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Four beautiful, well-bred yet somewhat mischievous young maidens enjoy the pastime of teasing a dragon with their deliciousness, from behind a seemingly impassible magic barrier.
One does wonder if some vore-themed consequences might befall them as a result of such reckless behavior, though. x3
Anywho, this is a story I've had in the works for a rather long time indeed. I'm not really 100% satisfied with the outcome, to be honest: it suffers pretty badly from leaning on my 'default vore formula', and I think the scenes themselves ended up a bit repetitive by the end. Still, there's some pretty fun banter in there I'm quite happy with, and some parts that managed to be more original and dynamic that the usual.
In any case, hope some people might enjoy this. It took long enough for me to finish. xD
EDIT: Currently running a poll to decide what story to write for Halloween this year! Check it out and vote, if you like!
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Posted by PhantomWolf 7 years ago Report
This was a very nice read. Awesome!
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thank you very much! :D
Posted by DrakentheBlack 7 years ago Report
That was so awesome! Those girls got exactly what they deserved. I love stories that have a happy ending.
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thanks!
Indeed, there is truly no more appropriate fate for such mischievous, naughty maidens. :3
Posted by Caudle 7 years ago Report
Wonderful story I do adore how you do dragons, such lovely personality. I also like your more feral predators of course, but it's so hard to beat a smug reptilian smile that opens up to welcome nubile maidens home...
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thank you!
And I must agree, there's something very much appealing about this sort of predator. So much opportunity for witty dialog!
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thank you! I must admit I find a lot of appeal in ill-advised teasing of predators by lovely girls. x3
And yeah, you're absolutely right, they're surely gonna have to add a 'dragon' chapter to that book!
Posted by fallendragon 7 years ago Report
You have no idea the excitement and happiness I felt at seeing an update from you :)
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thank you very much! It does a lot of good for my inspiration in general, to hear that there are people who look forward to new stuff from me. :D
Posted by ouphe 7 years ago Report
Most stories on this site are within a few types of the default vore concepts, the banter and/or character/world development is what makes them unique and enjoyable. I adore your banter!
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thank you very much! I must admit the banters are quite a lot of fun to write for me, and probably the highlight of this one for me.
Posted by averyhillpeak 7 years ago Report
oooh this was great :)
As i've said before your pred prey interactions are awesome :)
(I personally vote for him to improve his social standing maybe get a little closer to that big red XD )
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thank you!
And yes, I'd say the chance of him hosting a 'maiden buffet' is the almost certain final outcome. ;3
I may even decide to write that as a sequel/epilogue type thing, considering this story has gotten an unusually high amount of positive feedback.
Posted by averyhillpeak 7 years ago Report
It was very well done so of course you should be seeing lots of positive feedback :)
Posted by Zwanzik 7 years ago Report
Makes me want to try writing a dragon pred :D nice stuff.
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thank you! I consider it the highest of compliment if I've managed to incite a bit of inspiration in others. :D
Posted by TootCore 7 years ago Report
Your stories are always excellent, however, I noticed they always follow a nealy set pattern.
One aspect of such pattern is that they prey apparently lose all ability to properly express themselves once inside a stomach... I'm curious what it would give if you changed that somehow.
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thanks.
And yeah, that's kinda just something I've taken for granted - that being squished into a stomach like that would be pretty disruptive to any kind of meaningful articulation, but I suppose in the realm of fantasy there's no hard & fast rule regarding that, and it might spice things up under the right circumstances.
Posted by TootCore 7 years ago Report
Hmm ! I'm really curious as to what this could give. It'd be interesting to see what kind of conversation inside of a stomach could spawn from a simple "Melanie ! Your boobs are in my face !" or something similar.
Posted by anais2000 7 years ago Report
Hmmm, I noticed that as well but I think being trapped without hope in a monstruous stomach, covered in digestive slime, churned all over and sometimes in good company probably does something to hamper our ability to communicate. XP
Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report
You've outdone yourself! That was quite delightful. The dragon's patience was certainly rewarded. And the overall well-mannered interactions were amusing.
For some reason, there's something really appealing about a well-bred maiden teasing a dragon with her tastiness. :)
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thank you!
