Posted by Zalzas 7 years ago Report

Holy shoot, that twist near the end took me by surprise! I was so nervous about who she was going to find, that was tense as heck! I can't wait to see where this goes.

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Thanks! That's what I was hoping for. The fact that she herself didn't know who her victims were going to be: It was random predation, and could have happened to any of them.

Posted by mach-one 7 years ago Report

WOW. That was extremely sexy, tense and unexpected. I do feel kinda sorry for Josie, even, I did like her during the story - she was very predatory but still nice and all around well written. Maybe we could get a more detailed sendoff for her and Inés? I was really left wanting for more of the ruthless Lucy after that deeply cruel dinner, I guess that's why probably you still stand as my favourite vore writer.

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Thanks! Poor Josie; it's not what she expected from her first competition... And now there she is, crammed in with chocolate cake and dinner inside Lucy's tightly filled stomach. Soon to be digested... I didn't want to dwell on writing her distress from her point of view, though; and the story is quite long already. :)

Posted by mach-one 7 years ago Report

I've seen on comments here and on DA that Josie was actually one of your subscriber's characters, so I guess she was never going to make it; thankfully I didn't know that while I read the story so it was more of a surprise.
Plus, her complex backstory: Her recently eaten and maybe not even fully digested boyfriend, the band, her childhood friend, the IVC victims still inside her... Made it all the more shocking and intense at the end, I'm guessing deliberately. Plus now I've re-read it you spot details like Lucy not giving much thought to her IVC prey's consent that give you hints of what's about to happen.

I'd really like to hear more from Lucy even if there's no more Josie around (I'd understand her creator may not appreciate more detailed digestion sequences).

Can't really say how much I enjoyed this one, there's a ton of gold in it. The moment in which Lucy has called on Josie's door and the poor girl has agreed to open so the reader already knows she's going to be prey but she still relishes for a moment in her own previous prey already deep in her digestive system as if she was an apex pred, the details on Lucy's behaviour after that and on Part 1 the talk show scene as well as Maple's and Lucky's are absolutely great too.
I guess we look for very similar details in vore plus your own good storytelling.

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Thank you. And well spotted: Before opening the door, Josie was still basking in the innocent satisfaction of being a "pred", having eager but now partly-digested little people inside her. Until Lucy showed her what predation actually is.

Posted by Kasra 7 years ago Report

What a great story! Messing with our expectations right from the very start, all the way until the end. Patricia got lucky indeed. Though it is a shame that Carissa and Patricia aren't on good terms anymore, it makes a good amount of sense. And Josh took that news better than could've been hoped for.

Lucy, though...we have ourselves an antagonist! So many ways that could end up going, I can't wait to find out.

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Thanks! Josh will keep on trying to reconcile them, I think. They have a family connection now, so it will be difficult for them to just ignore each other.

Posted by petitepred 7 years ago Report

Amazing story! Thanks for including my request. Ivy was very nicely written.

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

You're welcome. I'm glad you enjoyed it. And Ivy was able to sneak a taste of those shrunken volunteers... :p

Posted by Fetishist 7 years ago Report

Fuck! Did that really just happen? Please tell me Josie is having a similar dream to Patricia at tbe beginning :(

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Sadly, no: She's gone... It was requested by her creator when I was preparing this story with input from readers.

Posted by Fetishist 7 years ago Report

Thats a pity. I thought she was your most interesting character to date.

The story was so good! But that ending was brutal.

It made me sad but at the same time I was impressed that you were able to play with my emotions with a fetish story. That takes some skill. I applaud you sir!

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Thank you!

Posted by bedfordsb 7 years ago Report

Another winner - great job! Inspires me to get cracking!

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Great! :D

Posted by srimak 7 years ago Report

I concur with French_snack!

Posted by Zephyr42 7 years ago Report

Well, Carissa will have given birth by the finals. Would Patricia still be pregnant by then, perchance? I can't help but imagine her trying to compete in the early stages of labor.

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Ha ha! That would just be cruel. :D No, I think the final will be about fourteen months after this qualifier.

Posted by Zephyr42 7 years ago Report

Ah, OK. Patricia is spared, then. |-D

Something I like is that Natalia seems to have shaped up a little. I'd love to see more of her becoming a better person in future.

