innertrack - 3 weeks ago

Thanks! No sequels, per se. I do like the idea of a private zoo, where large, genetically engineered animals swallow adult humans whole. No promises though.

Other animals are possible, but I prefer willing prey.

innertrack - 3 weeks ago

Glad you liked it!

StarSummer - 2 months ago

Hey sorry ik u posted this a month ago but I just wanted to say this is rly gd. It’s super hot seeing male prey being fed to a frog by a female zookeeper this time lol. Do u think you’ll make any sequels to this with other animals & less willing prey?

SleepyIsland48 - 2 months ago

I like this a lot! Great casual tone.

innertrack - 3 months ago

I like F/M or F/F and vore that is restricted to oral or unbirth. In my stories, creature preds are either female or unspecified, but never specifically male. And I usually try to make the gender irrelevant to the story.

No bestiality ever. No penetration of females by tentacles or anything else. And animal preds are oblivious to human genitalia. We're just food. There's no sexual interest.
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currant - 1 year ago

Considering me, the second option. They also deserve a meal they don't have to work for from time to time. ^^

innertrack - 1 year ago

Thanks! Gotta watch out for those anime girls. Or maybe go looking for them.

currant - 1 year ago

Love it.

innertrack - 1 year ago

Thanks! Sometimes there's nothing like a short cut-to-the-chase vore story.

Jamie263 - 1 year ago

That really turned me on. Nice work

innertrack - 1 year ago

Stumbled on this as a story scrap that had been sitting on my computer untouched for a while. Didn't bother polishing the end result. Just wanted to finish it and call it done.

innertrack - 1 year ago

Thanks! It was fun to write. And I got a good chuckle over the vorish pleasantries at the end. You know, "Thank you so much for the delicious customer," and all that.

Yumyum18 - 1 year ago

So hot!
I wish I was Nate

innertrack - 1 year ago

Yeah, If only, right?

Yumyum18 - 1 year ago

Lucky guy.

innertrack - 1 year ago

New thumbnail - frog_vore_18 by andromeda111

innertrack - 1 year ago

Warning, giant frogs - but the picture says it all.

Knulltheking - 1 year ago

Thanks I appreciate it

Knulltheking - 1 year ago

Lol thanks! Which hanging was your favorite?

innertrack - 1 year ago

Added link to the original story

innertrack - 1 year ago

Notice that I avoided the brother/sister motif. It's gets done a lot, but cousin still works.

innertrack - 1 year ago

Thanks!

I prefer endings like this, though. Whether it's a story or picture, the actual progression of digestive effects is not a preference of mine. Nor is scat.

Atinik - 1 year ago

A very hot story! Do you plan on doing a second part where the digestion part actually happens? That would be great:O

innertrack - 1 year ago

I considered other titles. This one is innocuous until you read the story. "Black Widow" might be too much of a giveaway. "Dressed to Kill" is similar bin that regard.

innertrack - 1 year ago

I'll be trying to re-upload this story in different formats under the name Testing. Formatting is being lost. The title and section heading should be in bold and a larger font size, and the title should be centered. Please ignore Testing.

innertrack - 1 year ago

Glad you liked it. The original story ended with Amir's release. To satisfy my preferences, it had to end with consumption and digestion.

Yumyum18 - 1 year ago

Vorgy stories are so hot!

innertrack - 1 year ago

OK. I don't understand this, but when I uploaded the story as an .rtf file, the quotes were messed up. So I saved it as a .doc file and re-uploaded. That seemed to fix it. Just don't ask me why.

innertrack - 1 year ago

I may need to repost this story. Double-quotes are being replaced by a pair of characters - a square followed by a letter. And I've spotted a couple errors that I may as well correct if I can figure out how to fix the quotes.

innertrack - 1 year ago

Added tags

innertrack - 3 years ago

Thanks! I don't have the original though. All I have is a hybrid version where I had already incorporated many of my changes. The original involved a gathering to watch movies (the second movie is Anaconda) and that's still in the hybrid. Sarah, not Sue, was the willing victim, and was pregnant. The hybrid has a non-pregnant Sarah. And, in the original,
Reggie is a talking snake, which I did away with in my version. The last big difference is that Jim, Sarah's husband, seems to go along with Sarah's wishes, only to be super pissed afterwards.

