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My first story, The Taste of Terror, was less than three thousand words long. But I have a diary entry from the time saying that I should maybe try and make them shorter in future.
The last chapter in Alex's misadventure numbered more than twenty thousand. It's pretty clear something has gone wrong.
So this little tale was an attempt to return, at least a bit, to that time of shorter, meatier stories. It features a new character who's been bouncing around me for a while. It's also definitely influenced by the non-vore things I've been writing, so it's a little... abstracty in some ways. The good shit is still there, oh yes. But if anything is a bit confusing, by all means ask me in the comments. These are strange creatures.
To my own delight, I managed to do this whole thing in one sitting. I hope it still passes muster for you. Thanks everyone. < 3
Contains:
Naga, snake, squirrel, rabbit, m/f, male predator, soft vore, oral vore, unwilling, fatal, cruelty, crushing, coils, breathplay
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Posted by dasamppa 8 years ago Report
As always, the way you describe things so very well, is just simply wondrous. I tried to describe it as "sharp" or "accurate", but those somewhat lose their meaning when you describe something like Night and Day here.
So i must just simply thank you for such a wonderful story ^w^
Posted by TheGuyWhoKnows 8 years ago Report
Awww, thank you yourself. I appreciate that a lot. I try to put passion into these stories, even if they are just exotic erotica. Hearing that it pays off for some readers gives me a lovely squirmy feeling inside. A feeling which for once doesn't want to be let out.
If you don't mind my asking, what exactly did you mean by "sharp or accurate"? I'm just curious as to what you were trying to get at.
Posted by dasamppa 8 years ago Report
hmmh... i'll try my best, but i won't promise anything X3
What i meant, was using those to describe the wonderful accuracy of your descriptions, they manage to form a clear picture in the readers head, but then it kind of felt wrong to say that when you were describing such things as Night and Day. It was the same kind of feeling when i read some of Lovecrafts literature, surely you can describe the general looks of the creature but it's mostly out of our reach to truly understand it's looks. That's why i felt like "sharp" or "accurate" were the wrong terms in here just for the sheer undescribability of the beings presented.
Hope that made even a bit of sense ^w^'
Posted by TheGuyWhoKnows 8 years ago Report
It did. That was interesting to hear. It' trickyexperimenting with things like this, when the lives of these two are so different to our mortal experiences. But because I don't quite know exactly how it feels, I can try and just... convey the idea, and then let you the reader imagine it. I'm glad it worked out well for you here. It can be difficult. Thanks for the input. : 3
Posted by sd43 8 years ago Report
Ooh, this is an interesting one. A bit more "abstracty" than your usual fare, yes, but still great. I especially liked the sentence towards the end where you wrote, "As the sun set, Day ended." Clever.
While longer stories from you are fine by me (more to enjoy reading, of course), these shorter ones are just as good.
Posted by TheGuyWhoKnows 8 years ago Report
Eh, I'm not proud of that one. I went almost 5,000 words without making a pun on their names, and then I gave in. I like to imagine that was Night's influence. He's the kind of asshole who'd make that joke to himself every Day for the past few billions of years, and still find it funny.
It's definitely nice to hear that you enjoy my longer things as well, though. I imagine some people skim the first bits in search of the squirming bulging... "meat" of the story, but it's lovely to hear that the plain plottish parts are being enjoyed as well. Thank you. Glad you enjoyed.
Posted by sd43 8 years ago Report
Hah, nothing wrong with a little pun here and there. And yeah, I definitely read your longer stuff too... Of course I enjoy all of your lovely descriptions of the swallowing and what comes after, but I read your stories for the plot as well. They have a lot more depth than an average story on this sort of site, and I really enjoy that. Besides, your writing style is just really enjoyable to read, so I have no problem waiting for the juicy stuff.
Posted by TheGuyWhoKnows 8 years ago Report
Awww, thanks again. I try to put my best work into these, because they're as much stories as they are fetish fics, and stories which I really enjoy writing. So I always like to know that the story part is being appreciated, and the writing style as well. < 3
I have a love-hate relationship with puns. I think they should be included, but at the same time I think they should never be acknowledged save with a groan. It's a bit paradoxical.
Posted by Randomness 8 years ago Report
Absolutely, truly love this. <3
Posted by TheGuyWhoKnows 8 years ago Report
Awww, my pleasure to provide. Thank you. You never know, Night might return. Day won't, of course, but there are always more things to play with.
Posted by Randomness 8 years ago Report
I am curious if Night switches genders based on what Day chooses? So there's no room for comfort?
Posted by TheGuyWhoKnows 8 years ago Report
Hmm. Interesting question. On the one hand, he's not simply male, but on the other hand, he's certainly not simply heterosexual either. I'd imagine he can be changeable about it, but doesn't base what he does on what Day decides to manifest as. So for past Days there have been any and all gender combinations for devourment. This was just one little Day, her memory soon lost amidst literally millions and millions of others which have passed between Night's jaws.
Certainly he'd make a very lovely female naga. Just like he does as a male naga. The Night is beautiful no matter what. Perhaps we'll see.
Posted by Randomness 8 years ago Report
Ah, well if you're open to ideas, what if Day, for one moment, didn't manifest as a single entity but multiple? Morning, Noon, Dusk, etc. They certainly wouldn't be as bright as a normal Day... But I don't feel Night would complain about the opportunity to hunt multiples. Especially with the ability to pick and choose, and manipulate a group!
I loved this story so much, here I am going on and on about Fanfiction ideas. X.x
Posted by TheGuyWhoKnows 8 years ago Report
Ooh, that idea does intrigue me. These creatures have disparate, strange consciousnesses, and sometimes Day might naturally feel like a group of people. Night, of course, since he has lived much much more than twenty four hours, has developed his own identity and is much more of a strongly formed personality.
A flock of even weaker, even more innocent, even more helpless Days would be a particular delight for Night, I imagine. They're a rare occurrence, so he'd have to ensure that he savours the opportunity.
Well, thinking about it to this extent is very flattering to me. Thank you. I accept and treasure all fanfiction, of course, and if I do end up using this idea myself I'll credit you for it. Thanks. : 3