Posted by Mouthplayer 7 years ago Report

That was an unbelievably good read. I enjoyed it immensely. In my opinion the best IVC story so far, and probably not by coincidence, the longest.

I have commented on the Patricia-Carissa situation on DeviantArt so I won't add anything more on here.

There were so many scenes and characters to like. Firstly Billie Jo and Rudi Zapanta - the way that concluded was perfect, both very willing participants in their respective ways.

Josie seducing Maple was another highlight, the revelation that she had successfully convinced her to be eaten up hours earlier was a great surprise and much better than a prolonged sequence about her being shrunk and swallowed which would have just been another monotonous vore scene.

Josie realizing that Lucky wanted to be eaten was one of the best passages you have written, in my view. It was almost a parallel to the Patricia-Josh storyline but with the conclusion that those two seem fated to avoid.

There were other great characters, Kamiya, Abha, Marissa, Natalia and Ivy all contributed and made me want more from them. They all have attributes that could carry their own wider stories.

Some of the little moments were fun too - Helen the mom who wanted to know why her son was so keen to be eaten, and Julie who was perfectly happy to watch her husband slide down Josie's throat. Natalia's tinies deciding that they didn't want to be eaten by a mean spirited loudmouth made me smile.

And that final part. What can I say? That twist was a genuine shock. I had to read it three times to make sure it wasn't another dream sequence. We had been invited into Josie's world, her vlog, eating her boyfriend, her childhood friend, jostling with Particia and being playful with Julie. So when she became a victim of Lucy's evil plan, the waste of her young lively soul had quite an impact.

And the subtle clues about Lucy's intentions were excellent, but only when overviewing the plot in retrospect - the eating of tinies too readily without asking them first, the mysterious circumstances surrounding her husband and dropping out of the contest early like she was in a hurry to do something. Those little points all made sense when she zapped the hapless Ines and Josie.

That was a very long review, sorry. I should probably have commented on both parts separately.

Makes me crave some more!

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Thank you very much. I'm glad you picked up retroactively on those little signs about Lucy! Nothing that any of her fellow competitors could view as danger signals... except in retrospect.

I too would rather like to see "spin-off" stories about Abha, Kamiya and some of the others! Readers certainly came up with some interesting character baselines for me to work with. Including Josie, who indeed I wanted to show coming to life for us before she was snatched away for Lucy's brief illicit pleasure...

Posted by josiesshrinkkink 7 years ago Report

I'm really pleased with the positive comments that my character is receiving on here and DA.

I don't think I would be so popular if I made through the story alive tho.

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

You gave me some good material to work with, to make her an endearing character. I think she (you) would, in fact, have been popular as a survivor too. Readers would have liked to see her again.

Posted by josiesshrinkkink 7 years ago Report

Maybe. I'm just pleased that it turned out like it did. I am very grateful.

It would be possible to do some prequels centred around the live vore blog if you ever want to use me again I would be honored.

Posted by mach-one 7 years ago Report

I did enjoy Josie way before the story's end, she had a good combination between her cute and cheerful nature along with her darker, very predatory side. The character ended up being more soulful, in my opinion, even than some regular characters in the IVC; that ended up making her demise that much sexier since she wasn't just one more faceless figure to be eaten but it's still kind of a shame. Kudos to you for your role in her creation!

Posted by josiesshrinkkink 7 years ago Report

Thankyou. French_snack did a wonderful job putting flesh and bones on a few of my simple ideas. Most of the facts about Josie (me) are true so it didn't take much imagination. He captured my personality very well I thought.

I am pleased that people have reacted warmly to Josie. It was my idea that she would get eaten because she was only ever intended for this story. I was surprised how much of plot is dedicated to her, I was expecting a few paragraphs at most.

If the author decides to use Josie again from an earlier period of her life, I would have no problem with that if that's what people want, but ultimately it's his decision.

Posted by kokeman 7 years ago Report

Wooow such an amazing story! I would have liked to have a little of Josie's and Ines's point of view inside Lucy, maybe even finding out they were not the only ones... idk

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Thanks! Writing Josie and Inès' perspective inside Lucy's stomach would have been... rather dark and brutal. I preferred to keep some of the horror implicit.

