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Everyone is looking forward to a nice night of relaxation at the Mad Science Kink headquarters. They absolutely do not get it.
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I believe this is what an author would call "The Inciting Incident" We also get to see the heroes of our story, or at least the likely ones, and the uphill struggle they've got ahead.
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Posted by Throat_Wolf 10 years ago Report
Nicely done! A great story always has the heroes struggle against seemingly insurmountable odds. I look forward to finding out what happens next.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
Yeah... Kinda gotta figure that out. Also it's fun when I spot two bizarre typos the very instant I upload it. Lousy brain.
Posted by TheTastefulGentlman 10 years ago Report
Well it seems we are truly getting into danger drama and excitement(sexual and non) now. I must say even if your stories didn't contain many of my kinks I'd be reading them just for how imaginative and bizarre things get. SWAT team vs vacuum cleaner was a hilarious mental image.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
Glad you like the story and ideas? What are your kinks, by the way? I've got a very "un-marloweny" story I've been asked to write, so you can expect some new themes soon.
Posted by TheTastefulGentlman 10 years ago Report
What are my kinks you ask. I've got quite a few and I find that what I'm in the mood for tends to fluctuate. However the primary ones that your stories tend to contain are: Unbirth, nonfatal, casual vore, that thing where people hold others inside of them for extended periods of time (if there's a term for that I don't know it), experimentation and the fact that in most of your sequences everyone is enjoying the process.
Also something that I really like the concept of but have trouble finding good content of is accidental entrapment particularly of the unbirth variety.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
In that case, you'll probably not enjoy the monster of a commission that's lurking. The new major additions? Cruelty and (in perhaps the most non-marloweny-y of it all) digestion.
Posted by TheTastefulGentlman 10 years ago Report
Yeah cruelty and pain/death are really not my cup of tea. Still best of luck with the commission.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
I'll be sure to label it accordingly. No hard feelings if folks skip it.
Posted by RLord4268 10 years ago Report
You're skill at intertwining your stories is unmatched. I love where this is all going.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
I'm really glad you like it! It's kind of a commitment to tackle the size of the story I'm working on. It'd be unfortunate if it didn't go over well.
Posted by ShadesofBlack 10 years ago Report
Comment while reading in progress... "And I have a killer case of indigestion." I'm glad you haven't forgotten about her. It's been what... just over 2 weeks since she was swallowed? I love how they've just left her in there and seemingly forgot about it, or ignored it!
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
They've been rather distracted recently, but don't worry. I have plans for Marsha...
Posted by SSJBura 10 years ago Report
While I prefered the testing phase, I am still pretty interested in where you go next. Thanks for an exciting story!
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
There's more testing on the way. It'll just be under new management for a while.
Posted by Groblek 10 years ago Report
I think you're building up to something interesting here, but I do see one plot hole that breaks my sense of disbelief towards the end. Please, drop the "they're legally hazardous waste" bit.
It worked OK to handwave the team out of trouble with the lawsuit, but with this taking a more serious tone, you run squarely into the fact that legal precedent doesn't work that way - the lawsuit results wouldn't have any bearing on how the law in general applied to them. Also, it's not that easy to make someone cease to be a legal person. If you're using a US-based setting, there's no way that would pass constitutional tests, and just in general, I can't see more than a rare individual reacting to a warped or shrunken person who can talk and communicate and claiming that they're not human.
Basically, you've provided a MacGuffin that allows free reign to break the laws of physics and biology, but I get twitchy when you also twist law and human social interaction too far from what seems real to me.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
Thanks for the comment (and the answer to the blog).
I sort of ran into the "Reality wall" when I realized that this whole enterprise would be easily solved by getting the police involved. My options, as I saw them, were limited. I could make this a world where people are universally horrific and willing to do terrible things to fellow humans just because they can, which I didn't want to do. I could make the heroes afraid to go to the cops because the HDTF effects could be classified as assault, but I'd like to think they'd be willing to face the consequences if it meant helping their friends. Finally, I could twist the legal system as much as the laws of physics and take legal intervention out of the equation.
I can appreciate your suspension of disbelieve faltering at this point. I might lampshade the absurdity of it a bit later, or at least introduce the character of "the insane local judge who made this unconstitutional legal ruling" but at this point it all just serves the purpose of "they couldn't go to the cops because reasons."
Posted by Groblek 10 years ago Report
I think actually, you can get away with having Lexi genuinely believe that the precident applies the way she claims, as my impression of her character and her own experiences make that seem plausible. Julia's likely to know better, but in her current state, can be excused for not thinking clearly about such things. :)
And once she gets back to "normal", as long as you give them an easy enough way to find the people who took their friends that police resources aren't needed, I can see her deciding that a more personal lesson in why not to mess with the HDTF creators is in order. Possibly with a trusted friend being left instructions to go to the police if they don't come back.
The main reason I commented on that issue is that I think having the "bad guys" try and use that as a shield is *really* going to break things, but you're still at the point where you can write around the issue.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
Well, even if the precedent was iron-clad criminal law, and the people didn't count as people, they'd still be guilty of breaking and entering, theft, committing industrial espionage, etc, etc.
You've got some good points one how to salvage the situation though. I may steal some of them, if you don't mind.
Posted by Groblek 10 years ago Report
I don't mind at all - I'm always glad to help a fellow writer brainstorm their way out of a tough spot. Goodness knows that I've needed that sort of help a time or two myself, though less often than some due to my tendency not to write an ongoing series. It's easier if you get to make up the rules from scratch every time. :)
Posted by DRayElliott 10 years ago Report
It's kind of a shame that you haven't written more about the characters between the times the MSK vids get made. I'd like to know, for example, how Sam and Lexi's relationship progressed between filmings. Plus I hope the next installment is close to being done.
Posted by marloweny 10 years ago Report
You know, for my stories here the sequence is usually this:
1. I'm just going to write a story to play with my kinks.
2. I should probably continue with these characters, since I won't have to reestablish the premise.
3. Hey, what are these characters doing developing personalities. This was supposed to be about kinks! I'll just write a NEW story to play with my kinks...
I haven't started the next installment. I agreed to do some commissions/trades and it has absorbed my writing time for the past few days. But I'll start it soon! I hope...