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Hey! I'm soon back with a story for which I was quite inspired!
"It's important to get to know your stepchildren, even if some of them have very... tempting personalities."
Don't hesitate to give your opinion in comments or in PM to tell me what you liked or hated !
Warning: English is not my first language (although I'm getting by) so I wrote my story in my native language before I had it translated by Deepl, corrected with my knowledge and and having it proofread by the friendly https://aryion.com/g4/user/EloquentOrc
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Posted by doomed 1 year ago Report
Wow this is phenomenal work
Posted by Hetzering 1 year ago Report
Thank you very much! I hope you enjoyed the build-up! :)
Posted by TMVore 1 year ago Report
Always up for one of your amazing stories
Posted by Hetzering 1 year ago Report
And I hope you're ready to like it! :3
Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report
I enjoy the casual nature of the setting. I also like how Aria was trying to entice Laureen into eating her. I also enjoyed how Rick wasn't upset that someone ate Aria. Casual disregard of life is kinky to me in a vore setting.
My biggest complaint is based on personal preferences. I think that the digestion was too short. I think it would have been better if it took Laureen more time in the story to digest Aria, and I also like lots of details, since it is my favorite part of vore.
Anyways, you did a great job writing this story, and it was enjoyable. Thank you.
Posted by Hetzering 1 year ago Report
Thank you! I'm glad you like the details and build-up which are my favorite parts of a story! But yes, the digestion could have been longer, I had some ideas for additional descriptions but found them too redundant.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 1 year ago Report
That is the struggle isn't it? Not saying the same thing in different words over and over!
If I want to extend one of these scenes I go through several stages.
Wet but solid
Irritation but holding up
Falling apart
Dilapidated
Last gasps
A paragraph for each with dialog for pred and prey.
Either way this was a good one. I liked it. The digestion description you made was very nice.
Posted by bronzelara 1 year ago Report
Very hot story and I have to say as a gut slut I would also most likely be vored by a sexy milf
Posted by MathewLord1 1 year ago Report
Another brilliant story I do love the build up the slow seduction of a mature pred by a younger prey almost as fun as the reverse. Love it wish I could be in this situation lol keep up the great work!!!!