Not up to your usual standard ???
Bitter... Subtlety is not bad.
For what it's worth I enjoyed that story ...
The Action was sensual, the reveal was incredibly well done and the tone of the story was .. as your main character was.. comfortable and warm.
I absolutely loved this story~
I had to read it twice before I realized what had actually happened. It was exceptionally well done, and I loved every moment of it. <3 When a scene isn't fatal between lovers, it becomes that much more amazing.
Posted by Lonewolf 13 years ago Report
When I read this part- 10:72 -> 10:12 ... it took your story to whole new level. I loved it! So much better than the typical "it was just a dream"
Posted by Bitter 13 years ago Report
It really IS a ridiculous time to be awake and wanting breakfast.
Posted by PyroOutlander 13 years ago Report
nice
Posted by Imrhys 13 years ago Report
Hmmmm, a dream sequence... I'd love to hear the pillow talk after THAT moment of revelation.
Posted by Bitter 13 years ago Report
My guess is it would be sickeningly touchy-feely.
Posted by Imrhys 13 years ago Report
Considering I came into vore writing FROM erotica writing :P~
Posted by Bitter 13 years ago Report
All I'm saying is that John would probably take it in stride. Dreams are, after all, not nearly so indicative of the inner mind as we like to think.
Posted by BardicLasher 13 years ago Report
That was very good. I loved it. Nice, simple, and very well detailed.
Posted by PitchBlue89 13 years ago Report
Not up to your usual standard ???
Bitter... Subtlety is not bad.
For what it's worth I enjoyed that story ...
The Action was sensual, the reveal was incredibly well done and the tone of the story was .. as your main character was.. comfortable and warm.
Posted by Gimlet 13 years ago Report
A very nice tale, well sequenced, good feel and beautifully rendered. Definite thumbs up... And the delicious meal survived! Yay!
Posted by French_snack 13 years ago Report
Soft, dreamy and quite lovely. :)
Posted by Draconasaurus 12 years ago Report
Not what I'm normally into, but there's just something about this that I love.
Posted by KinoTheCat 12 years ago Report
I absolutely loved this story~
I had to read it twice before I realized what had actually happened. It was exceptionally well done, and I loved every moment of it. <3 When a scene isn't fatal between lovers, it becomes that much more amazing.
You're an amazing writer, Bitter. <3
Posted by turbotails123 12 years ago Report
Why didn't it occur to me that 10:72 doesn't exist?
Posted by Bitter 12 years ago Report
It's a ridiculous time for any reasonable person to be awake and wanting breakfast, isn't it?