Eater99 - 3 years ago

Awesome story! I love it. I'm curious, do you know if "Sarah's last movie" is still floating around somewhere? I'd like to see how it compares to your take on events

SleepyIsland48 - 3 years ago

I’m not familiar with the original story or writer, but this is really great!

max123 - 3 years ago

Great spin on the story and yeah greyj just went dark after he finished the unbirth series

innertrack - 4 years ago

Thanks to joeburp for helping me straighten out formatting issues (use DOC format not RTF).

joeburp22181 - 4 years ago

My pleasure!

innertrack - 4 years ago

This is the second posting of the story. There were formatting issues when I uploaded it in RTF. Thanks to joeburp for pointing to DOC format as the solution.

Niror - 3 years ago

Please, please, I need to read the rest, even if is an unfinished work.

rugli - 5 years ago

Seems likes been couple of years now.

BunnyWrites - 5 years ago

I was a huge fan of the original PD image sequence, it ticked so many boxes for me. The submission, how quickly she was treated like merely an attraction, and the exhibitionist angle. I'm in love with the idea of we women as food <3

So thank you so much for continuing the series, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it a few times this past year. I hope Hannah gets to fulfill her fantasy some day~

Slimshod - 7 years ago

Absolutely loved your work on over on guro and this little snippet is exciting. Hoping innertrack continues with their rendition. Awesome work!

Slimshod - 7 years ago

Found this story and the original over on gurochan and loved all 3 of them. Please keep writing more, you're doing a great follow up to htabdoolb.

innertrack - 3 weeks ago

... where Angela eats Matt, of course.

Lately, I've been resurfacing, writing some new stories and revisiting old ones. But I don't know where that'll take me. Sometimes I feel like I'm just along for the ride.

rugli - 1 year ago

I think this story needs a follow up :)

innertrack - 7 years ago

It was fun to write, too. It's nice to write a cut-to-the-chase vore story sometimes, instead of one that takes more time and effort.

Bright - 7 years ago

You're a munchie is a good story.

I enjoyed reading this one too.

Thebob - 7 years ago

Awesome story, honored to have inspired it.

innertrack - 9 years ago

The story doesn't mention one, but you're free to imagine what you like. If a gf were to show up looking for him, would she be on Elaine's menu? Or in an alternate timeline, would he be eaten by his gf instead of Elaine. Any variation could be enticing, but I don't plan on writing a related story.

rugli - 9 years ago

Tell me do Rob have a girl friend?

innertrack - 9 years ago

Good. That's what I trying for.

Jamie263 - 9 years ago

Very hot.

ryanshowseason3 - 9 years ago

Not trying to pigeonhole you, that's the entire reason why I said it's my own sacred cow. I was indicating it's not everyone's standard. I thought that was obvious, hopefully it's in plain sight now.

I disagree that shoving exposition into dialog is a good style though. It makes dialog seem unnatural. People don't have conversations in the form of exposition. It's the kind of thing a James Bond villain does as a trope in satire of itself and other cheesy/bad spy movies.

But I can see you're veiling hostility when faced with criticism. I'll just refrain from trying to help.

Good luck.

innertrack - 9 years ago

Dialog is my normal style, but it's not the only good one. Exposition can be effective if you keep it short. Long expository passages can be boring. The trick is to keep them short, as I did. And your preference for dialog shouldn't be a sacred cow. Conformance to that style is not a valid standard of judgment. You're free to choose your own style, but don't presume to pigeonhole mine.

I've posted part 2. I don't even know what to call the style, but it works for me.

ryanshowseason3 - 9 years ago

Straightforward and embellishments aside though the dialog felt a bit stilted, didn't flow like a conversation more like an exposition dump. I suppose for a teaser it's a trade off but not one I'd make. Dialog is one of my sacred cows. I guess if describing action is your thing then dialog is simply in the way.

One paragraph switched from 3rd person to 1st person as well.

I feel like a jerk when I criticize, but I'm of the opinion that you've got talent. So please know I mean no offense.

innertrack - 9 years ago

It's not rushed in the least. Yes, it is a teaser - a setup - and such things should never be needlessly prolonged. The idea is straightforward - you get to the point with the least possible embellishment.

Part 2 - Reenactment - is running longer ... taking on a life of its own. It'll probably run longer than I like. My favorite stories are cut-to-the-chase, 3-4 pages max. As I'm writing part 2, the story is already 5 pages and counting, which is slightly annoying to me. But I'm going to stick to the idea and let it play out in full.

ryanshowseason3 - 9 years ago

Solid concept, felt a bit rushed though. Is that just the nature of the teaser though?

