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This is a second story about Zoey Dardana, after my previous story "Zoey" ( http://aryion.com/g4/view/327736 ).
The characters of Zoey and Phil are the creations and property of Alpha, and come from his "Baby Fat" series of game-stories and comics ( https://aryion.com/g4/view/299046 ; patreon: http://patreon.com/adjectivenouncombo ). Go and take a look, if you haven't yet!
Obviously this story is not part of the "Baby Fat" canon. In fact, it departs quite explicitly from the canon established by the "Turn Up" instalment, while at the same time building on what it established. It's less light-hearted than the series, though.
Written as a first person narrative so as to stay true to the style and feel of the series. I must say, it makes it interesting to write a first person perspective for a character who's fundamentally amoral (or immoral).
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Posted by mojo-2131285 7 years ago Report
Very nice. This story is proof that cannibalism can be romantic. You should try and convince Alpha to change the canon so these two can live happily ever after.
By the way, are Zoey and Phil in England? I ask because there are so many "Britishisms" in this story. I've never heard an American girl use the word "horrid," for instance.
Anyways, great as always.
Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report
Thanks. This is very much, indeed, for those who would like an alternative ending to "Turn Up". ;) Think of it as a "what if".
Alpha has explicitly established Zoey as being American. It's simply my lack of knowledge of American English.
Posted by SmaxTheDestroyer 7 years ago Report
LOVE this! Any plans to continue down this "what if?" Road?
Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report
Not at present. It'll depend on inspiration. Thanks!
Posted by MPennanti 7 years ago Report
Amoral characters can be very fun. Great stuff as always!
Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report
Thank you! I don't often write this type of character, so it was interesting to experiment with.
Posted by TheWiking2000 7 years ago Report
I don't know, but this felt like an episode out of the Twilight Zone ;) You know, a little bisarr, a little macabre, a little sexy...
Nice story! Though same-size never really appealed to me, this is a nice change of pace. And Zoey is super cute :D
Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report
Thanks! Zoey is both terrifyingly monstrous, psychopathically unpredictable, and quite adorably sweet. :p That's what makes her fun to write. It feels a bit strange getting into the narrator's mindset, too.
Posted by TheWiking2000 7 years ago Report
Yes, maybe that was what added to the Twilight-feel; the first person narration, which they used to have sometimes (if I remember correctly).
Posted by Herbnerb 6 years ago Report
The people need a sequel! :p
Posted by French_snack 6 years ago Report
I've got none planned for now, but it's tempting. If, some day, I have enough of an idea.
(Technically, this already IS a sequel!)
Posted by Herbnerb 6 years ago Report
So...you're saying there's a chance lol ;P
Very true, I just love the stories!
Posted by hotcarl 5 years ago Report
WOW this story is great! I love your Zoey stories and really hope you write more of them!
Posted by French_snack 5 years ago Report
Thanks! I've got none planned at present, but we'll see.