Posted by passingthroughyou 7 years ago Report

Absolutely amazing. I was so excited when you announced a new IVC was on the way and it did not disappoint.

Although I was surprised by the plot twist with Lucy eating Ines and Josie I won't pretend that I didn't enjoy it. I have read many unwilling vore scenes but this felt very different because it came out the blue and packed a punch - albeit in hindsight there were a few warning signs when Lucy was eating her tinies in the contest.

I cannot wait for the next story. I hope you are able to write it soon.

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Thank you. The next IVC story is likely to be the European qualifiers. It won't be straight away, though; I have other types of stories to write first. :)

Posted by lazylayjay 7 years ago Report

I discovered the IVC stories recently and the series has become my personal favourites. I have to say that is the best one of them all so I just had to comment.

I'm struggling to accepting Josie's fate. She was an amazing character and just as soon as she was introduced, she was taken away :( but that just proves how good the story was.

I can't wait until the next one!

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Thank you! There'll definitely be more.

Posted by Eccentrichousewife 7 years ago Report

As a big fan of unwilling vore I was thrilled at Ines's and Josie's abrupt demise.

I hope we see more of Lucy in future stories gobbling up some more unconsenting victims.

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

That will depend whether she gets away with it this time, or not...

Posted by shortprey20 7 years ago Report

Ooh well done! I know everyone has said something similar but man i loves the twist at the end! The contrast between the more innocent and legal kind of vore and the sadistic illegal side was truly a delight to read. Though ill be honest while i loved the twist my very strong sense of justice is hoping that lucy gets what she deserves soon! :p

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Thanks! The switch from light-hearted vore to sudden evil was interesting to write. The question is, indeed, whether she's done enough to cover her tracks...

Posted by shortprey20 7 years ago Report

Lol too true! It might sound funny but ive always had mixed feelings about unwilling vore. I love it and it adds something to me for this in a sexual way but when i read stories with a sadistic pred (even though they are mt favorite) i always feel this sense of vengeance that they should be punished and punished harshly, and of course for most of the stories on this site that doesnt happen (because who doesnt want the sex5t pred to win?).
So for this story where it switched from the sweet innocent vore to the evil more devishly sexual vore where the pred got off to it (again this is my favorite type!) It was a true shock and i cannpt express to you how great a twist i found it to be! :p but still i just have that nagging feeling of i hope she gets whats coming to her. Dont know why its just a story on ekas after all but still id love to see more of lucy and her naughty ways but id also like to see her get caught and punished because im a man of contradictions :p looking forward to your next piece keep up the phenomenal work! :D

Posted by Sleepless 7 years ago Report

I read this months ago so I apologize for my tardy comment.

The sudden injection of unwilling vore took me by complete surprise, I was conflicted about it at first, I liked Josie so it was a shame to have her killed off so quickly. I re-read the story and I think the part where Lucy stalks the hotel corridors is one the best passages you have written. Originally I was tense with anticipation about who she would catch next, it was nearly Patricia!

I think the IVC needs a bit of cruelty from time to time to make us realize that things are not always cozy or consensual.

Oh, and the Patricia/Josh/Carissa situation is developing nicely, although it probably means that vore is no longer on the cards?

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Thanks. Yes, I think it was inevitable that one of the competitors would abuse the possibilities of a shrink ray at some point. And indeed, Patricia had a narrow escape!

It does look as if Patricia isn't going to want to be eaten, or to eat Josh now, yes... They have new responsibilities that they can't just abandon to be eaten.

Posted by kbDArt 1 year ago Report

I guess I was hoping the second victim of Lucy Chen would be Natalia Protsky instead of Josie. It would have been good karma for her. I really liked the Josie character. :(

Posted by French_snack 1 year ago Report

Josie was nice, yes. Poor girl. :(

I have a flashback story with her here: https://aryion.com/g4/view/461565 .

And Mouthplayer has a story about what happened later with Lucy: https://aryion.com/g4/view/799460 .

Posted by kbDArt 1 year ago Report

Oh yes, those are both already in my favorites. :)