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Or, "Todd, God, and the Brunette Broad"
Here's my first story on this site. It's a rather straightforward one... right? Yeah, totally. Just don't look at the tags.
I was inspired to write this based on a conversation I had with Birichino, who is a very underrated writer himself. I highly recommend you check his work out.
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Posted by LivesInAStomach 3 years ago Report
I've never read a story quite like this one, it was super creative and unique. I'll be keeping an eye on any of your future works.
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
Wow! Thank you! That means so much to hear, especially coming from someone whose work I've enjoyed quite a lot myself.
It is perhaps the most off-the-wall concept that I've come up with just yet, but I do have a strong fondness for those stories which think outside the box, so I'd love to write more.
I hope that whatever I put out next doesn't disappoint!
Posted by LivesInAStomach 3 years ago Report
Ahhh, you've enjoyed my work? That's nice to hear. Don't worry about disappointing, just keep on writing! :)
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
Yes, I sure have enjoyed your stuff! I've found your character interactions, descriptions, and overall scenarios to all be quite enticing. (I also tend to be biased towards second person POV stuff, which you seem to have a good handle on, haha.)
I'll be sure to take your advice! Just keep writing, just keep writing...
Posted by Thimthee 3 years ago Report
Very good
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
Thank you!
Posted by Thimthee 3 years ago Report
Welcome
Posted by Matteo42 3 years ago Report
LMAOOO
dude that brought me to fucking tears hahahahha
I've been wanting to make a story with a similar drive (author deux ex machina), but I really doubt I could make it as funny as this was XD
Fucking god tier amazing dude, instant favorite!
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
So glad to hear you enjoyed it that much!
Yeah, I tried to go for all kinds of things with this one. I kinda worried that the mishmash of ideas might weaken the overall narrative, but if it at least gave you some good laughs, that's all I could ask for, haha.
If you still wanna write something along the same lines, don't let me stop you. I'm not super familiar with your work, but from what I've read, you seem pretty skilled. I'm sure you could pull it off great!
Posted by Matteo42 3 years ago Report
Ayy well thanks for the encouragement bro ;)
I'll give it a shot (one day)
Keep up the excellent work :D
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
No problem! I look forward to it!
And thanks for the fav!
Posted by Birichino 3 years ago Report
This is really interesting work! Author intervention like this is an extremely rare concept, and it looks like you've found your own take on it. TBH, this wasn't what I had in mind when I mentioned knowing your creator is excited to make you suffer, but that only attests to your creativity!
I'm guessing you have some writing experience outside of Eka's, but it seems like you had fun making this so I encourage you to refine your skills further. If you enjoy using it, I think there's a lot of potential in this "omniscient first-person" angle, even in non-vore content.
And...it's pretty satisfying that that brunette got her comeuppance, however contrived. How much use is a predator that gets lazy even when civilians take her diet in stride, anyway?
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
Thank you!! It's an honor to hear that from someone I'd call one of the most creative authors I've read on this site.
To be honest, this wasn't what I thought the story would turn out like at first either. It was a very stream-of-consciousness kind of piece—I feel like it's more authentic to the concept that way. I came up with a lot of it as I went along, putting the pieces down and then figuring out later how to tie them together, all while being incredibly honest within the story that I was doing so.
Yeah, I've done my fair share of writing, but not a lot of it has been of the creative nature. Becoming an author was a passion of mine that I ultimately kind of let slip away over time due to a lack of actual inspiration. But I figure all I would need would be one good idea and a lot of motivation. Maybe this could be my angle? It's true that this idea has a lot of potential, but I'd have to do some real thinking to see how to figure out how to write a long-form narrative out of it.
And yes, you could call the way I wrapped things up with the brunette a last-second stroke of genius... or maybe just a last-second stroke. Take your pick. To be honest, I didn't even consider the obvious connection between "lazy phone-obsessed woman" and "neglectful babysitter" until *after* I wrote the twist. Sometimes things just have a way of working out.
Posted by Birichino 3 years ago Report
Aww, thank you too!
Speaking of creative, there's nothing wrong with stream-of-consciousness. I can tell you took it to an extreme here, but a lot of writing from my experience is just getting into a situation and, when you know the characters and environment you're working with, the events come naturally. You can even surprise yourself, like you found with the babysitter connection, but the nice thing about writing is you can revise or revert anything that needs work after you've considered it.
