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A man riding the bus home late at night can't help but notice the strange behavior of the young woman who joins him.
I am getting SWAMPED at work, so I can't manage a new entry to one of my main series. Instead, here's a disembodied story that's been floating around my head. I guess if you like you can assume that the young lady had something to do with the HDTF, but that's currently not my intention. This is probably a one-off, though there may be other short stories like this if I get the itch to write them.
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Posted by Jones 10 years ago Report
This was an excellent, short, hot, tantalizing read. I love it. I honestly don't have any criticism. The pictures you paint, and the way the story unfolds is just right. Totally understand being swamped with work, but I hope you'll find time for more quickies in the future, especially if they're as good as this one :)
And honestly, although I know and love the HDTF series, this one can stand on its own, and does so quite well. Well done.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
Thank you very much! These little nuggets are harder for me to do, because I can't build off previous ideas for them. But this one tumbled out of me in about an hour and a half.
Posted by ShadesofBlack 10 years ago Report
Oh my god. I. I just... wow. *mentally melts* I want this. I want it in my life.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
:) Thanks!
Posted by R_U_Snacksize 10 years ago Report
This is excellent!
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
Thank you very much!
Posted by tgcidolfus 10 years ago Report
thank you for another great story, this one was professional grade in the way it created a very nice mental picture for me that made the story flow in a seamless and sexy manner. Keep up the amazing work.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
I'm really glad you liked it!
Posted by threk 10 years ago Report
I'm a big fan of unbirth 'compression' like this, it's a pity there isn't more of it, so thanks!
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
Well there's a fair amount of this sort of stuff in my gallery, and there's likely to be plenty more, since it's one of my favorites too. Glad you liked it!
Posted by supersaiyango 10 years ago Report
Id love for this to happen to me!!!!
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
Heh. I'll bet a lot of us would.
Posted by supersaiyango 10 years ago Report
too bad as far as I know irl it isn't possible
Posted by Thanatos2k 10 years ago Report
Dine and dash
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
Ha! Yep!
Posted by Groblek 10 years ago Report
A very nicely done scene. I can't help wondering what the woman's story is. The compression thing is interesting, and off the top of my head, you're the only one I can recall writing anything like it. Thanks for sharing this one with us!
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
Thank you! This was literally a scene that would just creep into my brain late at night and make a nuisance of itself, so the back story is open to interpretation until I write something else featuring the woman in the peach dress.
You know, I love vore of almost all types, but there's something about the non-bulge/compression stuff that has a special place is in my brain. It'd probably take a psychiatrist and a few years of therapy to uncover why that is.
Posted by TomBrans1 10 years ago Report
A very intimate, erotic story ... .
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
Thanks!
Posted by anonymous19999 10 years ago Report
better than hdtf. perfect. more.
i like to believe she just did the same to a bunch of people wherever she came from. that whatever power this is, shes too pleased to think about consequences.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
I guess there's something to be said for a story that gets right to business and doesn't weigh itself down with plot and dialogue. Glad you like it.
That back story you've got there is as valid as any right now.
Posted by thisgirlroolzz 9 years ago Report
Hello, I cant believe I missed this wonderful story until now, it was very erotic, I could imagine myself in her place and feel every sensation due to your marvelous narrative!
Posted by marloweny 9 years ago Report
I'm very glad you liked it! It was one of my better ones.