I have to agree, there's just something about a maiden who's also a tease. x3
Posted by Nalzindar 7 years ago Report
Wonderful to see such a well-written dragon story^^ You have already done plenty of different creatures but I enjoy your dragon stories most of them all. A question however, I know we are all cheering for the whatever predator you have, but have you ever considered making a happy end for both your pred and your prey? Making some sort of *twisted* end as a surprise?
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thank you very much! :D
Honestly, the consensual type of vore situations don't really appeal to me fetish-wise, I'm afraid. For whatever reason, I'm just kinda wired for the more primal, struggle-for-survival scenarios . . . though occasionally, I do like it if some of the prey manage to escape, to ensure things don't get too predictable.
Posted by WebpagesAreTrees 7 years ago Report
Having read every story you've ever posted under the name Prinny Dood, I have to say this is probably my new favorite. It had so many great moments I couldn't begin to expound on them all, but I loved scenes like the secret naughty history of the academy and when the dragon disrobed the girl in his mouth and spat the clothing out.
The whole story had a perfect balance of vorish elements that made the whole thing immensely satisfying. I was trembling with excitement just reading the first few paragraphs! It's stories like this that are the reason when I type "a" into my Firefox address bar it immediately suggests your userpage on Aryion.
The only suggestions I can give you are two minor ones: I would of loved to get some different perspectives on the dragon's feasting-- Nichola's view of Bridgette's demise in particular would of been welcomed. I also felt like the ending was a little flat compared to what preceded it. It reminded me of a lot of other endings you've done where it's a sentence or two on how feisty the maidens still are, predator muses about events to himself, and then nap time. Something to shake it up a little would of been interesting, as I personally find it thrilling to hear in detail every aspect of the predator's post-vore situation.
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Wow, thank you very much! High praise indeed! :D
Yeah, I'd originally intended to have scenes for all four girls getting eaten, but I was worried the story had gotten too long and repetitive already, so I kinda ended up folding Nichola into Bridget's 'spotlight time'. Given how popular this one ended up, it's possible I was being overly pessimistic. xD
I do agree that the post-vore scenes with the stuffed predator have a ton of appeal, but I seem to have a hard time doing them justice unless there's a third party there to witness it. When it's just the predator, I usually end up feeling like I'm just repeating myself when I try to expound on the situation. Something I should practice improving, I think. If I ever write the hinted followup to this, it'll be a focus for sure.
Posted by wolfSnack 7 years ago Report
A fantastic story! Any chance there will be a sequel depicting the "glorious feast"? ;)
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thank you very much!
And, considering this story has gotten a bigger positive response than anything I've posted in a LONG time, I'd say there's a VERY good chance of a sequel where the dozens and dozens of remaining maidens meet their fates. x3
Posted by FenrisWolf 7 years ago Report
An excellent story! I always love when dragons remain intelligent, social beings. Even when remaining true to their nature and devouring young maidens!
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thank you!
I certainly agree, there's something rather appealing about this sort of predator.
Posted by Xali 7 years ago Report
Great addition to your volume of work! I wouldn't worry about things like leaning on a formula at all. Fetish stories are pretty much meant to be formulaic, in my opinion; a little departure from a formula can spice things up, but too much change risks losing the reader's (prurient) interest. "The same beloved type of vore, with a new gimmick" like we see here is pretty much exactly what you should be shooting for, in my opinion.
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thanks!
Yeah, I suppose that's true - when you're dealing with this sort of fetish material, in a lot of ways the formula is what makes it work. And given how hugely popular this one was, I'd say it's strong evidence that my audience is alright with this level of formulaic. :D
Posted by anais2000 7 years ago Report
Well what can we say... You mess with a dragon, the dragon messes with you!
Loved loved loved the banter! It's fun! Silent predators feel perhaps more threatening (although the end result doesn't change) but it's nice to have some conversation over ehm, dinner. :)
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Haha, thanks a bunch!
I have to say I had a lot of fun with the banter myself. And while I still do like the primal, incomprehensible threat of a silent, totally alien predator, it is way easier to create a bit of humorous back-and-forth if the predator can communicate.
Posted by Lum_the_mad 7 years ago Report
Fun little story, not quite as satisfying as some of your other ones, but I always do enjoy polite banter, squirming maidens, fantasy settings, and ironic karma. For some reason I pictured something a bit like a combination of little witch academia and zero no tsukaima. Perhaps with a bit of bible black thrown in for good measure. :|a
I just kept thinking the entire time, one of them should have accepted his offer for a stroll. At least then they might have been on better footing with him than digesting thanks to their own stupidity in showing him how to take down the barrier. Of course, he probably would have still eaten whoever decided to go on a stroll with him, but it might have been an interesting twist to have a story where the girls trick another girl into getting herself eaten, and laugh while watching her devoured, only to wind up on the menu seconds later because he lowers the barrier.
