion, although I still technically didn't, it IS implied in this one. As to how she did it? Hey, where she 'trained' must have had 'TARDIS' over the door :)

Posted by miranda_dragon 14 years ago Report

The implied digestion really helped me enjoy this personally.

Posted by Taris 14 years ago Report

agreed, i kinda wanted even a bit more of a prodding in that line of thought at the end... ill bet it's gona be hard passing those cameras... :P

Posted by Gimlet 14 years ago Report

Sorry. I'm into anal vore and full body tours, but scat is a bit beyond what I go into.

Posted by Taris 14 years ago Report

oh, heh, i wasn't implying you should do that, just idle musing :P

Posted by Bright 14 years ago Report

This was hilariously fun to read. I enjoyed it a lot.

Posted by Gimlet 14 years ago Report

I'm glad I succeeded then. I don't often do comedy on purpose. Usually my jokes only work if I don't try too hard.

Posted by Gimlet 14 years ago Report

OK, I found a few spelling mistakes, and for some weird reason realised that the 'score' I gave Lilly hadn't accounted for the actual weights of the girl's she was eating, just adding their SCORE to her own! Jeez, how could I miss that? Thus her score has escalated just a tad.

Posted by Scratch 14 years ago Report

Awesome story! Though I couldn't figure out if she was stretchy and somehow compacting her stomach in a toon-physics way, or she was shrinking her victims the moment they entered her mouth. Anyhow overall it was fun to read, I like the swift pace and the toonish sort of world (I like the jackal-run TV studio) it happened in, the stuffing aspect was great too!

I also liked the implied digestion, the fact that they're being eaten and not going to be reformed makes the story more surreal and fun, and I'd say also shaded the girl's reactions (especially the willing ones) to being eaten. I agree with Taris I would have liked a little more detail about the digestion, I guess just because it was a little hard to tell what the end-state was; I'd be more satisfied to know they all went down in a squirming melting mass of last-minute hedonism. With the imagery of a stuffed belly like that it's hard to resist wanting to see more! However the twist was great, a nice plot overall and great fun to read.

Though I doubt you'll write another 'episode' I finished the story eagerly waiting for 'next week,' so to speak :)

Posted by Houyo 14 years ago Report

Holy crap that was a fun story. I've been inspired!

Posted by Gimlet 14 years ago Report

I'm glad I inspired you, and me too. I'm part way through the second installment of this. I'll post it when I'm done. Titled 'Give Her A Big Hand!' ;)

Posted by LightSpeed 13 years ago Report

Wow! I loved this story. =3 Very well done. ^.^

Posted by Borealis 13 years ago Report

Very nice story.

As others have said it was very fun, to-the-point and unpretentious. While also being well-written.

Nice to see a switch of conventional pred-prey roles as well, Jackal girls as prey to a bunny. Love it.

Posted by Indighost 12 years ago Report

No idea why I hadn't commented. I fucking love this story.

Posted by Gimlet 12 years ago Report

And I have no idea how it took me two weeks to notice you'd commented *chuckles* oops. Thanks Indighost, I appreciate it.

Posted by VincentShadowScale 5 years ago Report

I love this series~