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Kale discovers the truth behind Ikbar's shell while Thomas uncovers his daughters' collective fate. Meanwhile one of the girls plots an escape.
Commissioned by max123
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Posted by Apostolos 3 years ago Report
Maybe they can discover a way to retain the memories for the girls... otherwise this’ll just get more and more depressing overtime
Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report
Yeah, it was a little hard writing this despite the fact that some of this was my suggestion. But the end result is not my decision.
Posted by Apostolos 3 years ago Report
Yeah, i don’t understand Max’s focus on heartbreak and regret, maybe he likes ntr type hentai as well... i’m not gonna hate the writer for the choices of the commissioner but at this rate it’s heading rapidly towards a bad end, and realistically would give Kale suicidal depression, to watch and speak with those who are dying and losing themselves with no way to change it...
Posted by max123 3 years ago Report
Nah, hentai is so middle school and whatever you guys see is just something i tell the writer and they make something out of it. So probably there's a 50/50 split from both of us
Posted by Apostolos 3 years ago Report
Nah the ntr part is solely you, considering how a vast majority of your commissions have the theme
Posted by max123 3 years ago Report
Sorry, but hentai and even porn sometimes get boring to me. I mean why watch it when you can do it, nothing beats the warm embrace of another person. If you look at other vore stories there are a lot more sad/fatal endings than there are happy/safe ones, especially with oral vore and the others. Don't get me wrong there are a lot of safe ones that came over the years, but at this point there's three outcomes to every vore story. People
are just used to seeing the good endings when it comes to unbirth, which if you seen some of my earlier commissions have. Just doing the same things get boring and I like to leave the story with an open or in this case bad ending as it leaves room for later add-ons to the story or spin-offs. Plus I do ask the writers if they want to change anything or do whatever to the story just as along the main pointsp are there. I just like a good story that I can enjoy.
Posted by threk 3 years ago Report
First off, no judgements on preferences, but even with the amount of fatal endings in the majority of vore stories, including unbirth a lot of the time, your commissions do seem to have running themes that tend to distinguish them.
Primarily the aspect of some dude's sisters (often twins) or girlfriend being stolen from them by means of unbirth and suffering identity death through regression rather than outright death, which has a different, arguably worse type of tragedy to it. The predator is often motivated by infertility. Then it's a toss-up between an open ending and the dude getting over it and supporting the predator, even as they take his loved one(s) away. If it's the latter and this is a sibling story, the parents may be involved as well and find out they're losing a child.
The thing with outside observers coming to terms with the unbirth, is that it can give the stories a hospital deathbed kinda vibe, where everyone knows someone is dying and is just kinda hopeless about it.
So yeah, personally I'm not a huge fan of regression, but other themes such as unwilling endosoma and unaware observers are right up my alley, and again no judgements on other people's personal preferences, but you can't deny that these commissioned stories have a unique flavour of tragedy to them.
Posted by threk 3 years ago Report
That tag "Hateful prey" sounds like a brutal metal album name.
Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report
Yeah it kind of does. Like soemthing you'd hear about in like a knock off Pro Skater game.
Posted by WillingWombPrey 3 years ago Report
I don't get the escape plan part. I couldn't see it.
Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report
I meant the part where they were struggling so hard they were physically moving Mirai around.
Posted by WillingWombPrey 3 years ago Report
Wait. Pickle juice is known to induce labor... I get it now.
Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report
I didn't even know that. Learn something new every day. :)
Posted by max123 3 years ago Report
What's that, is that an idea how to get the girls out the next story?
Posted by WillingWombPrey 3 years ago Report
No it's an actual thing, the vinegar of the pickle juice is concentrated enough that it works for overdue women to go into labor.
But it could be an idea for the next story.
Posted by Nevek 3 years ago Report
Great job
Posted by WillingWombPrey 3 years ago Report
Still, I would very much like to see them get out of Mirai's belly and be reunited with their original family.
Posted by Nightcrawler99 3 years ago Report
Pickle Juice ?!?!!! YES!!!
This sounds perfect! ^^