VincentShadowScale - 9 years ago

But they're so tasty! After all it just means that they gotta make sure to keep recruiting new members~

innertrack - 9 years ago

Thanks! If I don't come up with new ideas, I get bored with writing. So when the proverbial light bulb goes on, I try to put the idea into words before I forget it entirely.

Bright - 9 years ago

That is a pretty decent idea actually.

innertrack - 9 years ago

Thanks. I enjoyed stitching together ideas I hadn't used before - general disbelief, vigilantes in pursuit, simulacra, and of course the lottery. And I agree that waiting would be tough.

innertrack - 9 years ago

It's definitely a sweet deal for Kristi. You should savor your food!

innertrack - 9 years ago

It was fun to write. Glad you liked it.

crumplim - 9 years ago

Awesome dooderino

innertrack - 9 years ago

Thanks!

Jamie263 - 9 years ago

Yes it was definitely worth the wait. Nice work!

spider2828 - 9 years ago

I am hyped heehe!! keep going with this crwative scenarios ^^

innertrack - 9 years ago

It'll wrap in the next part. My first crack at it came out too dry - descriptive, expository and boring. But after umpteen rereads I know what was wrong with it. The solution is to let the characters do the talking and make it fun.

spider2828 - 9 years ago

It is going to continue?? it looks amazing ~<3

Jamie263 - 9 years ago

I actually agree with some of the characters in this part. I wouldn't want to wait an extra fortnight for my turn to be eaten. The anticipation would be unbearable. I would volunteer to go for it right then and there.

innertrack - 9 years ago

Thanks for staying with the story through the buildup. Next comes the actual vore!

innertrack - 9 years ago

What's coming next isn't what I'd call a surprise twist, but I think some of it will be unexpected anyway.

innertrack - 9 years ago

I love to hear that. Surprise twists are most gratifying when they really do surprise.

Luffredd - 9 years ago

nice twist. didn't see that coming

Jamie263 - 9 years ago

Brilliant. I look forward to seeing what happens next.

innertrack - 9 years ago

Me too.

Jamie263 - 9 years ago

I love where this is going. Particularly the domination aspect of it. I wouldn't mind that happening to me.

innertrack - 9 years ago

It's fun to dish out surprises for readers and characters alike. More to come ...

oishi1 - 9 years ago

Things not being what the volunteer hoped for is right up my alley. Reluctance and changing their mind is too.

innertrack - 9 years ago

That's an interesting suggestion, but Vore Matchmaker Service doesn't use coercion, which might actually be necessary. On the other hand, if he could lured to Angela's favorite bar (see "Delectable Agreement"), you wouldn't have to pay a thing. She'd take care of everything quite nicely.

willerd321 - 9 years ago

if i pay her will she seduce and eat my cheating back stabbing wifes hinata hyuga and sakura hourno

innertrack - 9 years ago

I'm glad to see you're enjoying it. It's a fun story to write.

Jamie263 - 9 years ago

Wow this is hot.

innertrack - 9 years ago

Stay tuned ... there some twists and turns coming up.

innertrack - 9 years ago

Count me in. I would absolutely love it too.

Jamie263 - 9 years ago

Wow that was hot. That would be a way I would like to go.

innertrack - 9 years ago

I'm not too surprised that you've have a similar fantasy. Even after writing it, the idea still has tremendous power over me. I'd agree to that offer in a heartbeat.

Jamie263 - 9 years ago

I actually had a fantasy about something like this when I was younger. Nice one.

innertrack - 9 years ago

Glad you like it. It was fun to write, and I always like to throw little twists like this in a story.

spider2828 - 9 years ago

I love your stories hehe ^^ Keep doing that great work!!! :3

innertrack - 9 years ago

So do I. Hopefully I also got across the hint that men who agree to go home with Angela secretly want to be vored, even if they don't know it themselves.

Jamie263 - 9 years ago

This is why I love the thought of being prey to someone. You're surrendering yourself to them completely. Really arousing.

innertrack - 9 years ago

Added tags

innertrack - 9 years ago

** Chuckle ** Just what Jenny and Alex both wanted him to be.

hamletvalley - 9 years ago

Right to the point x3
A good story :3 still he sounded like a pain in the ass the month after x3

innertrack - 9 years ago

Thanks for the comment! I doubt I'll revisit any of these characters again, but I like taking off with an idea inspired by someone else, whether the inspiration comes from a story or picture(s). And of course I'll give due credit to the original artist.

