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A reluctant, well-mannered student helps throw and attends an illegal party in the woods, complete with alcohol and probably drugs somewhere, he wasn't paying attention. The local police officer busts them. Things go... not so well.
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This one is a slightly odd one, but hopefully enjoyable. I like 'familiar' vore as well as betrayal vore, which Is uppose this counts as. Police vore is also great, and I like huskies- this entire thing was sorta wish fulfillment, I suppose, after a friend mentioned the idea xD
Originally, I started writing this as a tragic sort of thing. It... didn't stay that way. I think it's relatively dark, although no more than most vore stories, and at the very least slightly comedic. In any case, it was fun to write.
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Posted by Ohgra 3 years ago Report
The betrayal and familial but unreasonable pred aspects in this are gold, not nearly enough of it out there.
Posted by Justsomeone 3 years ago Report
This was pretty good. I liked it!
Posted by AnAccount 3 years ago Report
I'm sorry but her just letting everyone else go but also saying "oh I can't just let you go jackie" just ruins the whole story for me. This is besides the whole judge, jury, and executioner thing of course. It isn't very convincing that the characters deserve their fates the way it was set up. I mean it's supposed to be hot that it's a betrayal, but the rules established are what were actually betrayed. She's the opposite of impartial, while justifying her decisions by claiming to be impartial.
I wanted to like this as it's an interesting situation and it is written well so sorry for the negativity.
Posted by Ohgra 3 years ago Report
Honestly that's a big part of what worked for me on this one, Holly IS being unreasonable but there is still a ruleset being followed. While the rest were underage drinkers, they are getting a chance in the way Mal had before, they get the chance to shape up because they are younger and were following along. But Jackie, though unwilling and weak-willed, was the one who bought the booze and enabled the whole thing, making him a ring-leader in the way Mal was.
It really hit some buttons for me, I'm actually now messing around with a similar concept myself!
Posted by Drakeral 3 years ago Report
Thank you! I'm glad to hear I inspired you, even a little bit. I'll be sure to read yours when you're finished!
Posted by AnAccount 3 years ago Report
Ohgra makes great stuff, I'm also eager to see what they come up with due to your work
Posted by Ohgra 3 years ago Report
<3
Posted by AnAccount 3 years ago Report
How would she have known he bought all the alcohol? Tbf I know the way this played out is a lot of people's preference for how prey are treated so I get it. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much though
Posted by Ohgra 3 years ago Report
She says in the story she overhead him saying to Mal
Posted by AnAccount 3 years ago Report
I don't know how I missed that
Posted by Drakeral 3 years ago Report
Oh, no, thank you for commenting! Constructive criticism is still criticism, after all.
Part of the reason, at least how I viewed it when writing it, was because she simply couldn't get everyone else. If you've ever seen a party being broken up, people scatter like lemmings. She got Mal, who was the more important one there, but Jackie just kind of stood around. She'd have let him go if he'd ran.
Part of it, though, is that I just don't think you can really be convincing when it comes to vore stories like this without changing the tags quite a bit. Jackie didn't deserve any of it, but most people in regards to vore don't- snarfing random strangers is very popular, for example. I could've made him a terrible person or something, a technique I've used if I wanted a predator to be more outright sympathic, but it was supposed to be a betrayal sort of thing, in my eyes. If they deserved to be eaten, it wouldn't be the same thing, ya feel me?
Posted by AnAccount 3 years ago Report
I see where you're coming from, and thank you for explaining it.
Posted by HibiscusAmbrosia 3 years ago Report
Man, Holly is absolutely everything I love in a pred... great story!!! I practically want to offer myself to her
Posted by Mechdragon1k 3 years ago Report
I agree it felt pretty dark, prey did not deserve or enjoy the fate while the pred being a close friend drove the knife inl