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A woman is in a hurry and needs to clear the line to the ATM.
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This was something I wrote very quickly, trying for a casual vore type thing. Not totally pleased with how it came out.
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Posted by Blahblahbum 9 years ago Report
Hah! Awesome.
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Thanks!
Posted by Groblek 9 years ago Report
Ok, I love this one - it's a rare instance of "vore as a normal, everyday thing" which doesn't cause extreme cognitive dissonance for me - it's the clear lack of any danger for them that makes that work as far as I'm concerned. The casualness with which everyone involved seems to take it is quite well done, I think. I especially like the "just call John and let him know I need the day off tomorrow" bit, that was a nice touch.
Posted by TheTastefulGentlman 9 years ago Report
Agreed I rather like this sort of 'vore is at worst an inconvenience' type setting.
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Me too. It makes it free to enjoy for me, and whenever I create a setting, how I'll make vore "okay" is a big part.
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
One of the things that always loses me is when things are super casual, yet fatal. I can see the kink of it, but my brain balks at someone not kicking up a fuss when it is literally the last thing they'll ever do.
That line was fairly calculated. I wanted to make it clear she'd be back so all of this would be confirmed as temporary. Earlier versions ("Tell him I won't be in tomorrow." "I guess I won't be home tonight after all.") could be interpreted to imply she was gone for good, which was not my intention.
Posted by Groblek 9 years ago Report
Yeah, I react the same way to the casual + fatal stories I read.
Posted by ShadesofBlack 9 years ago Report
I'm very pleased with how it came out. I love how you did the cleavage vore like a boobspace, but the nipple vore with bulges. It made nice variety within the setting.
Posted by KrasnyiKoiot 9 years ago Report
^ Seconding this! Not terribly lucid on my readthrough here, or I'd offer something more. Sleep deprivation weee~
Fun story, either way nwn
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Glad you liked it. Whenever I tinker with casual vore, your stuff is usually the inspiration.
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Thanks! Since cleavage vore is one of the more nonsensical forms, I figured it made sense to give it one of the more inexplicable results. And I'm usually a no bulge person, but bulges can be fun.
Posted by CompactorFlame 9 years ago Report
Ah, that irony after the end. Is this to suggest that every vored person gets regenerated after a time?
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Pretty much, or else they just get let out.
Posted by mallowsal 9 years ago Report
Lol nice twist. So I take it this isn't fatal?
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Yep! Unless I specifically indicate otherwise, none of the vore in my stuff is fatal.
Posted by mallowsal 9 years ago Report
....i think i love you XDXD
Posted by darc22005 9 years ago Report
Should do more breast vore this was amazing
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
I've got a few more instances of breastvore in my gallery if you're interested: http://aryion.com/g4/search.php?q=&tags=Breast+Vore&type_search=&user=marloweny&from_date=&to_date=
Posted by darc22005 9 years ago Report
I had checked :P they are great lol
Posted by SilverHornedDeer 9 years ago Report
This was really entertaining, LOVE the irony at the end. I just enjoy it SO MUCH when a former predator becomes someone else's prey. Also thanks for not specifying whether it's fatal or not, as I really, really love fatal myself.
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Glad you liked it! I'm not into fatal myself, but a little ambiguity can be fun.
Posted by TootCore 9 years ago Report
Gotta go fast ! Gotta go fast !
But havE We gONe tOo fASt
In other words, karma is a bitch. Nice twist !
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
Thanks!