So, verbose as that is, I'm saying yes: This could absolutely be your angle. Or your method, or whatever it's most useful to you as! Any experience you gather can become a tool for you.
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
No problem! And thank you so much for the watch, by the way!
While this method has worked well for me once here, I think it'll do me well to experiment. I'm already taking a much different approach for my second story, outlining the general events and important scenes before putting it all together. (I'm starting to worry it'll turn out way too long, but hey, there are worse problems to have.)
As for the stream-of-consciousness method, I think I'll stick to that for any follow-ups to this story. If I were to do follow-ups, I figure they would probably each focus on a different element of fiction, of the writing process, or of vore tropes. So it's funny you should mention revising, because one silly idea I had was to write a story with the concept that no revising is allowed, if only to see what a fun trainwreck it would be, and of course to emphasize the importance of revising.
I look forward to gaining more experience with my future works, and also to putting out some things that the people on here might enjoy.
Posted by MagicOddEffect 3 years ago Report
This is weird. I like it.
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
It sure is, isn't it? Who would write something so strange?
Jokes aside, thank you so much for the watch and the favorite! The thing I'm writing up next is something generally more, well, normal, but I do want to come back and write a follow-up to this story too.
Posted by Sehnsucht 3 years ago Report
I and Eye are amused to find that all comments on your stories are essays. Seems you inspire thoughtful people.
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
I suppose so. Or maybe the meta nature of the concept just inherently inspires analysis. Overt fourth wall-breaking commentaries on some particular genre of media seems to be the hot current narrative trend. I didn't particularly mean to cash in on that or anything, but I suppose the fact that I did so without realizing is all the more proof that we're living in the era of the metafiction.
Posted by TastesUndivided 3 years ago Report
One of the best stories on the site.
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
Wow! What incredibly high praise! Thank you for the favorite and the watch as well! It really does mean a lot, especially coming from another writer.
I don't mean to shill or anything, but would you happen to have read the sequel as well? If you enjoyed this one, you might enjoy the other too.
Posted by TastesUndivided 3 years ago Report
Not yet, but I did put it in my list of things to read later (I should really get that thing in order). Also, thanks for acknowledging me as writer. Never get the right moment to sit and write down my ideas properly.
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
Haha, yeah, I can relate to having a backed-up backlog, trust me.
And yes, not having the time or motivation to just let your ideas flow sucks. Finding time for writing, as well as getting into the right mindset to do so, are both things I've struggled with lately as well. But never stop trying! I'm sure you'll reach where you need to be in due time.
Posted by IddlerItaler 3 years ago Report
Another fun, witty story.
> “Aaahh… ahh— uaaahhh!!” The man screams in abject terror, no longer even bothering to form coherent words. How boring. At least he could have the decency to come up with some kind of witty remark for me to counter. But then I remember that I’m terrible at writing banter anyway, so I just keep licking.
> “S… ss… ssssss… too… ppphh…” He can barely manage to coherently spew out that one word as he tries to pull his arm away, but finds no success.
These passages speak to me. When I'm writing (for RPs rather than for stories) I always struggle writing witty remarks during... well, the struggling part.
> Who does this whore think she is!? You created ME to be food!? Fucking FOOD!? And for what, so you and a few other sickos can enjoy torturing me!? I deserve better than this! You know what you should use that mouth of yours for? How about you—
Ouch
> Needless to say, his squirming only speeds up his descent. Because of course it does. It always does. Hey, maybe I should make a vore story bingo card.
Not a bad idea, not a bad idea. If you keep writing more stories, we'll have the vore bingo card filled out in no time.
For as meta as your series gets, the man's mind-torture as a girl he just met suddenly decides his literal past is something unironically really powerful.
> That’s why I’d like to believe that, whatever the truth is, there’s one thing that definitely exists: some sort of system of karma, or judgement for sins.
Maybe sins is the wrong word, since many people would find vore - and all pornography - to be sinful. Though the world having some mechanism of justice is a pleasant thought indeed. Like the idea that we are to be rewarded for each act of kindness and punished for each act of cruelty. Personally, I'm not as optimistic as to think we are, however we can try to be the best we can be, and be kind and just towards other people so that *we* can be the "gentle, caring universe" even if for a moment. Nice. Or are these just the words of some shady cosmic organism trying to start a dark cult? Heck if I know.
