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I went to vote this week and asked myself the question: Can I sexualize this?
The answer is above.
A young 18 year old girl goes to vote for her first time and finds that the issues being voted on affect lives in greater ways than she'd ever imagined.
pics here: https://aryion.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=88&t=32934&p=2432180#p2444995
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Posted by saintheartwing 9 years ago Report
............wow. That's...I...just...I can't even...I get the feeling this was meant to be satirical, but it just comes off as VERY meanspirited. So it's not really that funny, and it's not really that well-written.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report
Wasn't really going for satire or comedy actually, there isn't a single thing in there I'd call a punchline. Just vore inserted into politics. *shrug*. You're certainly entitled to your opinion on liking it or not.
What's not well written though? Objectively speaking that is outside opinion of content?
Spelling? Grammar? Awkward wording? Or is it just not liking it that makes it "not really that well-written."
Examples please.
Posted by saintheartwing 9 years ago Report
There's not a lot of detail describing the characters. The vore scenes, yes. But not that much on the characters.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report
Stephanie, yah. It's only revealed when she's being eaten what she's even wearing. I'd argue that it doesn't really get any better for Maggie in what she looks like.
Hardly constitutes saying the entire thing is "not really that well-written"
Posted by saintheartwing 9 years ago Report
Good point.
Posted by ruinedhaze1920 9 years ago Report
Hey there, random fiction writing appreciator here, I just wanted to say a few things to you SaintHeartWing. Firstly SaintHeartWing, I must disagree with your opinion on RyanShowSeason's current piece of work that you judged. I find that in RyanShowSeason3's previous works he has written the same amount of detail "needed" to build what I feel is an environment of an un-trust worthy world where prey is always on edge and tempted by desire to be eaten. The detail given always gives detail to feel that you run risks trusting any character in the stories written by RyanShowSeason3.
Secondly, I feel that "meanspirited" in your books is noble, but looking at it from the kinky side of giving in to your desires, I would say that it doesn't feel so, at least by my emotional books compared to yours. Lastly I wanted to say to you that looking at it from a political view of today, I feel that RyanShowSeason3 hit the nail on the head of different parties wanting different solutions to the same problem. Make of this reply what you will, but I read most of RyanShowSeason3's stories for some time as a leisure and I find that the detail given in stories and the world building given is fantastic.
Posted by saintheartwing 9 years ago Report
I guess you're right. The mean spiritedness of the piece just kinda colors the whole thing for me and makes it hard for me to see the positives.
Posted by ruinedhaze1920 9 years ago Report
RyanShowSeason3, if I may, I might say that I found your story to be quite enjoyable in the way you always write your stories, it pleases me to see you keep with both writing and creating your masterpiece of a game.
Keep up the great work. :)
Posted by BardicLasher 9 years ago Report
...I liked the meanspiritedness of it.
Posted by Pokerus 9 years ago Report
Definitely wouldn't mind seeing what happens to Jenny
Posted by joeburp22181 9 years ago Report
Thanks for the good story Ryan, loved the way the fatalist lured her prey in one step at a time until it was far too late. Gah, I better watch my ass the next time I go voting in my precinct, I better learn what the issues are, before I find myself coming out of Maggie's ass too O.o! <3
Posted by SenpaiVore 9 years ago Report
Dark story, but I still enjoy it. I can't wait to see what you do next.
Posted by crush40fanatic 9 years ago Report
A friend of mine once said: Democracy is two wolves and a sheep voting on what's for dinner. Liberty is a well armed sheep.
Posted by Jamie263 9 years ago Report
Brilliant.
Posted by IGA 9 years ago Report
This was a very good story. It had a great twist and paralleled current events very much on point. It was also very original. To put a vore world within a democratic government system was a work of art!
Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report
It feels like the idea has always been right there waiting for someone to write it we've sexualized so much else. Why not this? I look forward to ruining other mundane things with fetish in the future.
Posted by sandysoxx 9 years ago Report
You write the best fatal stories ryanshow. Thanks for always sharing.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report
It would feel like a waste not to share!
