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HDTF: Hostile Takeover 7 Delete Scene By marloweny -- Report

Uploaded: 9 years ago

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This is a deleted scene that would have concluded the previous chapter, except I felt it had too many logistical problems and gave the villain WAY TOO MUCH CREDIT. Thus, this didn't happen in the real story. But I'd already written most of it, so enjoy the rest.

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Groblek

Posted by Groblek 9 years ago Report

Fun, but yeah, that would have been awfully problematic. Thanks for sharing it with us anyway!

marloweny

Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report

Once I get halfway through a scene, even if it's seriously flawed, I've got to get to the payoff.

ShadesofBlack

Posted by ShadesofBlack 9 years ago Report

Wow, very hot! Reminds me of my old "return system"

marloweny

Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report

I almost guarantee you subconsciously inspired it. You should probably get partial credit.

Critchett

Posted by Critchett 9 years ago Report

VERY great description of a very sexy scene! I particularly liked the details taken to explain each sensation for Brit as she flushed herself. It's a lot more intimate with the experience when you have a good idea of what she's feeling instead of simply stating: "her legs went down. then her hips. then her body and breasts. then the rest of her."

marloweny

Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report

Thanks! I'm told the sensation details are one of my strengths, so when I write a story that sort of glazes over details (like the last story I wrote), I like to really dig into how something would feel. Glad you liked it!