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Promises and trust are the backbone of relationships. Also, being alive, that's important too.

***SPOILERS IN TAGS AND DESCRIPTION***

This was a big one, and we've had it coming for a while now. We set this up 22 stories ago; that's over a 10-month gap in terms of writing time. From the moment he was introduced, we knew how he would end. Honestly, it's hard for me to 'end' characters unless I know I'm going to from the onset. I do wonder how obvious it was. Did you see it coming? Did you think it would be Ozzy instead? Or both of them? Were you totally blindsided?

To any and all the Zach fans: I offer my condolences, and I'm sure the Fiona fan club will happily make accommodations for you. Now that he'll be a part of her, it only follows that the fans should go along too, right?

Random side note, but I kinda love the fact that Arthur's plan was basically the same as Zach's, and that Zach and Ozzy didn't expect their attackers to be using the same strategy. I know I'm kinda patting myself on the back, considering I wrote it, but I still think it's a cool detail.

Oh, and here's the craziest part: this wasn't even the oldest or largest twist we have planned. This was the warm up. Co-creator  x9comega and I have even bigger things coming pretty darn soon. And when they're ready, you'll find them along with the rest of our series right here:
https://aryion.com/g4/view/569713

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Daduke

Posted by Daduke 3 years ago Report

Mmmmm damn Jack loss a friend and kind of mentor *to* his friend. He's going to be in a hell of a slump if Ozzy gets that news to him.

Daduke

Posted by Daduke 3 years ago Report

Caught me completely of guard btw. I thought maybe there would be a quick get away, a eat and release, or maybe human preds hunting Fi & Arthur.

5UP3RN0V4

Posted by 5UP3RN0V4 3 years ago Report

Human preds?
Are you sure you know the storyline?

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

I'd say he does. They're even mentioned in this very story. The ones who change their bodies with magic.

5UP3RN0V4

Posted by 5UP3RN0V4 3 years ago Report

Interesting. Here's to hope that Zach gets saved in time. If not... I hope Ozzy gets eaten soon as well.

MingauNight

Posted by MingauNight 3 years ago Report

Why? For him to be reunited with Zach in the other world or for Jack have no human friends anymore?

5UP3RN0V4

Posted by 5UP3RN0V4 3 years ago Report

To be reunited in the other world.

MingauNight

Posted by MingauNight 3 years ago Report

Let him stay a little more, at least until Jack makes more friends. hehehe

5UP3RN0V4

Posted by 5UP3RN0V4 3 years ago Report

It’s for the author’s to decide.
How, I get a feeling that Jack will get into a heated fight with Fiona, even if she didn’t know Zach is one of Jack’s friends.

x9comega

Posted by x9comega 3 years ago Report

We've had Human preds before. One tried to eat Jack once even. And I beleive there was another in Detention, if memory serves.

5UP3RN0V4

Posted by 5UP3RN0V4 3 years ago Report

I see. Hopefully, Zach will be saved, just in case you guys change your mind of letting him die.

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

I tried to set it up so there were many ways it could plausibly turn out. Gotta keep my readers on their toes.

Mechdragon1k

Posted by Mechdragon1k 3 years ago Report

To be hopeful he is not digested yet, so there a possibility ozzy tells Jack to rescue zack or Fiona puts the dots together on why he hesitated. Can Fiona listen to her prey if she puts her ear to a stomach, because I can see she asking why he hesitated if she realizes it not panic, or choice paralysis.

MingauNight

Posted by MingauNight 3 years ago Report

Hope Zach likes the other world, I have the feeling others will join him soon.

Mechdragon1k

Posted by Mechdragon1k 3 years ago Report

The hopeful part of me is hoping he is just unconscious and after a talk with Jack, he will be taken to the nurse to recover.

I keep coming back to this fic even if it depressing, because it just that good, you have hooked my feels @theDragonBoy.

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

Well, I promise to balance the depressing with the wholesome and the uplifting. This was never intended to be a depressing story overall, we're just hitting a low point.

5UP3RN0V4

Posted by 5UP3RN0V4 3 years ago Report

I am probably not the only one who believes that Fiona will find out sooner or later that she ate Zach.

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

I was counting on the fact that no one would really remember at this point that Zach and Fiona had never really met- just like the characters themselves in the story. Glad you enjoyed it and I was able to make an impact.

2Ron2R

Posted by 2Ron2R 3 years ago Report

Some one may have been taking note since last May and hoped that her seeing him at Jacks table would be enough. :(

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

Yup. Also, when they’re at lunch, there ARE other kids at their table, so Zach sort of blended in there. But mostly it’s down to her just not paying very close attention in that regard.

5UP3RN0V4

Posted by 5UP3RN0V4 3 years ago Report

What are the odds that Arthur lied to Fiona that he won't eat Ozzy, thus still doing it in a future chapter?

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

Notes!? I’m flattered :D
But, yeah, there are other kids at the table besides Zach who Jack *isn’t* friends with, so it’s not a given she could tell even if she had been paying closer attention.