Posted by Bright 9 years ago Report
The vore in politics made me laugh a bit. Hehe, reformercraft.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report
That was one of the funner parts in think up what these parties would be named. Reformercrats was the better of the two though it just rolled out of my head so easily.
Posted by Squall 9 years ago Report
Great Story. Hit the nail on the head in regard to politics. It's eat or be eaten, but only figuratively. Also, when's the next update to the game coming out?
Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report
Ha thanks, I just kind of took the party's popular opinions of each other and turned them into characters. Naive youngins and empathy starved older generations.
Which game though? Skyrim, VVN or the Lady list project? Skyrim mod is sometime mid april probly. VVN is longer out, I've got stuff to wrap up on the Lady List project before I jump back into VVN.
Posted by Squall 9 years ago Report
the uh, weird visual novel thing. what is the lady list project?
Posted by z3d 9 years ago Report
I must say that the story had a interesting idea going for it. Not surprised that saintheartwing acted as he usual is. At this point his comments are just a pitiful attempt at wanting logic in a vore story
Posted by ryanshowseason3 9 years ago Report
I'm not here to put anyone down. I wouldn't call anyone pitiful.
My stuff is often dark. It isn't for everyone all the time. Everyone is entitled to their opinion. I think they just prefer a different mood and attitude.
But I won't really just take critique that amounts to "shit sux but I'm not saying why". Critique needs objective reasoning. And I welcome objective critique, because yah I did skimp on character description in this one, and I'd like to know where I'm lacking.
Posted by z3d 9 years ago Report
I try not to call anyone anything, I suppose I have mainly gotten tired' of saint's bullshit and some of the drama he has stirred when it comes to vore stories.
I know the story has some flaws, but I suppose what I was trying to say in my last comment was "saints comments should be taken with a grain salt" as most of it show hints of him not liking the dark stuff in the end.
Posted by Squall 9 years ago Report
theres a reason that the warning is posted. I just ignored the warning cause it breaks the story immersion. ryanshows stories are quick enough to read, and most of the content I like. There are also labels that are below the story if you need to know whats in them and if it's stuff you don't like, don't read it.
Posted by hunter1243 9 years ago Report
heh, right ebout this time is when nature and karma decide to work togeather, and produce a human eatig species that these predators cant fight off, and completely ignore the scrawnier prey.
Posted by Soroxas77 8 years ago Report
I'll be honest. I was fine until Maggie revealed the likelihood of total party extinction.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 8 years ago Report
Remember it's all satire and make believe... Of course highly sexualized and voraphillically charged make believe, but all pretend nevertheless.
Of course it's reprehensible, but it's also fiction. Sorry if it was a turn off though YMMV.
Posted by RAAG 8 years ago Report
Probably one of the hottest stories Ive read. I like the fact that they are herms, because its a lot easier to relate to the submissive one and the pleasure of the teasing, as well as hotter when those involved are female.
Really nice!
Posted by Dominatrix 6 years ago Report
What happened to the pictures? :(
Posted by ryanshowseason3 6 years ago Report
Manips here: https://aryion.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=88&t=32934&p=2432180#p2444995
Posted by Dominatrix 6 years ago Report
But the other ones though.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 6 years ago Report
Huh... You're right, looks like there are two other ones missing from that post.
They might be on an old computer but no promises on finding them... A lot got lost in that hardware failure and shuffle.
I've since moved everything I do to the cloud.
Posted by Kelly 3 years ago Report
I know it was trying to make an unsexy thing sexy but this "Oh whoops rules changed I dont care anymore" at the end was AMAZING
Posted by Kelly 3 years ago Report
Holy shit this was way too good x3
Posted by ryanshowseason3 3 years ago Report
Glad you liked it!
Posted by harpylove 5 months ago Report
Decided to re-read this today since it is voting day in my state. Still holds up great 8 years later. Wonderful job!
Posted by ryanshowseason3 5 months ago Report
Thanks! I remember this one fondly as well every year.