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A short while ago, I had a conversation (you know who you are! :p) in which I said I would have difficulty writing about a pred knowingly eating unwilling prey. I do that all the time of course in contexts like Felarya, where the characters view it as normal, but in a world like ours the implications for the pred's mindset would be disturbing. I would find it difficult to connect with such a character.
On the other hand, I *do* enjoy reading stories by oishi1 and girlfood. So... I decided to write another story set in the Forbidden Dish - a setting created by girlfood, and which oishi1 regularly writes in too.
This is the result. It's my own approach to the setting, of course, so it's a bit different to what girlfood or oishi1 might write.
The characters of Lindsay and Tilda belong to girlfood.
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Posted by oishi1 11 years ago Report
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This is very much how I imagine it plays out for most customers who back out. You did a great job even if you had to move outside of your comfort zone. The fact that you made us connect with the prey is the best part of the story (either that or the fact that Lindsay just saw it as grabbing three snacks before dinner that night. The idea that they mattered that little is great to me) This was a very good second journey into Forbidden Dish for you and a brave decision in subject matter.
when Lindsay first walks into the employee's only room you mistakenly call her Emmy
Posted by French_snack 11 years ago Report
Thank you! (And I've fixed the typo.) The scenes with the captives largely wrote themselves; it felt natural to "humanise" them in that way. Whereas, of course, Lindsay never connects with them, and sees them as just two brief snacks; she's eaten so many already during her career...
Posted by 4ofSwords 11 years ago Report
Interesting!
I liked the opportunity to get to know them both.
Posted by French_snack 11 years ago Report
Thank you. I couldn't just let them vanish into digestive oblivion without having first (so to speak) existed a little.
Posted by Marked 11 years ago Report
A wonderful bit oh horror mixed with this story. I enjoyed that and getting to know the prey so well. The fact that the eating was from Lindsey's pov was a really great way of showing just how casual it was for her, while the reader knows so much more what her actions are really doing.
Posted by French_snack 11 years ago Report
Thanks. I definitely had to switch to Lindsay's perspective at the end. For one thing, sustaining the horror and trauma of the preys' perspective might not have been easy on the readers. For another, as you say, it highlights the difference in perspective between Lindsay and her "prey" - and also between Lindsay and the reader.
Posted by Marked 11 years ago Report
You are right; you had already said everything you needed to say about the trauma that the preys were experiencing. Rehashing it during the scene would have been redundant and bogged it down.
Posted by girlfood 11 years ago Report
Outstanding story, as always! The characters were truly believable. I almost felt bad that they were eaten. Almost.
Posted by French_snack 11 years ago Report
Hehe... I know what you mean about "almost". :)
Thank you (and for the note!); I'm very glad you enjoyed it! I'm not very used to writing characters with Lindsay's type of mindset. Thanks for the opportunity to experiment in such an interesting setting as the Forbidden Dish!
Posted by Luckless 11 years ago Report
Lovely read! I hope you explore the unwilling side of things further. Lindsay should let herself go a bit and develop that belly and butt.
Posted by French_snack 11 years ago Report
Heh. :D From what I gather of girlfood's stories, Lindsay's butt is already quite... shapely. Unwilling vore in this type of setting isn't usually my thing, but who knows... Glad you enjoyed it!
Posted by mojo-2131285 11 years ago Report
Love it! Yes their lives may be over, but at least they get to be together forever inside a pretty girl. I'll take that over looking at the stars any day.
Posted by French_snack 11 years ago Report
Well, that's one way of looking at it! :D Thanks.
Posted by SDFhvsdfbwiez 10 years ago Report
I really love your writing style, and the setting of the Forbidden Dish in general, but something about the attitude of the staff, just casually eating unwilling people, pisses me off. :/
Posted by French_snack 10 years ago Report
I think that's the general idea. Characters like Lindsay aren't meant to be particularly relatable. It's normal to feel somewhat angry at them.
Posted by SDFhvsdfbwiez 10 years ago Report
I guess.