2Ron2R

Posted by 2Ron2R 3 years ago Report

Well 'taking note' not 'taking notes', no actual writing involved. Just to be sure, you do remember the PM I sent you on May 31?

It was always a vain hope of course. If one really pays attention though, they can tell who's interacting with one another. It's a moot point however as Fiona had her head in a cloud of hormones.

I wonder how Sarabeth will react to all of this.

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

Pfff! If only I could read half as well as I could write XD

Took another look at that PM. You totally called this from that start.

Perodian

Posted by Perodian 3 years ago Report

Wow, dramatic irony. Bit of a dark twist there. It would be more dark if Arthur knew who she was killing.

2Ron2R

Posted by 2Ron2R 3 years ago Report

I suspect Arthur knew *exactly* who both Zach and Ozzy were.

MingauNight

Posted by MingauNight 3 years ago Report

RIP Zach, you're in our hearts. I think Ozzy and Jack will be joining you soon, wherever you are now. Hehe
Sorry, I know I'm the kind of guy that thinks the characters I like go to some fine afterlife, sometimes I feel ashamed for being so much soft hearted.

x9comega

Posted by x9comega 3 years ago Report

He’s in our hearts…well, maybe closer to Fiona’s heart than anyone else’s right now~

MingauNight

Posted by MingauNight 3 years ago Report

I think it's better Fiona be careful, bucause I think Arthur knew that they were Jack's friends and he is trying to get rid of them to isolate Jack and be free to start an abusive relationship with her. I don't know, but I really don't trust him, there is something really dark about him.

x9comega

Posted by x9comega 3 years ago Report

I’ll just go ahead and say it, it’s not a spoiler or anything, Arthur doesn’t know any more than Fiona about Jack’s friends. He’s just hunting here.

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

IDK, if nothing else it's a good headcanon if we don't end up ruling it out in a story.

sadcat

Posted by sadcat 3 years ago Report

shttt that's gonna be an interesting scene when Jack knows sheeee im kinda tense now lmao

Mechdragon1k

Posted by Mechdragon1k 3 years ago Report

It is hard to lose zack.

Mechdragon1k

Posted by Mechdragon1k 3 years ago Report

It hurts so much when authors kill of long running characters.

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

The author shares the pain, for the sake of the story.

Relius

Posted by Relius 3 years ago Report

Oh dear, poor Zack. May you go to a better place (Fiona's hips)

5UP3RN0V4

Posted by 5UP3RN0V4 3 years ago Report

I bet with you guys that Ozzy with go after Fiona while Arthur’s not watching and alert her that she ate Zach.

MingauNight

Posted by MingauNight 3 years ago Report

Fiona needs to open her eyes and see that is something wrong with Arthur. He looks like that guys who have abusive relationships with girlfriends.

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

Unfortunately, Fiona might be of the mindset to read that sentence, get starry-eyed at the "relationship" part and then totally miss the "abusive" part. (Whether or not that would actually be his intention.)

Wolfsage

Posted by Wolfsage 3 years ago Report

Well, damn...
And I can't wait for those "Bigger thing" to come.

MingauNight

Posted by MingauNight 3 years ago Report

At least Zach didn't suffered much.

Mechdragon1k

Posted by Mechdragon1k 3 years ago Report

This hit me in the feels hard enough to trigger my anxiety, please follow it up with something light hearted, through I suspect it going to be Jack finding out about this and becoming terrified of Fiona.

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

No spoilers, as I was planning to put a warning in the next story anyway, but the next one will not be light. It will be heavier in some ways. The one AFTER will be much lighter (and may even involve a certain werewolf pup). I'll be trying to upload them both without too much of a gap, so no one has to linger too long in the heavy zone.

Mechdragon1k

Posted by Mechdragon1k 3 years ago Report

Maybe you can make a good end AU sometime where Jack gets Fiona to cough up zack.

magicboy13

Posted by magicboy13 3 years ago Report

Ohhhh boy fast updates! I'm already 3 chapters behind!!! And OMG Zach! Nooo!

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

Yup, busy weekend, lots to catch up on.

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report

While not having ever been expressly a Zach fan, I'm at least a little disappointed that there wasn't a bit more banter between him and Sarabeth. I liked their dynamic.
Ultimately though, for a mage who was only ever so skilled due to being able to remain calm and collected, it makes sense that this scenario would be his downfall. What a tragic, yet fitting outcome.

TheDragonBoy

Posted by TheDragonBoy 3 years ago Report

Having the relationship with Sarabeth cut short is just part of the tragity, alas. It was a fun dynamic.

ExtraUser

Posted by ExtraUser 3 years ago Report

The visceral emotions of this chapter show that humans not smuggling shivs, household poisons, or other unkind objects with them everywhere they go makes little sense (aside from irl storytelling themes).

What does it matter if a human is branded a murderer for surviving a predator (or taking them down with them) and have a 99% chance of death after?

The alternative is certain death.

1ring42

Posted by 1ring42 8 months ago Report

Oh no. Im really glad i didnt get too attached to zach but still... RIP