The Misadventures of Bandit: The Unlucky Lemur � Berserker B
- Strip-vore Poker -
Bandit stared at his two opponents with fear in his eyes. They had just sat down on the floor. They sat in a triangular formation, facing each other. His opponents, Trisha Tialga and Amber Lebard, a female tiger and leopard, respectively, stared back at him with hungry eyes and a gleaming smile that showed their sharp teeth. Bandit began to shiver in fright as Trisha began dealing from a deck of cards, his f
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: F/F F/M Students wager role reversal Poker University strip poker Voreception pred/pred
Bandit is assigned to work on a group project with two female carnivores. Can the poor lemur survive their game of strip-vore poker, or is lady luck favoring her own gender?
Contains: F/m, soft vore, implied F/f vore, and a really cheesy ending ( just had to do it).
Be sure to check out Bandit's bio if you want to learn more about him.
Slash - 16 years ago
Ths was a fun story if you ask me. I could actually see this as a cartoon short. The humor and the nice little twist at the end was great.
A fav no doubt.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Thank you. Well, maybe it's not cheesy, but it sure isn't original.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Glad you did.
IGA - 16 years ago
i loved your bandit stories. and the ending isnt that cheesy.
The Misadventures of Bandit: The Unlucky Lemur � Berserker B
- Lemurs and Pokemon Do Not Mix -
(Pokemon is owned by Nintendo. Bandit is owned by me)
His name was Bandit Long-tail, and he was a Pokemon trainer. Well, sort of. Bandit was new to the whole, `trainer' thing, and not very lucky. Normally, most people begin training when they hit puberty. However, Bandit did not start until just recently, and right as he was finishing college. Because of this, his parents cut him off from any
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: writing
Bandit tries his luck as a Pokemon trainer. Unfortunately, his journey comes to a perilous halt, as he faces a wild Dragonair who decides he looks good enough to eat.
Contains: Pokemon pred, Pokemon prey, and Lemur prey, soft vore
Be sure to check out Bandit's bio to learn more about him.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Ain't that the truth.
Slash - 16 years ago
The eternal meal no matter what universe he's in. I found this story funny more than sad. It had to be the ending to it.
Nothing like humor to take the seriousness out of a situation. ^^
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Well I designed him to be permanent prey.
Amnael - 16 years ago
lol seems like he is always be the food x3 just like that :3
The Misadventures of Bandit: The Unlucky Lemur � Berserker B
- Carnivore Coffee Shop -
It was 10:25 am, on a Friday morning, and chemistry class was in session. As the professor lectured on about acids and bases, about half the class was either asleep, or too confused to care anymore. There were five minutes left in the class, and most people would be ready to pack up and leave by now. Not Bandit, he hung on the professor's every word, and copied down every example. Bandit was one of the
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: writing
Bandit gets dragged into a study session with a Tigress classmate. Sure, the place may be public, but will that be enough to stop her carnivorous hunger?
Probably not.
Contains: F/m, soft vore, implied vore, oral sex
Check out Bandit's bio if you want to learn more about him.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Why, thank you.
Merlance - 16 years ago
I love the secrect hide out idea ^_^
Great story.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
I don't know if I will use Luke in another story. Maybe, maybe not.
Smitty - 16 years ago
Er, mouse >.<: Whoops.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
It's just his luck I guess *snickers*. Thanks, I've been having a lot of inspiration recently.
Cannigals found a meal - colored
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Furry F/M Spit Cannigals Butt Pre-Vore cannibals Licking erection Male Prey Female Pred bound outdoors
Posted with Canime's permission.
The colors for the girls are matched to his descriptions to the best of my abilities.
Original piece can be found at:
http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=160336
The Misadventures of Bandit: The Unlucky Lemur � Berserker B
- Gone Fishing -
Bandit sat in his boat, happily preparing his fishing rod for a nice day of fishing. He glanced around, and was surprised that there was no one else was around. From what that strange guy at the bar told him, this place had some of the best fish in the country. He shrugged, and figured that it was just some sort of secret spot.
He tied the bait to his hook, and took a position south. He brought his rod back,
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
While fishing at a secluded lake, Bandit hooks something he did not expect, and winds in in its belly.
Contains: M/m (technically), soft vore
Don't forget to read the bio to learn more about Bandit.
