Scratch - 2 years ago

Bleh, AI stealing mah jorb :P But realistically I'm not ure what good AI would do beyond making the writing 'pretty.' You still have to come up with the story and that's the real meat... to some extent you gotta learn not to stress too much with the final project, or write things off to style : )
I'd honestly be happy to do final editing/polishing drafts for your stuff too, if you're really struggling with the finish aspect!

noego - 2 years ago

So glad you liked it! Sometimes things just click. This one clicked with me. For like 2 days. Then not for like a year, then yes 2 more days. My brain works funny. Wish I could write more SO much... Pondering tinkering around with NovelAI, but I don't think I have the time to invest in that.

noego - 2 years ago

Sometimes things just click. This one clicked with me. For like 2 days. Then a year and 2 more days. My brain works funny. Wish I could write more SO much... Pondering tinkering around with NovelAI, but I don't think I have the time to invest in that.

Scratch - 2 years ago

Finally managed to read this version! Turned out nice, fleshed out great. Love the story : )
So awesome to see another writer take off with one of my story concepts!

TheDarkTraveler - 3 years ago

either show how the friend deals with a vorasous dragon or Layla might have got pregnat from her borther and her kid finds out what really happend to their farther/who they were

noego - 7 years ago

Glad to hear that :).

Bright - 7 years ago

I enjoyed reading this story

joeburp22181 - 7 years ago

My pleasure!

noego - 7 years ago

I did try to extend the last parts but I came up empty. I just can't provide description and detail beyond the necessary elements to build the story, I think, though I do purposefully not describe characters in depth so people can project more of their ideas on them. If I spent a lot of time on them I'd never finish the story, which has actually happened in the past.

But I just wrote three things ever in my life, all in the gallery so this might change. Though I'm not much of a writer, I do like to contribute whenever I can find the inspiration. Will keep your comment in mind for when my muse decides to whisper into my brain again. Thanks!

joeburp22181 - 7 years ago

Not a bad story. I only noticed a few misspelled words. You conveyed the gist of what you were trying to get across. The only thing I think could have used more detail, was the swallowing part at the end. Whether you intentionally just glossed over the digestive part, it would make sense for the prior. But perhaps personal preferences of mine, a bit more interaction with the post vore, would have been nice. Good job with the way the couple met up though, I loved the ultimate betrayal, and the build up before it. I would have liked to hear more words from her about him, especially her talking to him once she had finished off devouring him alive, just to mock him, before he'd died. But perhaps that might be a bit too dark for your liking though.

Nice piece all together. Thanks for sharing it here on the gallery. Good luck in future writings!

noego - 4 years ago

I'll haz all the comments, all the time. Glad you enjoyed and thank you for the comment!

AnAccount - 4 years ago

If you'll still haz comments, this was a very nice read

Indighost - 8 years ago

I don't think it's too bad in that sense.

Basing it on experience is ABSOLUTELY the right way to do it.

These things have to come as they are inspired, and as the writer is emotionally inspired based on real life stuff, and only when it feels right. "frequency of output/production" really is not a relevant thing to think about in this community in mmy view.

noego - 8 years ago

Could not agree more. Its too bad I can't seem to reach my passion more consistently. To be fair, in this case, this was based (partially of course) on a certain experience of mine that was good for this scenario, so there is a more emotional basis than on other stuff I've tried.

Indighost - 8 years ago

I want to add: The reason why I think that flow of consiciousness is best is because, think about it: At its base, what is an erotic dream? It is a situation in which two objects bonk into each other or one object goes into/out of another object. Boring, right? But it's the passion and the emotion that makes it come alive in such colorful ways. And that is when our unconscious mind is streaming freely.