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Flash Sentry defends the princesses, but today Twilight Sparkle wants to live out one of her fantasies and gives him a surprise Blowjob on the job. moments later mistakes were made.
just a quick lemon story I put together in about 2 hours. I don't think its the best but I saw this image a few days back and was like, "I can write a cock vore story to go with that," so I did.
this is a case of me just writing some quick fluff story with less than 3k words. I know my stories tend to be long and filled with set up, but that is what I enjoy writing. even so, I do still enjoy a bit of lewd action once in a while, like what you get here.
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*update* gave it a read over, and I feel like i got most of the errors and issues.
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Posted by LightSpeed 6 years ago Report
Heehe, nice story. ^w^
He should have flushed though. >=3
Posted by simalst 6 years ago Report
Hehe ~
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
I don't think flushing would deal with what was left of her glazing the room. XD
Posted by simalst 6 years ago Report
Awesome, I loved the story even though I do not like much preamble.
Posted by sheppard74 6 years ago Report
Nice story. Like it, please more of it.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
glad you liked it, what parts did you enjoy? soi can make notes of that.
Posted by PonyThroat 6 years ago Report
That was a lot of fun, I like how you included a reason for Twi to not just teleport out
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
got to think about things like this, as we all know twilight could blink out of that sack if it wasn't groping her body.
Posted by simalst 6 years ago Report
into 11 ?
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
a standard dial is 1 to ten, 1 is low, high is ten, taking something to 11 means you have gone past what is safe.
Posted by simalst 6 years ago Report
Ah okay :) you mean a scale.
Posted by Slimshod 6 years ago Report
That was pretty good. There are a few grammatical errors and funky word combinations though.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
for something i speed wrote thats pretty good then, i will give it a read over now and fix any issues i find, this as said was a throw away, but i am glad you enjoyed it.
what do you mean by funky word combinations, is that just me screwing up English or when i start triple linking words that share the first letter in them.
Posted by Slimshod 6 years ago Report
I read yiur description about speed typing this after I posted so the typos make sense now.
By funky word choices I mean words will not make sense in the sentence based on what comes before or after them. If you were reading those pieces out loud they would give you pause and make you think for a second. I'm sure you'll find them since you plan to go over it again.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
yeah i am seeing a few already, cleaning it up as we speak. normally i do a more slow steady thing, but for this i just kind of chucked it out so i was expecting some errors when i went over it.
this was a case of you know when you have an idea, and your like got to get this down before i forget it. so i chucked it out, and thought i could clean it up on the next day. if its between having a lewd story to post and no story i will always go for getting it to paper first, as i can always clean it up later. which is exactly what i am doing now.
Posted by Slimshod 6 years ago Report
Oh ya, I totally understand that. Mkst of your stories are clean so that's why this stood out a bit. Definitely in favor of getting it written first and editing later though.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
given it a read over, should have gotten most of the mistakes and weird wording.
Posted by Zahnrad 6 years ago Report
Maybe he should visit some other ponies.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
maybe, but i think the problem Twilight experienced was brought on by the alicorns sudden workplace harassment. ;)
Posted by GilPix 6 years ago Report
Princess Twilight has always been a slut and now Flash made her resemble her true inner form.
Nice Work!
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
aye that inappropriate workplace behaviour seems to have backfired on her XD.
Posted by Base54 6 years ago Report
Flash's reaction at the beginning when Twilight gave him that surprise blowjob was downright hilarious.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
well it's a reasonable reaction to having a monarch latch onto ones junk XD