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Purpose for Existence By YepMcNope -- Report

Or, "Todd, God, and the Brunette Broad"

Here's my first story on this site. It's a rather straightforward one... right? Yeah, totally. Just don't look at the tags.

I was inspired to write this based on a conversation I had with  Birichino, who is a very underrated writer himself. I highly recommend you check his work out.

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LivesInAStomach

Posted by LivesInAStomach 1 month ago Report

I've never read a story quite like this one, it was super creative and unique. I'll be keeping an eye on any of your future works.

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 1 month ago Report

Wow! Thank you! That means so much to hear, especially coming from someone whose work I've enjoyed quite a lot myself.

It is perhaps the most off-the-wall concept that I've come up with just yet, but I do have a strong fondness for those stories which think outside the box, so I'd love to write more.

I hope that whatever I put out next doesn't disappoint!

LivesInAStomach

Posted by LivesInAStomach 1 month ago Report

Ahhh, you've enjoyed my work? That's nice to hear. Don't worry about disappointing, just keep on writing! :)

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 1 month ago Report

Yes, I sure have enjoyed your stuff! I've found your character interactions, descriptions, and overall scenarios to all be quite enticing. (I also tend to be biased towards second person POV stuff, which you seem to have a good handle on, haha.)

I'll be sure to take your advice! Just keep writing, just keep writing...

Thimthee

Posted by Thimthee 1 month ago Report

Very good

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 1 month ago Report

Thank you!

Thimthee

Posted by Thimthee 1 month ago Report

Welcome

Matteo42

Posted by Matteo42 1 month ago Report

LMAOOO

dude that brought me to fucking tears hahahahha

I've been wanting to make a story with a similar drive (author deux ex machina), but I really doubt I could make it as funny as this was XD

Fucking god tier amazing dude, instant favorite!

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 1 month ago Report

So glad to hear you enjoyed it that much!

Yeah, I tried to go for all kinds of things with this one. I kinda worried that the mishmash of ideas might weaken the overall narrative, but if it at least gave you some good laughs, that's all I could ask for, haha.

If you still wanna write something along the same lines, don't let me stop you. I'm not super familiar with your work, but from what I've read, you seem pretty skilled. I'm sure you could pull it off great!

Matteo42

Posted by Matteo42 1 month ago Report

Ayy well thanks for the encouragement bro ;)
I'll give it a shot (one day)

Keep up the excellent work :D

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 1 month ago Report

No problem! I look forward to it!
And thanks for the fav!

Birichino

Posted by Birichino 1 month ago Report

This is really interesting work! Author intervention like this is an extremely rare concept, and it looks like you've found your own take on it. TBH, this wasn't what I had in mind when I mentioned knowing your creator is excited to make you suffer, but that only attests to your creativity!

I'm guessing you have some writing experience outside of Eka's, but it seems like you had fun making this so I encourage you to refine your skills further. If you enjoy using it, I think there's a lot of potential in this "omniscient first-person" angle, even in non-vore content.

And...it's pretty satisfying that that brunette got her comeuppance, however contrived. How much use is a predator that gets lazy even when civilians take her diet in stride, anyway?

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 1 month ago Report

Thank you!! It's an honor to hear that from someone I'd call one of the most creative authors I've read on this site.

To be honest, this wasn't what I thought the story would turn out like at first either. It was a very stream-of-consciousness kind of piece—I feel like it's more authentic to the concept that way. I came up with a lot of it as I went along, putting the pieces down and then figuring out later how to tie them together, all while being incredibly honest within the story that I was doing so.

Yeah, I've done my fair share of writing, but not a lot of it has been of the creative nature. Becoming an author was a passion of mine that I ultimately kind of let slip away over time due to a lack of actual inspiration. But I figure all I would need would be one good idea and a lot of motivation. Maybe this could be my angle? It's true that this idea has a lot of potential, but I'd have to do some real thinking to see how to figure out how to write a long-form narrative out of it.

And yes, you could call the way I wrapped things up with the brunette a last-second stroke of genius... or maybe just a last-second stroke. Take your pick. To be honest, I didn't even consider the obvious connection between "lazy phone-obsessed woman" and "neglectful babysitter" until *after* I wrote the twist. Sometimes things just have a way of working out.

Birichino

Posted by Birichino 1 month ago Report

Aww, thank you too!

Speaking of creative, there's nothing wrong with stream-of-consciousness. I can tell you took it to an extreme here, but a lot of writing from my experience is just getting into a situation and, when you know the characters and environment you're working with, the events come naturally. You can even surprise yourself, like you found with the babysitter connection, but the nice thing about writing is you can revise or revert anything that needs work after you've considered it.

So, verbose as that is, I'm saying yes: This could absolutely be your angle. Or your method, or whatever it's most useful to you as! Any experience you gather can become a tool for you.

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 1 month ago Report

No problem! And thank you so much for the watch, by the way!

While this method has worked well for me once here, I think it'll do me well to experiment. I'm already taking a much different approach for my second story, outlining the general events and important scenes before putting it all together. (I'm starting to worry it'll turn out way too long, but hey, there are worse problems to have.)