The final plot twist of the woman being the babysitter elicited an "oh lol" from me.
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
Glad you enjoyed this one as well!
Yeah, witty banter really relies, I think, upon a very solid dynamic between two characters so that they can bounce off each other well. Like any comedy, really. I think that makes it inherently harder in RP since you only have control over your side of the story.
The bingo card idea was a joke at first, but one of these days I swear I'm gonna make it and post it somewhere. Mark my words.
And yeah, I'm glad the utter existential dread of Todd's situation hit hard. If he weren't in a rough enough situation, that's just beating a man when he's down. But I think it's an interesting thought, exploring the nature of a character experiencing his own creation. (Just moments before his demise, at any rate...)
"Sins" might be the wrong word after all, but I wanted to go for something with a religious vibe and all, haha. And yes, I would very much like if we could be the best we could be, to be that fair universe that may not really exist... That's a theme I'd like to explore in an entirely different series, but whichever way justice is achieved, be it through acts of humanity or acts of a higher power, I'd like to believe justice exists in one form or another.
And yes, as I've said, the plot twist at the end was a sudden stroke of genius... or maybe just a sudden stroke. Take your pick. To be honest, it didn't really click for me how well "negligent babysitter" fit with "woman always on her phone" until *after* I wrote the twist. Our own minds surprise us sometimes.
Posted by ClosetedTiny 3 years ago Report
Jeepers, this was super creative! My Self-Insert is an Avatar for me, not myself in universe, so seeing something like that was amazing! I've only mentioned the other world idea in Khal's stories, but now that I have seen what you have done it's going to be hard to do something different!
Not really a fan of the "gains awareness as he is perishing", it feels unnecessarily cruel, but you do you!
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
Mmm, it was a bit intense, I agree. I'm not so much "into" it as finding the concept and mechanics interesting and wanting to explore it. What does it look like to the character, to experience being "written" firsthand? I've done more lighthearted takes on the concept since, though.
The sentence that sparked this story was an off-handed comment by Birichino regarding a character in his own story: "Imagine learning the creator who decides your fate is just reveling in your humiliation." While it was the big spark of inspiration that I needed to start writing, I still might have committed to that exact idea too hard when I could have pivoted instead.
But oh well. Who knows what's in store for this series! Maybe I'll get around to giving Todd a second chance eventually?
Thanks a ton for the kind words, as well as the watch!
Posted by TanookiBoy12 3 years ago Report
Very creative story I love it! Definietely a good way to deal with creeps, too
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
Thank you! And yeah, true enough, haha.
Though in this case I was the one who came up with and wrote him, so maybe I was the creep all along...???
Hm... nah.
Posted by TanookiBoy12 3 years ago Report
You can write a character being a creep without actually being a creep! You're good! And hey I love a fun goddess
Posted by YepMcNope 3 years ago Report
Hehe, yeah, I know. I was mostly just messing around and waxing philosophical about the relationship between creator and creation.
In other words, talking out my ass and making stuff up as I go along. As I imagine most goddesses do.
Posted by YepMcNope 2 years ago Report
Thank you! Hearing that means a ton to me. I really tried to do something unique with this one, so I'm glad it seems to have paid off.
And yes, a bingo card seems like a fun thing to make at some point, haha.
Posted by Ein 2 years ago Report
Good shit, very original, nice fourth wall breaking
Posted by YepMcNope 2 years ago Report
Mhm! Playing with the fourth wall is the name of the game in this series. In a way, I try to acknowledge that wall while simultaneously knocking it down entirely and eliminating it from play, which is a kind of balancing act that isn't easy to pull off... but I do my best!
Posted by Ein 2 years ago Report
Fourth wall breaking us really hard to do well in any form, and you certainly do it really well
Posted by doomed 2 years ago Report
Now I feel bad for todd
Posted by YepMcNope 2 years ago Report
That's fair. I think I might have committed a little too hard to the original concept despite humanizing the character more than planned. Feels a little out of character for the series now... but who knows, maybe I'll do something about that at some point.
Thanks for the fav, though!