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Mariah and her stepmother are driving home through Dolcett County when they stopover at the local Girl-Mart. Mariah is excited to pick up a meat-girl to spit for her birthday, but her stepmother has more of a "drop-off" than a "pick-up" plan.
This story is a commission for Uri whose story idea got me so excited I had to accept immediately. But it turns out enthusiasm can be a curse as I went into more and more detail on how I imagined the Girl-Mart to be like. Rather than rush through the whole story arc, we decided it'd be best to publish the story in multiple parts, so here's part 1. Please enjoy <3
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Posted by InvisibleHand 5 years ago Report
Great story! The introduction to the world and setting is well done. I noticed a few tiny typos, but it was a joy to read. Looking forward to part 2!
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
Thanks! I'm really glad to hear you enjoyed it <3 I was getting a bit anxious over the muted response so far.
I did a few editing passes but with this story twice as long as my usual ones, I don't think I was as careful as I should have been with the typos. I'll try to check my carefully in part 2.
Posted by TheDarkTraveler 5 years ago Report
sounds like they are both going to end up as meat and good ridence to them
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
Indeed~ Teensy bit of a spoiler, but part 2 involves Mariah and the two former-IRS women getting spitted (Mariah gets the additional humiliation of being spitted with an actual pig). If you have any suggestions on ways they might be degraded or otherwise dealt with, I'd love to hear them <3
Posted by TheDarkTraveler 5 years ago Report
only that I want to see that money grabbing step-mum get her just desserts by becoming dessert
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
Haha yeah, the original story commission brief didn't have anything happen to the stepmom. I thought it was more fun to have had Mariah have pre-arranged to have her sold but I'm not sure how much of that I'll get to show. We'll see how it goes.
Posted by TheDarkTraveler 5 years ago Report
just need an epilogue at the end to show her being taken away and I will be happy.
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
Ah ok, I'll make sure the stepmom is shown to get her just deserts~
Posted by emikochan 5 years ago Report
Fuck, that was amazing, I can't wait for part 2 <3
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
Thank you so much! I'm so thrilled you liked it. <3
Posted by emikochan 5 years ago Report
ah damn, was hoping it'd be about how the stepmom is about to start enjoying her life and Mariah's plan kicks in XD
The other idea seems great too though ^_^
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
Haha the stepmom has proved a lot more popular than I was expecting. The revised plan is that she will turn up again in the latter bit of Part 2. I'm not sure yet whether she gets delivered just as Mariah is served up, or if they spend some time caged together.
Posted by emikochan 5 years ago Report
<3
Posted by roostuf 5 years ago Report
mmm~ lovely and promising <3
i hope there will be more soon, and with mariah just giving and finding nothing but pleasure in her future and girl meat ;3
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
Thank you~ And yeah Mariah is going to find she enjoys being a meat-girl a lot more than she expected. Her biggest issue is just her inability to finger herself while tied up. But who knows, maybe she'll be lucky enough to be squished up against another meat-girl when she's sold~
Posted by Genericcook 5 years ago Report
Such a great one!
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
Thanks kitvander, that's kind of you to say~
Posted by BardicLasher 5 years ago Report
This is great! PLEASE more like this!
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
Thanks Bardic~ There's a part 2 to come soon with lots of Dolcett fun, I'm not sure about after that. I'll probably start a fresh storyline, but we'll see~
Posted by Turyun 5 years ago Report
Wonderful story !!! I can't wait for part 2, I'm sure it will be delicious <3
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
Thank you~ I've got the first scene written, but part 2 is going to be loooooooong with all the things that need to happen.
Posted by Turyun 5 years ago Report
I'm sure it will look great, I'm really looking forward to seeing how Mariah will react in her new life as meat, I'm also curious to see what happens to Nicole :3
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
It's not like Mariah has much of a life to get used to, she'll only have a few hours left~ <3
Posted by DJ4K 5 years ago Report
This is one of my all time favorite Dolcett stories. I love all the small details like how the father liked free ranged meat and how the two girls had tried to get each other roasted before.
Posted by BunnyWrites 5 years ago Report
Oh thank you very much! I'm glad you liked all the little details, I love hinting at so much more vore/dolcett stuff going on in the world. It just brings a setting to life and provides lots of fun ideas for other stories.
There's a part 2 of this I've got drafted, but have been stalling forever on finishing editing. I really should get back to it.
Posted by DJ4K 5 years ago Report
I completely agree, extra world detail can make a story so much better. Like frosting on a cake. I'm really looking forward to the sequel. Good luck! :)
Posted by Eter 4 years ago Report
Not gonna lie, six months on I'm still hoping for Part 2.
Posted by BunnyWrites 4 years ago Report
The crazy part is that I actually had part 2 mostly written up just a few days after finishing part 1, but I stalled with editing and the delays grew and grew and here we are 6 months later.
I feel so guilty about the delays. Anyway, as I don't know if I'll ever finish the draft of part 2, I'll throw it up here on google docs if you want a look. Keep in mind this was a rough draft, the latter half in particular is going to have a significant rewrite, but it might be fun to read anyway.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sBoya0yo8MOGaq0KkVPXUQA4noJKiq1RPvAJqdRlcAs/edit?usp=sharing
Posted by Genericcook 4 years ago Report
Thought the second part was super solid! Hope you get back to it sometime, but I totally get falling off stories
Posted by BunnyWrites 4 years ago Report
Ah thank you! I think it needs tidying up a lot. It's rather hard to have fairly smooth flowing prose when you don't have any names. It's constantly "the woman on the left, no the other left, the woman past that one, she smiles."
It was a lot of fun to write though and I had so many fun plans for the actual spitting phase in part 3, it'd be a shame not to get to it.
Posted by Genericcook 4 years ago Report
A first person spit roast experience is always fun to witness ;)
Though I can attest its quite nice being in third person for that XD
Posted by BunnyWrites 4 years ago Report
There should be scope for both, as Mariah both watches a couple of other meatgirls spitted and cooked before her, and then gets to "enjoy" it herself <3
Posted by Dracon_Kitsune 4 years ago Report
Hiya, just putting in my interest for an official part 2 as well, the preview was fun~
Posted by BunnyWrites 4 years ago Report
Thanks! I keep meaning to get back to this, but at the moment the commission queue is keeping me pretty busy. On the plus side, there is a cooking story coming in a week or two that should be a lot of fun~
Posted by clockwork3x 3 years ago Report
Is there no part 2 I don’t see it posted anywhere
Posted by BunnyWrites 3 years ago Report
Sadly no, I stalled with part 2 of it. It's the only story left unfinished.
Posted by kewlasshole 2 years ago Report
reread this again, still a huge turn on!
Posted by BunnyWrites 2 years ago Report
Thanks <3 It's probably been my most popular story~