Posted by Santane 1 year ago Report

Well, Weiss unlocked a new fetish and Ruby now has a "girlfriend/food/facilitator" for her obsession and endless appetite.

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Hehe, yup.

Posted by Davyjones 1 year ago Report

Awesome story!

Posted by jyoster 1 year ago Report

Glad you're enjoying it.

Posted by Goldendevil21 1 year ago Report

Another great chapter. Here are my thoughts.

Love the addition of Weiss sleepwalking into Weiss' mouth. Not only a good character development where Wheiss' body wants to be inside Ruby. Also shows Ruby where she does a mental shrug and says to herself, 'hey, who am I to stop her.' And then proceeds to swallow her down instead of spitting her out.

Also really enjoyed Nora in this chapter. Just love how it was her and not Ruby who forced everyone to crowd Ruby's belly. Even led to great foreshadowing where we read how Ruby is truly able to stretch her body to truly gigantic proportions.

Did enjoy the parts where Ruby and Weiss were bickering with each other in the forest and the story never tells us specifically who is at fault. Is it Ruby for constantly teasing Weiss about being her meal Even to the point of constraining both of them? Or is it Weiss who constantly bickers with her teammate? Please keep that up if you continue. Have the girls disagree, argue, and leave it up to the audience who was right.

And once again, love the little details. My favorite being Weiss and Pyrrha forced to start kissing each other inside Ruby's belly while Jaune is being devoured. Just love a story that acknowledges just how crowded a belly can be.


Once more, love the detail of describing the belly of the Nevermore. This pool of black sludge that trapped you. Feels fitting for a Grimm. Even to the point that Weiss admitted would rather be digested by Ruby rather than be in a Grimm's belly.

Also love your change to the fights with Ruby eating Jaune as he flew through the air. Or of Ruby falling through the air and getting creative with eating Blake to cushion her fall.

Do feel conflicted on how Ruby took out the Nevermore. One one hand, as already said, did like how this was foreshadowed with Ruby being able to eat Nora, Jaune, Pyrrha, Nora, Ren, Weiss, Blake, and Yang all at once. And also love how Ruby was inconvienced with eating such a large meal. Needing her team to guard her while her tummy slowly digested the Grimm. Though on the other, makes it feel like Ruby did all the work. Like the other girls just got the Grimm into the correct spot. That, and also am a bit worried about power scaling. What is to stop Ruby from simply eating a Goliath if she can fit a Nevermore into her?

Loved the part the Nevermore started thickening out Ruby's figure. All while Ruby bemoans she is going to have to work extra hard to burn it all off while her sister is saying she should enjoy those curves.

Though did have a slight problem at the end with Ruby willingly eating Weiss. Thought it was established that Ruby's stomach does not discriminate. It digests whatever is inside it for long periods of time. As evidenced when Ruby first coughed up Weiss, her outfit was torn by acids. So, to see both girls be completely okay with Ruby eating Weiss then going back to sleep for a few hours did feel like a break of that unwritten rule.

Posted by rileysue 1 year ago Report

Amazing so far.

Posted by FuzzyTaco 1 year ago Report

It’s going good so far, I’m liking the rewrite

Though please do proofread your work. I spotted numerous duplicate sentences, rewritten ones where the originals were still there, and your own notes

Posted by Superdoge645 1 year ago Report

Wish there was a alternate where ruby did digest weiss but that is just me