As for the stream-of-consciousness method, I think I'll stick to that for any follow-ups to this story. If I were to do follow-ups, I figure they would probably each focus on a different element of fiction, of the writing process, or of vore tropes. So it's funny you should mention revising, because one silly idea I had was to write a story with the concept that no revising is allowed, if only to see what a fun trainwreck it would be, and of course to emphasize the importance of revising.

I look forward to gaining more experience with my future works, and also to putting out some things that the people on here might enjoy.

MagicOddEffect

Posted by MagicOddEffect 1 month ago Report

This is weird. I like it.

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 1 month ago Report

It sure is, isn't it? Who would write something so strange?
Jokes aside, thank you so much for the watch and the favorite! The thing I'm writing up next is something generally more, well, normal, but I do want to come back and write a follow-up to this story too.

AndrewLondon

Posted by AndrewLondon 1 month ago Report

I and Eye are amused to find that all comments on your stories are essays. Seems you inspire thoughtful people.

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 1 month ago Report

I suppose so. Or maybe the meta nature of the concept just inherently inspires analysis. Overt fourth wall-breaking commentaries on some particular genre of media seems to be the hot current narrative trend. I didn't particularly mean to cash in on that or anything, but I suppose the fact that I did so without realizing is all the more proof that we're living in the era of the metafiction.

ImmortalPrey

Posted by ImmortalPrey 1 month ago Report

One of the best stories on the site.

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 4 weeks ago Report

Wow! What incredibly high praise! Thank you for the favorite and the watch as well! It really does mean a lot, especially coming from another writer.

I don't mean to shill or anything, but would you happen to have read the sequel as well? If you enjoyed this one, you might enjoy the other too.

ImmortalPrey

Posted by ImmortalPrey 4 weeks ago Report

Not yet, but I did put it in my list of things to read later (I should really get that thing in order). Also, thanks for acknowledging me as writer. Never get the right moment to sit and write down my ideas properly.

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 4 weeks ago Report

Haha, yeah, I can relate to having a backed-up backlog, trust me.

And yes, not having the time or motivation to just let your ideas flow sucks. Finding time for writing, as well as getting into the right mindset to do so, are both things I've struggled with lately as well. But never stop trying! I'm sure you'll reach where you need to be in due time.

IddlerItaler

Posted by IddlerItaler 1 month ago Report

Another fun, witty story.

> “Aaahh… ahh— uaaahhh!!” The man screams in abject terror, no longer even bothering to form coherent words. How boring. At least he could have the decency to come up with some kind of witty remark for me to counter. But then I remember that I’m terrible at writing banter anyway, so I just keep licking.

> “S… ss… ssssss… too… ppphh…” He can barely manage to coherently spew out that one word as he tries to pull his arm away, but finds no success.

These passages speak to me. When I'm writing (for RPs rather than for stories) I always struggle writing witty remarks during... well, the struggling part.

> Who does this whore think she is!? You created ME to be food!? Fucking FOOD!? And for what, so you and a few other sickos can enjoy torturing me!? I deserve better than this! You know what you should use that mouth of yours for? How about you—

Ouch

> Needless to say, his squirming only speeds up his descent. Because of course it does. It always does. Hey, maybe I should make a vore story bingo card.

Not a bad idea, not a bad idea. If you keep writing more stories, we'll have the vore bingo card filled out in no time.

For as meta as your series gets, the man's mind-torture as a girl he just met suddenly decides his literal past is something unironically really powerful.

> That’s why I’d like to believe that, whatever the truth is, there’s one thing that definitely exists: some sort of system of karma, or judgement for sins.

Maybe sins is the wrong word, since many people would find vore - and all pornography - to be sinful. Though the world having some mechanism of justice is a pleasant thought indeed. Like the idea that we are to be rewarded for each act of kindness and punished for each act of cruelty. Personally, I'm not as optimistic as to think we are, however we can try to be the best we can be, and be kind and just towards other people so that *we* can be the "gentle, caring universe" even if for a moment. Nice. Or are these just the words of some shady cosmic organism trying to start a dark cult? Heck if I know.

The final plot twist of the woman being the babysitter elicited an "oh lol" from me.

YepMcNope

Posted by YepMcNope 4 weeks ago Report

Glad you enjoyed this one as well!

Yeah, witty banter really relies, I think, upon a very solid dynamic between two characters so that they can bounce off each other well. Like any comedy, really. I think that makes it inherently harder in RP since you only have control over your side of the story.

The bingo card idea was a joke at first, but one of these days I swear I'm gonna make it and post it somewhere. Mark my words.

And yeah, I'm glad the utter existential dread of Todd's situation hit hard. If he weren't in a rough enough situation, that's just beating a man when he's down. But I think it's an interesting thought, exploring the nature of a character experiencing his own creation. (Just moments before his demise, at any rate...)

"Sins" might be the wrong word after all, but I wanted to go for something with a religious vibe and all, haha. And yes, I would very much like if we could be the best we could be, to be that fair universe that may not really exist... That's a theme I'd like to explore in an entirely different series, but whichever way justice is achieved, be it through acts of humanity or acts of a higher power, I'd like to believe justice exists in one form or another.

And yes, as I've said, the plot twist at the end was a sudden stroke of genius... or maybe just a sudden stroke. Take your pick. To be honest, it didn't really click for me how well "negligent babysitter" fit with "woman always on her phone" until *after* I wrote the twist. Our own minds surprise us sometimes.