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~8500 words, Oral vore (implied "mind vore" and blood-drinking as well), Sex, F/m, Faerie/human.
It doesn't take long for the world to change after the first Faerie is elected president. He keeps his campaign promises, and more, but paradise isn't so great when you're not at the top of the food chain.
This isn't set in anything like the Mystic Wilds, but ever since I started reading Bitter's stories I wanted to write something with the Fae in it. Finally an idea came and clubbed me across the head as I was out hiking in the woods.
Oh! Oh! Warning! There is a child in this story. They are not involved in the vore, but I know that's enough to ruin things for a lot of people.
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Posted by Bitter 12 years ago Report
Meme Propagation Points +1
Total Meme Propagation Points: 1
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But seriously.
You capture the essence of the Fae here, in the European mythology style, far better than my post-Tolkien elf festival setting has a prayer of ever doing. This one is a real home run, dude. Well done.
Posted by 4ofSwords 12 years ago Report
Hooray! I have a point! Okay, you have a point, but it's in my comments so I'm taking it.
And thank you! I seem to be making a point of writing stories lately that I really like, with just enough of the right tags to make sure I limit the readership to a bare few. But I really appreciate the compliment from you!
Posted by Bitter 12 years ago Report
Total Meme Propagation Points: 0
D:
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But seriously, again.
After some time to ruminate on this story, I realized what it is that I like about this story so much. The fae (speaking generally) have a similarity to dragons in that they've largely been stripped of their negative connotations in recent history. With "Eragon" and "The Dragonriders of Pern", and hell, even "Pokemon", what used to be a nemesis is now a bosom companion. Likewise, elves have somehow become just pointy-haired humans with a potentially well-deserved superiority complex, depending the setting. Both of these seem to be a result of "protagonizing" the creatures, increasingly flanderizing them toward their positive traits. But what got lost in that process was the fact that dragons and elves both have traditionally served as foils to humans-- villains, whose narrative role is *to be defeated*. Dragons (in the Western tradition, leaving aside the water-gods of Japanese lore and other Asian flavors) exist to present a challenge for the hero to overcome. A dragon is big, powerful, breathes flames, and has all the gold in the world, but you can bet that by the end of the story a human will be walking away with more gold than he started, smirking. Likewise, the fae are guided by a series of incomprehensible rules, set against which a human's best hope is to break even. So it is with the Fae here: Timothy is ultimately helpless to prevent his own death. And yet, by the end of the story, we get a sense that Tim actually won. And moreover, he achieves an archetypally human victory: faced with the inevitability of death, he manages to produce a more secure future for his children. This story speaks to one of those fundamental human longings, and for that reason it feels like it's more than a story, it's *literature*. That's what makes this such an awesome read. Once again: well done.
Posted by 4ofSwords 12 years ago Report
Okay, I'll totally give you back your point now. I'll just hold onto this comment instead. :D
I have to say, I felt like I was plagiarizing writing the Fae so to type, but maybe it worked out! :)
Posted by Imrhys 12 years ago Report
That... That was not what I expected.
I'm not much for fae bargaining stuff, as I'm just not that smart and I know it. But the way he lead her to his desired ending... Now that was brilliant. He bought a future for his son that he could never deliver himself.
And the fact you only had abstract vore... and the Natalie stuff and his wife... I wanted to see how they ended. I felt a sadness there that... it is one of those things... it is one of those things in vore I only rarely get to have. To impact your predator AFTER they own YOU... whew.
Wow, lovely work. And the child stuff better NOT throw anyone off reading this! This is far too awesome for someone to whine ANYTHING underage!
Excellent story *bows slowly and deeply*
Posted by 4ofSwords 12 years ago Report
Thank you! :) I'm glad you still liked it after all the buildup I gave it.
Posted by Imrhys 12 years ago Report
Luckily you hinted at very very little of the plot or characters beyond "this has fairies in it". Normally I love spoilers, but this time, wow, this wouldn't have been half as good knowing how it ended.
Posted by Jacquelope 12 years ago Report
Tricking an old school-type Faerie. You don't see that often, even if you die anyway, that's a rare achievement.
Posted by 4ofSwords 12 years ago Report
Too bad it's an accomplishment he only gets to make once!
Posted by Jacquelope 12 years ago Report
BTW did you pass the LSAT by any chance? One has to wonder if true writers of old school fairy lore would have to be LSAT-inclined.
Posted by 4ofSwords 12 years ago Report
Hahahah... no. But being a homeowner makes it seem like you need to know just as much. ;)
Posted by French_snack 12 years ago Report
Very cleverly done, and quietly touching. Somehow the setting feels natural; the internal consistency of this strange new society is well rendered. It's eerie, and ghastly in a way, behind the whole facade of civilised bargaining (although to the fey it's no facade), yet Tim's preparedness, his acceptance and his intelligent capacity to get what's most important out of the "deal", his behaviour in "playing the game" according to the fey's rules but to his own advantage (so to speak), bring a certain calm to it all. Which is very suitable, as he surrenders and contemplates the safety of his son's future.
Posted by 4ofSwords 12 years ago Report
Thanks for the comments! :) It makes me feel like what I was trying to get across in the story was done effectively.