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Kay was banished to a remote estate as a child long ago. Living a sedentary with the staff his life is about to be shaken when a Liderc/Chiuael demon(Different breeds of succubus) makes his estate their new hunting ground. Unknown to anyone Kay can reform but his beloved staff cannot. But is reforming enough for Kay to save the only people he's ever known?
Liderc - A hungarian household demon that can take the form of relatives or close relations of the victim.
They have sex with the victim to drain them of life. Their weakness is being told to do chores which they are then compelled to do.
Chiuael - An asian sex demon that takes the form of beautiful women in order to lure men to a sexual doom. Their shapeshifting isn't limited to relatives.
They gain some of the memories of their victims.
An anonymous commission.
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Posted by Marpatt 5 years ago Report
I don't know how you do it, but you seem to have a knack for making long stories, that are not only fun vore filled romps, but also actually include a plot and story.
I actually got really attached to Cili and *SPOILERS* was very afraid when that doorbell rang, since the hunter could hurt either Kay or her.
I really hope you do another story with these two, and go further into their relationship, and I also am looking forward to more of your stories like this (as time consuming as writing a cohesive story as long as this one can be)
Great work!
Posted by Alias49 5 years ago Report
Wow. That went from dull to unreadable in under a page.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 5 years ago Report
I do believe it is still correct sentence structures and there aren't any misspelled words. So unreadable is a bit of a stretch.
I welcome criticism but supply specific examples of what is wrong or you're just trolling. I'm under no obligation not to just delete garbage comments like this.
Posted by shortprey20 5 years ago Report
Nice!!! This had a great plot and actually a surprising amount of feelings to go with the vore! Loved the work you do!
Posted by Sira 5 years ago Report
A lovely work as always, hun.
Posted by homelessman 5 years ago Report
It is a rare treat to enjoy something as much as I enjoyed this story. Thank you.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 5 years ago Report
The premise called for it to end this way. Not gonna argue that it felt slightly forced though. I think I could make their relationship develop over twice the length and it still would seem somewhat unnatural for him to just forgive the deaths of the only five people close to him.
I considered him just going crazy and pretending they were still there through Cili, or perhaps Cili channeling their spirits but it felt too convenient and magic hand waving.
I think the only improvement could've been a lingering resentment of her. But the character profile didn't call for it. *shrug* can't win em all.
Posted by 2quick4u 5 years ago Report
H9ly hell. That was an amazing read
Posted by 2quick4u 5 years ago Report
Read it a few more time so i could give somewhat better comment than "hero derp busted the bestest of nuts"
As this was a departure from what you normalky put out, i enjoyed a scattless break. Your writing, and the images the accompany it, are enough to bear with scat/dispisal content, but it was refreshing to have none present.
The sex was very well written, but the duo tail scene seemed a bit... "off" somehow? I can quite get a tangible thing down, but thats just the scrub of the mood of it.
Personal favorite was the breast vore scene, as well as the relationship that was created over the course of the story.
Sure, the premise is a bit weird, but im nihilistic enough to buy it.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 5 years ago Report
It was sort of a departure. The commissioner explicitly didn't want any butt stuff including disposal. So yeah not even a mention of it. Digestion was also limited to be less gorey and more melty.
The tail vore scene was actually my favorite but was heavily modified when I had to go from gorey to simply melty. That one got very brutal, using parts of Callie to get off with even past her demise. So it got cut considerably and I added another UB part to compensate the length.
And yeah it is a tough nut to swallow but the premise called for it so *shrug*
Posted by grz01 5 years ago Report
Fantastic novel, seriously hot many thanks
Posted by anonymous19999 5 years ago Report
u deserve a special award in plotting vore stories for this and nanostorm. v good pace and structure
Posted by ryanshowseason3 5 years ago Report
I still feel like Sculptors of Sagascar tops nanostorm but probly a fantasy vs sci fi preference thing.
Posted by ThatOneVoraphile 4 years ago Report
I've never enjoyed and hated myself for enjoying a story this much before. Good work though, lovely balance of plot & smut. I loved it but jesus fuck this is depressing.