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Zachariah finds out his pregnant neighbor needs help around the house. Easy money, right?
If only his sisters would stop hiding and help.
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Posted by Vstar66 4 years ago Report
Great story man
Posted by Whatisaname 4 years ago Report
Thank you!
Posted by Apostolos 4 years ago Report
Hmm so Tala got all four in the end.... that’s gonna be a real interesting missing persons case
Posted by Whatisaname 4 years ago Report
What do you mean? Nothing suspicious about a belly that large. Definitely.
Posted by Apostolos 4 years ago Report
Yeah but the kid goes missing from a hospital room, that there’s presumably only one way out of and no one except Tala possibly left
Posted by Nightcrawler99 4 years ago Report
Would love to see a sequel to this where Zach wakes up and he’s in Tala with his sisters! The woman is doing various things while carrying them around but taking all four of them at once maybe more trouble than she can handle.
Posted by Whatisaname 4 years ago Report
Yeah, like a story from the inside? That could be pretty interesting.
Posted by Nightcrawler99 4 years ago Report
I'm fond of the idea that Unbirth, when done by someone who's either pushing their limits or doing it for self pleasure, doesn't always go according to plan.
I like mishaps and unexpected turnarounds.
If she takes Zach she's maxed out, and its gonna be a real handful dealing with four kids trying to bust out of her belly. Simple tasks will be made harder too.
If it were me in there, I'd cause as much trouble as I could at every moment I could. Regardless if all my efforts do is turn her on, it will wear her down some and it can also be very irritating if done at inappropriate times.^^
Posted by LemonBarb 4 years ago Report
Honestly, might be interesting if going on a long term, it's an inside horror story, where everyone's either slowly regressing or being absorbed. And they can't get out at all, only 'deeper' until their 'due', adoption wise.
Posted by Nightcrawler99 4 years ago Report
Hmm.. Not real fond of regression or absorption.
Loss of life or repurposing are not my cup of tea really.
Its "Entrapment" for the messy win with me.
I like the domination aspect, and when you add in situations that the secret she unbirthed people is almost revealed it makes it even more interesting.
My favorite thing to see is selfish motives that lead to odd situations and loss of control for the one doing the unbirthing.
A struggle to keep their occupants contained and to maintain appearances while in a public setting.
And if by chance one does escape... I want to see black mail! Sorry, you may have gotten out but you still cant leave.^^
To put things simply, when it comes to Unbirth, Im in it because I want to see the FULL journey not just it happen and then its over because the poor saps that go in get reprocessed.
I crave more that. I crave real struggle and conflict!
Posted by LemonBarb 4 years ago Report
To be fair, there's another alternative, if going by a stray thought. And that's the possibility of either "shrinking" long term, or being kept in a symbiotic relationship, by hormone imprinting.
But stray thoughts aside, I'd probably want to imagine if there's a sequel, the likely fate of either being absorbed, or regressed from an inside point of view. I mean, it's one thing going "and then this person's body's shrunk/regressed, or absorbed/integrated within predatory flesh." But another thing writing it from the point of view, and existence of the victims/entrapped.
If nothing else, I'd probably bet long term, everyone trapped inside her would likely have their entire lives dependant, until they are 'due'... If, they're even due at this rate.
Posted by Groblek 4 years ago Report
Ooh, fun! And that ending twist was great.
Posted by Whatisaname 4 years ago Report
Thanks a ton! :)
Posted by LemonBarb 4 years ago Report
Can't help but read it again in detail. But still can't help but want to imagine an "inside story" sequel to this story. If only to see/expand on the long term 'fate' of the unwilling passengers.
Posted by Whatisaname 4 years ago Report
I think a sequel would be a fun idea, but we've got a couple other ideas first.
Posted by pendingdelet9024239vb4 4 years ago Report
I loved this. And its great they all ended up together.
Posted by elliotalien08 4 years ago Report
I loved this, i love these unbirth stories so much