One or two typos here you can probably find with ctrl F.
A great flapping, swooping noise filled Bridget's eats for a moment
It hooked just one of those deadly talons into the caller of her blouse, and pulled downward.
Hard to catch little things since a spell check won't pick those up. :P
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
One must always throw in a little Bible Black, whenever one can. x3
Anyway, thanks! This was a silly thing I'd had in various states of completion for several years. But yeah, accepting a dragon's offer for a stroll is usually just as bad an idea as inadvertently showing him how to get past your magic barrier. xD
And thanks for spotting those typos, too. Those are the kind of thing that just slip past my eyes when I'm editing.
Posted by Mechdragon1k 7 years ago Report
I love the gentlemen dragon personality and narration.
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
Thanks! Was quite fun to put together, despite the lengthy and fraught development of this one. And based on the popularity, it turned out way better than I'd thought. :D
Posted by Mechdragon1k 7 years ago Report
Such a awesome and well mannered dragon.
Posted by PrinnyDood 7 years ago Report
I know, right?!
The maidens may complain about all the devouring and digesting, but so long at the dragon is a gentleman about it, I can't see anything wrong with his behavior. x3
Incidentally, I am planning to do a sequel to this, so there may be more well-mannered dragons someday in the future.
Posted by wolfSnack 6 years ago Report
Honestly, THIS is the story I wish we could see a sequel to, haha. A whole bunch of well-mannered dragons descending on the monastery, with possible digestion scenes? Sign me up :3
Posted by PrinnyDood 6 years ago Report
Thanks! And yeah, I certainly agree, this was one of my favorites in recent memory!
The sequel is still 100% something I want to do at some point, and some planning and early work on it has even been done . . . but it's kinda gotten stalled out at the moment. As usual, it's boring logistical stuff, like how many dragons, how to divide the scenes up, how many maiden perspectives to switch between, etc. etc. I'll get it worked out eventually though.
I don't really do hard/graphic digestion, for selfish personal preference reasons, though implied digestion and squishy internal scenes are something I very much enjoy, so those are almost certain to be present.
Posted by Philosoraptor 5 years ago Report
While Dragon Tease 2 was as fine a story as this one, I am sure a lot of fans of both are still a bit disappointed that the much anticipated mass dragon feast in the convent was only mentioned as past history in this one. While the maidens wouldn't have stood much of a chance, that is certainly the case in many of your stories, so finishing "the rest of this story" would be well received I am sure. Even some dragon sized romance might me in order with the aforementioned big Red Dragoness showing some affection to the clever Green who got them into the Convent. I am sure a group of hungry dragons could find so many interesting ways to amuse themselves besides simple mass devourment on such an august occasion, like maybe even divvying up all of the maidens equally, and then play a dragon version of poker or similar game of skill in which the girls are their betting "chips". With (probably) false promises of freedom if they help their respective dragons win, even the maidens might get into the spirit to assist their dragon, while other dragons would be content to eat some of their winnings as they play. I can picture the card playing dragons in the Great hall of the convent squatting around the long central table like those tacky paintings of card playing dogs, but with their groups of maidens instead of poker chips! It would make a great picture to accompany the story too!
Posted by PrinnyDood 5 years ago Report
Yeah, I suppose I did 'tease' that followup, and then not deliver, eh? ;P
But yeah, as I think I mentioned at some point, I spent some time trying to write the 'convent buffet' but ultimately put it on indefinite hold, because of the limited dragon-teasing (the theme of the series) opportunities. As you say, I certainly don't mind scenarios where the prey are effectively helpless from the start, but it seemed off-theme for this series.
That said, there's nothing stopping me from going back and writing the full events out, should the proper inspiration strike. And I must admit, the idea of them playing 'dragon poker' with all the girls as chips, is hilariously compelling. There's even a very plausible reason for the maiden's to help 'their' dragon win - questionable promises or not, if a dragon ends up too full to eat all their 'winnings', the remaining maidens (ostensibly) have a chance.