Narrows - 4 years ago

Thank you very much, I appreciate it! Shout out to a name I recognize from the old DT days, good to see yah!

SeruOmen - 4 years ago

This was very well-written.

Narrows - 4 years ago

Again, I understand your point of view on this matter and felt your second comment was a lot more helpful outlining your opinion. For me personally, the aspect of Sarlacc vore I enjoy the most was the act of seeing victims actually tumbling into the pit, thus that is what I focused on in my story. I tried to exemplify the vore about as much as the Return of the Jedi did with more gratuitous description.

Mechdragon1k - 4 years ago

I have read fics with observer pov, they tend to cover the digestion or eating in more detail as is the observers were not focused on the pred, they were focused on others around them, it seemed strange.

The story was interesting but one could replace the pred with a Hollywood black hole and little would change, it was focused on the character interacting with other characters not vore, which felt a little odd.

Narrows - 4 years ago

Also appreciated ;)

Randomdude5 - 4 years ago

Ive never liked the 1000 years digestion because it messes(triggers?) with my sense of realism because if it did it would have to provide energy to keep the prey alive which is the opposite of the purpose of eating and keeping something alive for 1000 years would mean the sarlacc would probably something people would want to harvest for a life extension serum. Sometimes I just like to bash star wars. :P

Narrows - 4 years ago

Indeed. I won't get into the digestion too much, but it can be assumed these girls are in for the long haul. Thanks for the comment! I appreciate it!

Randomdude5 - 4 years ago

This isnt gonna end well for them :) Is this gonna have the star wars sarlacc digestion time of 1000 years?

Narrows - 4 years ago

Likewise - shame it happens so rarely in the show. Thanks for the comment, I appreciate it!

Ghostdragon - 4 years ago

Certainly not enough Futurama related vore. I'm always a fan of Leela and Amy being swallowed too, bit of a soft spot for that.

immortalsane - 4 years ago

It is my absolute favorite show, and it has so many friggin vore themes. It's just delightful.

Narrows - 4 years ago

Thanks for the kind words and the recommendation, I'll look into it! And yeah, Futurama was a great potential for vore but never quite delivered on that potential (despite being a hilarious and awesome show).

Narrows - 4 years ago

Thanks for the kind words and the recommendation, I'll look into it! And yeah, Futurama was a great potential for vore but never quite delivered on that potential (despite being a hilarious and awesome show).

BeautifulBad9 - 2 years ago

I can respect the spider man reference

theheadsn - 4 years ago

cant wait :)

Narrows - 4 years ago

Thank you! Got two more parts coming, hope you'll enjoy them.

theheadsn - 4 years ago

Different, I liked it. Really starting to enjoy this series

Narrows - 4 years ago

Thank you, I'll admit that 'The Thing' is one of my favorite horror movies of all time and it certainly played a big inspiration for the monster in this story. Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for your comment!

cerealkillerx - 4 years ago

I have never read a vore story that could be so sensually erotic and completely terrifying at the same time. It was creepy and tense. I am almost reminded of John Carpenter’s “The Thing”

Narrows - 4 years ago

Very much appreciated! Audrey-II does strike that perfect blend of fun and voraciousness in my opinion. Thanks for giving my work a read, I appreciate the feedback!

PrinnyDood - 4 years ago

I finally managed to set aside some to to give your writing a proper look, and I'm mighty impressed!

I've long thought the classic creature from Little Shop of Horrors was a fairly perfect predator, and your descriptive language especially is stupendous.

Not surprised at all you're getting commissioned, now that I've rad this.

Narrows - 4 years ago

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it! Glad to see a fellow foot fan out and about! Stay tuned, there's more on the way!

TCC - 4 years ago

This is a damn fine read bro.
The prose is expertly crafted and an absolute joy to read. The fact that the actual vore (and foot) content absolute diamonds is just a bonus.
Looking forward to the next chapter.

Narrows - 4 years ago

Thanks, glad you enjoyed it! Luckily the commissioner has set up three more ladies for the chopping block, so stay tuned!

Narrows - 4 years ago

Thanks - in the original LSOH it was a bad thing when people got eaten, therefore the plant had to be a bit of a bastard. Luckily, that is not the case in this story!

TCC - 4 years ago

I'm really digging the character dynamic between Marcus and Audrey; in contrast to the OG LSoH you get the impression that these two have an affection for eachother, even if (or perhaps a little bit because) one of them has a penchant for stirring up vorish trouble l.

