Posted by TheStatue 10 years ago Report

I feel so sorry for poor Bree...but not enough to not want Jay to digest her ;) this is my favourite story from you so far. I'd love to see you write more.

Posted by Chameleonette 10 years ago Report

Thanks a lot! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. I haven't written much same-size aside from one or two RPs it was involved in that I did.

I have another one to proofread possibly for tomorrow. I ended up making these way longer than I was intending. lol

Posted by ShadesofBlack 10 years ago Report

Hmm, this was an interesting read for me. Very meta. The observer and pred part of me hated it, honestly. Partly from feeling sorry for Bree. Partly from wishing I had a BFF who was into vore, and comfortable talking about it sometimes too, and I really felt for her. I mean really! They could have stayed BFFs and fantasized together about this. Or become more than friends, who knows? But... alas, it was not to be.

The prey part of me though... wow. I usually don't like unwilling prey, everything that he described in his preferences as a pred is basically my turn off list as a pred. Which means that as prey, it's very hard to hit the sweet spot of unwilling being cornered and devoured by an assertive pred, and that flattering feeling of being wanted that much, being praised for her flavor...

So yeah, part of me really enjoyed this! And it is quite well written and interesting. Not the way I would have taken it, necessarily, but quite fun just the way it is.

Posted by ShadesofBlack 10 years ago Report

It occurs to me, that with them having been best friends (seemingly honestly and genuinely) but him fantasizing about eating her, and finally doing so when she confessed an interest in vore...

Is this basically a vore-world analogy to the "friend zone?"

Posted by Chameleonette 10 years ago Report

No, that was not the intention. I rather despise the term "friend zone" to begin with.

Posted by ShadesofBlack 10 years ago Report

So do I, in general. I see friendship as a valuable and pleasant relationship, regardless of the gender of the other person, and it annoys me that so many people see friends of the other gender as just the step before, or failed "zone" short of getting to sex. Like if you don't get to sex with that person, they aren't worth being friends with and you've wasted your time?

I feel like the term is only actually accurate or justifiably used about 5% of the time, and the rest is usually whiny guys (or sometimes girls) who want to get into someone's pants, but either aren't brave enough to make a move, or don't know how to handle sexual rejection in a dignified manner.

Rereading and understanding the story a bit better, yeah, I don't feel the connection to that so much. For some reason, I was thinking like he brought up the vore, and was pushing for it until the present. Sorry for misreading into that, I'm not sure why my brain did that. In the story, he might have fantasized, but he certainly wasn't being her friend just so he could eat her one day. Which all together makes me even more sad for her, happy about their relationship so far and this story in general, and... well yeah, it does make the vore itself more momentus and powerful. And hot.

Posted by Chameleonette 10 years ago Report

Yeah, that's precisely how I feel about "friendzoning". It's like a way to try to make a girl (or guy) feel bad for not returning someone's romantic/sexual feelings or advances and basically saying that the relationship is useless if that element isn't there. It really makes friendship sound like something cheap used to get into someone's pants, which is why I despise that term very much. Anything that tries to elicit guilt for someone making a choice they have every right to make is just plain gross.

Anyway, that's definitely not what I intended with this story. It got a long longer than I was aiming for (as I was actually trying to do some simple vore drabbles and the like), but I wanted to make it obvious that the two of them had been friends for a long time. Vore was something they were both into but had no idea the other was into until the present time the story takes place. Sorry if any of that was confusing. I'm glad the vore came off that way, though, since I didn't want it to be something spur of the moment and more like, that's what tipped the scales for him to make fantasy a reality. All this time that he's probably felt guilty about fantasizing about his best friend that way, finding out that she's into the same sort of fetish just drops all the bars. Now she's even MORE one-of-a-kind, and the fantasies just aren't enough.

Posted by Chameleonette 10 years ago Report

Well, I'm glad part of you enjoyed it. lol I've never had a prompt given to me like this before, but as the natural course of writing fiction, I write to my own preferences instead of others' preferences. I love assertive/dominant preds, unwilling prey, etc. Though I'm not the biggest fan of vore just for the sake of hunger/eating and nothing more. I like for there to be a deeper relationship involved or established through interaction that makes the prey actually mean something to pred beyond food.

Anyway, thanks for the feedback.

Posted by ShadesofBlack 10 years ago Report

Please, by all means, continue to write to your own preferences. The relationship did make it deeper. And scarier.

Posted by Eater99 10 years ago Report

Very nice! Well done

Posted by Chameleonette 10 years ago Report

Thank you very much! :)

Posted by TW 10 years ago Report

Wow, very well done. I was hooked from word one. Great descriptions of the scene as well as of Jay's reaction to her after. Fantastic job. Thank you very much for sharing.

Posted by Chameleonette 10 years ago Report

Oh, wow! The first word alone? Haha, that's unexpected! Thanks a lot! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. :) It was my pleasure to write and share!

Posted by TW 10 years ago Report

Hard to resist a story that grabs the attention with the word "Fetishes" I had to see where you were going with it.

Posted by Chameleonette 10 years ago Report

I admit, I never considered writing something meta like this and using the actual fetish itself in the story, but it was pretty fun. XD

Posted by Bright 10 years ago Report

I think it is a good story, yet I can't get the feeling that Jay is a sociopath.

For an observer, that must have been a nightmare situation.

Posted by Chameleonette 10 years ago Report

Haha, thanks! I didn't really have anything in mind in particular when I wrote it, but readers are free to take it any way they wish.

Posted by CoralKate 9 years ago Report

This is really good.

Posted by Chameleonette 9 years ago Report

Thank you very much! :)