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Wow... Here it is... The worst one I have made all month. I'm not even going to give it an actual hook or intro like I normally do... I would delete it but this week has been so crazy I don't have another story to upload and I don't want to risk losing my challenge so... Whatevs!
Enjoy the 18th story in my November challenge.
To supplement this short, and messy story I added alternate endings to my previous Saw story which can be found here:
https://aryion.com/g4/view/493582
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Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 6 years ago Report
Juat out of curiosity, why do you think this is the worst one you've written
Posted by surtech5 6 years ago Report
Oh God where do I start? The characterization is so basic I didn't even give anyone a name. The twist is so obvious it doesn't work as a twist, but comes so late it doesn't work as base line for the story either. The world set up is confusing with undefined rules and consequences. The actual vore scene is rushed and the ending seems pointless.
These are probably issues I could fix if I wanted to but... Man it's just so much that it would be easier to make another one.
Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 6 years ago Report
Lmao so what im getting is the story is under develiped and predictable. When ypu say it like that, yeah it does seem like the worst from a written perspective. Still though the one stinker out of a near months worth of better stories isnt something worth stressing about.
Posted by Rat_Guy 6 years ago Report
Well I liked it.
Posted by Robotdocter 3 years ago Report
i quite like that the hospital definitely completely screwed themselves here, very good story even though you say it was the worst :P
Posted by doomed 3 months ago Report
i remember this story every so often. its an amusing story of the incompetence of sexism