Bigtimmy - 4 years ago

Good to hear, good stuff... and good writing either way.

Narrows - 4 years ago

Gotcha - later chapters have some pretty messy deaths, so stay tuned! Thanks for the feedback!

Bigtimmy - 4 years ago

The only thing I'd say as a suggestion is to make the hard vore more visual

Bigtimmy - 4 years ago

Looking forward to the next one, its quite impressive writing..

Narrows - 4 years ago

That is a very kind thing to say, I very much appreciate it! I hope to do something professional with writing one day, but until then writing fun vore stories is scratching that itch.

AlphaSaban - 4 years ago

That was a fantastically well realized story. If you don't write professionally, you should give it some serious thought!

Garrysrevenge - 4 years ago

Woah. This is something I've always wanted to see. This is beyond something to beat off to, this is just awesome!

Narrows - 4 years ago

Thanks! I tend to go for longer, narrative pieces but every once in a while its fun to jump straight into the action. Plus, Azula's a real fun victim to see get devoured.

cerealkillerx - 4 years ago

Wonderfully erotic!!! I thoroughly enjoyed reading every delectable paragraph of Azula’s almost sensual demise. You are a really talented writer with a great mind for detail :) I eagerly look forward to reading more of your stories.

doomfister - 5 years ago

Read this over on your deviant art a few days back. I must say i rather enjoyed it, your content is stellar and it took me a momment to connect the dots, as i first read your content with that shark comm where a great white took a lady whole.

Your stuff is stellar, so if you would be game for an art trade i would gladly give it the time during lockdown.

Narrows - 5 years ago

I see, well I hope you're able to enjoy them in some capacity! Thanks for commenting, I hope you'll give some of my other stories a chance!

Narrows - 1 year ago

Thank you for the kind words, it's a huge encouragement and very much appreciated! I'm on a writing hiatus at the moment, but I've always wanted to return to the antics of Ms. Carmichael and Mr. Kady sometime to see how their research has developed.

Jakester443 - 1 year ago

Easily one of my favorite vore stories ever written, and one I've reread several times. The lead-up so perfectly conveys such cold dread, the big finale is gorgeously written and described, and ends on a delightfully grim note. Seriously one of my favorite writers on the site. Thanks for sharing!

Swalloweredipus - 4 years ago

When will/ would a continuation be made ?

cough567 - 5 years ago

Oh, I'm prey all the way so I don't have a super strong prefrence. I really like to get the pred's thoughts though. Hearing what they think of their meal is always a turn on. Whether that's through dialogue or internal monologue is less important.

I do really like dialogue though. Preds taking their sweet time with their prey and tease, degrade or comment on their prey is a dynamic I absolutely love.

Narrows - 5 years ago

Traditionally written from the view-point of observer but looking to expand into first-person narration for the preds a bit more. What's your preference for yourself?

cough567 - 5 years ago

Eaten in her jammies, cute! Thanks for that bit of personal wish fulfillment on my part :p

I like the first person in this one. Are you more of an observer or are your monster preds stand-ins for yourself?

tonyrpaulus - 4 years ago

Fantastic combo of great writing and pred psychology - though I notice this particular series hasn’t gotten any updates for quite a while. Is this on hiatus for now?

Narrows - 4 years ago

It's a commissioned piece of artwork a talented artist made for me about the story. You can see it on their DA profile - TVSS.

Surfsnake1 - 4 years ago

Where’s the picture on the front from?

Narrows - 5 years ago

Ah! Thanks, you were correct. Should be good now. Sorry, still getting the hang of posting.

Randomdude5 - 5 years ago

I think this is the wrong story

BeautifulBad9 - 4 years ago

its fine, and likewise i would love to see more of her trapped in a snakes coils

Narrows - 4 years ago

Likewise, I'd love to see more work out there with her and a nice knot of coils. Thanks for the comment!

BeautifulBad9 - 4 years ago

I love snake vore and korra is one of my favourite preys

Narrows - 5 years ago

She is one of my favorite girls to see gobbled up, admittedly. Proud, vulnerable and ultimately foodstuffs for a hungry pred.

cough567 - 5 years ago

Damn, Korra sounds like an amazing piece of ass. Guess it was only a matter of time before those lardaceous little haunches got blended away into fat, protein and nutrients. She was too innocent for this world!

Anyways, I loved the part about her dimming neural interplay. That whole segment was really cute. Loved the fatality aspects of the entire story.