MommysFood - 9 years ago

Just have to say I love this story! Wish I had a sister like Jenny. ;) Thanks for writing and sharing it. Hope to see more from you like this.

innertrack - 10 years ago

You're welcome!

Aickavon12 - 11 years ago

Still a very very good read, I certainly enjoyed it myself ^-^

innertrack - 11 years ago

Thanks for the comments!

You may as well know that early on I saw the repetitiveness as a problem. I originally intended this story to be nothing more than a happy-go-lucky vorefest of maybe 3000 words total. But six was too many. Two or three vore victims would have been better for that purpose. So the mystery idea struck me as a way to add another dimension to the story. The trouble was, that led to a story of nearly 13000 words, way more than I ever intended to write. There's always more you can add to a story, but I'm happy with drawing the line where I did. If I had expanded anything a little more, it might have been backstories for the other five dessert girls.

It's interesting that you brought up the idea of making the ring leader a grand surprise, because I originally thought of writing the opening chapter to be less revealing about the mother's involvement. But for reasons I didn't understand at the time, I wrote from the mother's perspective that "Everything was going according to plan." That speaks volumes, of course. It already answers the question of who, and leaves only what and why. I guess the greater mystery held more appeal to me.

Aickavon12 - 11 years ago

Well coming back in general tends to throw logic out of the window so making up your own 'magic logic' or basically anything that seems to work is always good, and you explained it believably well X3

now for the criticism!

Repetativeness, though it's good to have a pattern in such a scenerio as the one you were writing about, there were parts where I could completely skip and know exactly what was happening. It was the vore scenes. They followed the same path all the time and nothing was spiced up. It was interesting the first two times but there was nothing special the next three. Though I can understand that when you got a ritual kinda thing going on, perhaps you could've spiced some stuff up, decide a different position to vore, or maybe focus on different things during the vore? At the end of the vore you could perhaps have some more interaction between healed and savior, discussing how their life was changed for the better instead of a little 'yeah my life sucked, thanks for healing'.


That's my only beef with the story, other then that I feel that it was very well written and thought out. It was enjoyable to see how the mother interacted with her daughter though I guess I kinda predicted very easily who was the ring leader of this ordeal. Maybe you could add some other outside characters here and there that would add to the 'suspicion' of being ringleaders. Not character suspicion, but reader suspicion. Of course, this is only if you want the reader to be very very surprised when it is the mother. I do understand that writing more characters and giving them personalities can be a hassle as it has bogged down many of my own stories ^_^' so I guess this piece was less of criticism like my first, and more of a suggestion.

innertrack - 11 years ago

I'm glad to hear your thoughts. Vore is the main subject on this site, so I didn't know how well the mystery would go over here. But my worst fear was not to hear anything from anyone.

It's good to hear that you liked the ending, because I had such a great time writing it. For me it answered the question of what Carmen's mother was up to in the first chapter, because it reprised the mother-daughter scene from the mother's POV.

You got my curiosity going on the criticism. There are areas where I could have expanded on details, but felt that would bog down the story. The biggest of those is exactly how does anyone come back from apparent death. Call it magic. It's an intentional omission. Let readers use their imaginations.

So go for it.

innertrack - 11 years ago

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. Originally I posted the story one part per week in my thread in Work to be Shared. That week in between was great for letting ideas swim around in my head until I could make them coherent. It was also a bit of tease for readers, because I tried to finish each part with something that begged for an immediate follow-up.

innertrack - 11 years ago

Thanks! It was great fun to write, and equally great fun to tease readers on my Work to be Shared thread by doing weekly installments, always trying to end a chapter in a way that makes readers hunger for more.

What if same-size vore were possible? What if you were in a very nice relationship with someone who could vore you, and you just found out they could? How might that play out for both of you? Those questions were always driving the story.

bela - 11 years ago

Nice development of opposite tensions: urgent vs slow and sensual; boyfriend vs food; love vs assimilation

innertrack - 9 years ago

So do I, and I'd react just like he did.

Jamie263 - 9 years ago

Wish I had a girlfriend like her. Lucky guy.