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A foolish young man from an affluent modern family takes the wrong shortcut and finds himself accosted by a hungry predator. Will this end well for him? (Hint: absolutely not).
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A quick experiment in doing longer term digestion with a focus on what the prey feels just as much as what the predator feels. I feel like I learned something from this. Probably. At the very least I am far too proud of the title pun. I'm sure it's been done before, but it's for my story, so there! Clearly the best.
Mary is probably a one-off character. Maybe. I choose characters basically at random so who knows, honestly? I wanted a punk biker girl and I like sharks. Sadly, she doesn't get to ride a bike in this. Maybe next time, if there is a next time.
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Posted by threk 4 years ago Report
Ha, the bit where he's telling a mugger in a dark back alley that they're breaking the law.
"What do you mean you're being murdered?
That's illegal, people can't do that."
A joy to read, the extended sequence when he was still conscious and fighting after being swallowed was excellent, (always better when we get to see the prey lasting longer,) and a tall, bitchy punk biker sharkgirl just makes for a great pred. Great work!
Posted by Drakeral 4 years ago Report
"Being eaten? Just say no. You cannot legally be swallowed without your consent-" Gulp!
I'm happy to please! Shower scenes with vore are always fantastic, and I wanted to try my hand at the longer stuff- since I tend to have the prey be gurgled relatively soon after getting gulped. And I'm glad Mary made a good pred- I've always loved shark girls and tough girls, so putting the two together seemed a good idea xD
Posted by C107galaxytachyon 4 years ago Report
Capitalism: am I right?
Posted by Drakeral 4 years ago Report
It's a dog eat dog world out there! Or... is it shark eat dog here?
Posted by wolfSnack 4 years ago Report
The personalities here, and the digestion sequence, were great! I loved the wolf's acclimatization to his new position while in the shower... I'd love to see some implied (or explicit) disposal if you do this kind of thing again, but I know that's not everyone's cup of tea ;)
Posted by Drakeral 4 years ago Report
I'm glad you liked it! I'm afraid I don't really like disposal, so I likely won't write it in the future. Thank you for the compliment, though! I'm glad people enjoyed the longer digestion on display.
Posted by Jinxopow 4 years ago Report
Fantastic!
Posted by Drakeral 4 years ago Report
Thank you! I'm glad you ejoyed it.
Posted by sharky 4 years ago Report
Very Nice
Posted by Drakeral 4 years ago Report
Ey, thank you! I suppose a shark would like this one, huh? xD
Posted by fireflydragoness 4 years ago Report
oh this is REALLY good im gonna be thinking abt this story for a while lol
Posted by Fischie 4 years ago Report
I really enjoyed this story. The scenery and subject matter were well matched and the "people from different worlds" aspect qas well explored.
The digestion from both perspectives was very vividly described but felt a tad repetitive to me at times.
But that wolf sure had his share of class struggle in her stomach :9
Posted by Typhuun 6 months ago Report
New comment old story I know, but I still believe this might be one of the best stories on the site. Can't believe I forgot to favorite it!