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So I re-read one of my favorites Sleepover Contest https://aryion.com/g4/view/283672

by  jun1337

And decided I wanted to take a stab at herm friends but with a bit more of rivalry. I also wanted to do it in 3 hours. This is the result for better or worse.

Two herms after cumming their friends decide to figure out who "can last the longest"

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SenpaiVore

Posted by SenpaiVore 9 years ago Report

Best story ever ^-^

ryanshowseason3

Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report

I sincerely doubt it. This was one of the most hasty things I've ever written, any success is purely accidental :P

SenpaiVore

Posted by SenpaiVore 9 years ago Report

Well it's really good and made me cream hard. You are an amazing writer and can't wait for you next work ^///^ Especially with cock vore.

DestinyLust

Posted by DestinyLust 9 years ago Report

Hot damn, I love this stuff. That first pic especially. Daughter/mother, cumbith, and casual fatality. Fuckin' A mate.

ryanshowseason3

Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report

Quite honestly I ended up liking the theme of that caption just a bit more than the plot of the story.

And it was just a hasty rough explanation for why her sister wanted to unbirth her. Funny how that happens.

nysmnyd

Posted by nysmnyd 9 years ago Report

Those images are horribly photoshopped.

ryanshowseason3

Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report

Well thank you for the incredibly constructive criticism.

I did say the goal was to complete the entire work in 3 hours, writing, proofreading image gathering and photoshopping.

So what do you expect?

nysmnyd

Posted by nysmnyd 9 years ago Report

Maybe if you know it's going to look bad don't do it? If you're not going to take the time to make something look at least presentable, then you shouldn't really bother in the first place.

ryanshowseason3

Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report

Don't recognize an exercise when you see one huh? -_-

It's a way to test your abilities. Much like my short story series I was testing my abilities to see where my strengths and weaknesses are.

For this one my purpose was to see what has become a rote action for me, which elements I can breeze through now

Part of the process is putting what I made out there and seeing what flies and what falls.

The graphical quality is admittedly garbage. But really the pictures are fluff to the core. You're complaining about what I see as an incredibly non-essential component.

I'd be delighted if you had any suggestions on how to easily utilize a liquify tool to reign in a sack of balls and make it conform to a crotch. Or a convenient technique to color normalize a layer to another layer. Or if you picked out elements of the belly morph that didn't conform to the lighting.

I realized during this that I don't have any processes, algorithms or standard practices to perform the three tasks I just mentioned.

But somehow I doubt you have any such intelligent criticism to offer, please come back when you can offer actual criticism beyond "it sucks" and "don't even bother if it sucks"

Besides, I rather like the caption on at least one of them in spite of the awkward visuals. That one was worth it I think.

nysmnyd

Posted by nysmnyd 9 years ago Report

The difference being that most people wouldn't post an exercise piece if it didn't meet their standards, which by your own admittance they don't.

Unfortunately it's been awhile since I used photoshop so my incite into that would be less than yours.

I never said anything about the captions, they're fine, it's just the images.

I admit that I am being at least a tad bit on an asshole here, but personally I'd rather have 1 person be an asshole and tell it like it is than have 100 people butter me up and tell me it's perfect already. I'm not being an asshole just for the sake of it, however because my skills with image realigning are sketchy at best, the most I can do is point out the lack of quality and hope it's addressed and not dismissed as trolling.

Rhewin

Posted by Rhewin 4 years ago Report

I realize this is 5 years later but I had to say that this person's a dick. Glad you kept at it and got better over time. Love this story, had a hell of a time finding it again. Not sure why I hadn't favorited before.

sandysoxx

Posted by sandysoxx 9 years ago Report

I love all the captioned pics on your stories. This one was one of your best!

Doctor

Posted by Doctor 9 years ago Report

I love them too! Don't listen to them.

rubuio91

Posted by rubuio91 9 years ago Report

"Nancy's face scrunched up as her own erotic thoughts ramped up her own sensitivity and even the meager one handed caresses of Nancy"

Shouldn't it be Carrie the last name?

By the way nice story, as always!

rubuio91

Posted by rubuio91 9 years ago Report

"She looked down at the smiling Nancy " here too

ryanshowseason3

Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report

Yup, right you are. I guess I can't skimp too much on proofreading either. Usually I think I catch those kind of flaws.

I re - upped the corrections.

AssIdolizer

Posted by AssIdolizer 9 years ago Report

This was great, even if it was a mite rough around the edges. Thanks for sharing.

ryanshowseason3

Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report

Thanks!

Which parts stuck out to you?

I have my own thoughts about where there is some lacking content, but I'd love to hear where it is wonky from others.

TwrchTwryth

Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report

This is fantastic.

ryanshowseason3

Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report

Thanks! that means quite a bit coming from you! Love your stories!

jun1337

Posted by jun1337 9 years ago Report

Thanks for the shout out! :)