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Still trapped within her own personal genie until their first day together can come to an end, Eden decides to indulge her curiosity.
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Insomnia again, but this time it doesn't matter because I've got some time off! A continuation of the Rubbing the Genie the wrong way series: https://aryion.com/g4/view/358824
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Posted by RossTheEmeraldFox 8 years ago Report
You need to write, then stop writing, then write something good, then bad, then ugly.
Your comment thing told me to tell you to do that..
Well jokes aside I got mindf**ked half way through.
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
Yeah, this was a little Inception-y.
Posted by RossTheEmeraldFox 8 years ago Report
This is like in the matrix when the city was floating above the city, then Doctor Strange 1-up'd it with four cities.
Posted by TootCore 8 years ago Report
I'm surprised there wasn't a line towards the end hinting at Eden's new belly size. ;3
Posted by Adseria 8 years ago Report
Because it's flat. Think about it. Even though they're both indefinitely inside each other, they were both flat when they were in Majesca's womb. Why would it change now that they're in Eden's?
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
Indeed.
Posted by TootCore 8 years ago Report
Aha, true. I kinda see it now.
Posted by Adseria 8 years ago Report
Very... What's the word...? Confusing. Very confusing.
I don't know why I like it (or how, given that my brain exploded after the previous chapter!), But I do. Very, VERY much.
I just hope that there's going to be more. A lot more.
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
You think it's confusing to read, try writing it. Particularly because I kept getting Eden and Majesca's name wrong.
Posted by Adseria 8 years ago Report
Yeah, I noticed. Eventually.
It took me 5 minutes to work out why they could see Eden's cervix from inside Majesca's womb!
Posted by Groblek 8 years ago Report
Ooh, fun! I really like these two, and the very strange things they're getting up to. I also like the way Majesca's gone from being grumpy at having been trapped by a new Mistress to deciding that this one could be a lot of fun with a little adjustment.
Also, I love the line "My gynecologist will probably have some questions..."
Posted by Adseria 8 years ago Report
Agreed on all counts. The only way it could be better is if...
Huh. I'll get back to you on that one.
Posted by ShadesofBlack 8 years ago Report
Thirded. This one continues to be enjoyed!
Posted by SSJBura 8 years ago Report
Oh man I love this series, these two are great together!
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
Thanks!
Posted by TheTastefulGentlman 8 years ago Report
Well you continue to deliver highly original concepts.
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
I honestly thought this series' weirdness would come from granting weird wishes. Not the 24 hour period prior to the next wishes.
Posted by Goblingobler 8 years ago Report
Another fun chapter! :D
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
Thanks!
Posted by Amberain 8 years ago Report
A few days or a week ago, you asked me which stories I would want to see sequels to, and I never got back to you about it. Well, this was one of them. I liked it, but I can't help but view what they just did as somehow dangerous, as I wonder what would have happened if they'd separated part way through.
Looking to the future, in my mind half the appeal of this series is that it's only Eden and Majesca. So once Eden gets back outside, and can start making wishes again, I'd prefer if she didn't get anyone else involved. That's just my opinion though, take it how you will.
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
It's true that during that transition from one woman to the other, there could have been some (more) mind-bending side effects if Eden had left Majesca's influence.
I'm surprised that a great deal of the people who seem to like this series specifically prefer that it remain just between Eden and Majesca. I'd have thought people would be scrambling for more of the outside world, but I've had direct requests to extend the "inside time" as much as possible. I'll have to be mindful of that going forward.
Posted by Amberain 8 years ago Report
Personally, I'm not expecting for them to stay inside of her, Eden is going to want to continue with her life, in some form. I'm fully expecting a wish to take care of any financial difficulties she might have, as that seems obvious, and frees up more time for the fun stuff. I'd just prefer if they keep those activities exclusive to each other, rather than Eden using her wishes to do things with others, or getting a third party involved along with Majesca. I imagine there are a lot of things you could do before that becomes boring, if it ever does.
Posted by Groblek 8 years ago Report
For me, it's not so much specifically about the "inside time", but what I like most is that it leads to a focus on the two of them. And you've managed to get me invested in their developing relationship, which is clearly turning into something more complicated than mistress and her genie slave, whatever it's going to end up as.
(Personally, I'm hoping they end up romantically entangled, and an outside scene I'd quite enjoy is seeing Eden taking her new girlfriend home to meet her parents.
"I hope they'll accept us as a couple."
"Granted."
"Not like that!")
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
That's a super heartwarming scene idea.
Posted by Groblek 8 years ago Report
:) For whatever reason, your stories tend to inspire me to think along heartwarming/romantic lines. Even one of the darker ones inspired me to set a romance of sorts in the setting. :)
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
I'm kind of a softy. If my characters exist for long enough, they're going to fall for one another.
Posted by Groblek 8 years ago Report
I understand. I've found I can't write anything longer than a short scene without tossing in some sort of romance plotline, even if I'm trying to write a dark horror piece. Even eldritch beings from beyond need love, it seems. ;)
Posted by thisgirlroolzz 8 years ago Report
Hello there, I was waiting for you to write another chapter to this story, I love this.
You commented "I'm surprised that a great deal of the people who seem to like this series specifically prefer that it remain just between Eden and Majesca" I think that is because its so intimate, they seem to be developing a relationship that few have and in an experience that even fewer have lol.
Great work, more please!
Posted by marloweny 8 years ago Report
Thanks! It's fun learning what people like about some of these wacky things that fall out of my head.