The Misadventures of Bandit: The Unlucky Lemur � Berserker B
- A Knight in Peril -
Bandit marched up the hill leading to the dragon's cave. He had been charged by his King to rescue the fair princess, who had been kidnapped by the horrible dragon known as Gungnir. Bandit had trained as a knight since he was a young boy, and now his training would finally pay off. If he rescued the imprisoned princess, he would be rewarded her hand in marriage, and would earn a place in history, forever.
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore Soft Vore F/M Sex writing Oral Sex
Bandit finds himself as a knight, off to slay a dragon and rescue the fair princess.
Problem is, he gets the wrong dragon, and she has other plans for him.
Contains: F/m, soft vore, sex
Don't forget to read the bio to learn more about Bandit.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Thank you. i had fun writing this, so I am glad you enjoyed reading it.
Deleteduser_120 - 16 years ago
Wonderful stuff, all the way through.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Oh yeah, this was the first one I wrote. In fact, I did this before I did the bio.
I plan on having plenty of different things eat him.
Slash - 16 years ago
The start of this story was hilarious. This was a pretty nice story and Bandit is just getting started with his misadventures it seems.^^
The Misadventures of Bandit: The Unlucky Lemur
- Bandit's Bio -
Full Name: Bandit Long-tail
Species: Anthro Ring-tailed Lemur
Height: approx. 5'8” (172.7 cm)
Weight: approx. 145 - 155 lbs (65.7 - 70.3 Kg)
Age: Early twenties
Sexuality: Straight
Hair: Light black, short and scruffy
Eyes: Green
Build: Lean/Average
Fur: Gray around most of his body, Light gray on his front (ends at waist), black fur around eyes in the shape a little mask, a touch of
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Non-Vore profile writing
Just Bandit's bio. If you want a little information about the little lemur, than read this.
Amnael - 16 years ago
well he always get digested ... seems like permanent unluck for me ^^;
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
I'm sorry, but your English has me a little confused. Do you mean, why can't he get lucky and NOT get digested?
Amnael - 16 years ago
cant he get just one time luck and get the 10 instead of the other 9 :P
Slash - 16 years ago
Maybe ;)
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
I like to think of myself as more of a pred, so it was fun coming up with a prey character.
Maybe Sandra and Bandit should, er, "meet" someday.
From Peach to Poison - Extra Chapter � Berserker B
(All characters owned by Nintendo)
Author Note - This story is a response to a comment made by Slash. He reminded me that I had forgotten Daisy and Toad, so I decided to do a quick little chapter with them in it.
-Note- This story takes place after the events of the main story. However, Peach will still be referred to as Peach, even though her name is now Poison, just to keep things easier.
Peach walked onto the tennis court of her o
Super Mario - From Peach to Poison - Extra Chapter
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore Nintendo Soft Vore F/F F/M writing Super Mario Bros Female Prey Male Prey Female Pred Princess Peach f/multiple Princess Daisy Multiple Preys
This is a little extra chapter I decided to do that features Daisy and Toad as prey. Thank you to Slash for reminding me of these two wonderful meals, er, characters.
Contains: F/f/m, soft vore
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
I've never played the game myself, but I remembered reading that Daisy was featured in it. So I just went with it. I plan on doing some other Mario themed stories, but they probably won't feature Peach as the pred.
Slash - 16 years ago
No need for thanks. Toad is a slppery character and honestly he shows up n the most awkward places in most games and Daisy is a pretty strong willed princess. Can't have them around while conquering the world.;)
Nice Job with the Mario Tennis theme.
Inspiration goes along way.^^
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Well Daisy and Toad did deserve a chance in the spotlight. Even if it only lasted until they were swallowed whole.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Thank you. I may do a few more, but not related to this story.
Tsavo - 16 years ago
Wow, even threw in a little extra just for the heck of it huh? Prety much wraps up all the loose ends.
Super Mario - From Peach to Poison pt3 � Berserker B
(Characters belong to Nintendo)
Peach sat at her extravagant throne while she waited for the representative to arrive. She tapped her fingers rhythmically on the armrest, a sign that her patience was wearing thin. Over a month had passed since Bowser's death and Peach had taken full advantage of her new widowed situation. By rallying Bowser's former subjects through his death, and by the promise of a new age for the Mushroom Kingdom for
Super Mario -From Peach to Poison pt3
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore Nintendo mario Soft Vore F/M writing Male Prey Female Pred Princess Peach
I did this chapter in one night. *Whew* (Last chapter).
As Peach's power and influence grows, can anyone stop her new found conquest to take over the world? Can Luigi stop her, or will he fall like those before him. Read to find out (or just read the 'contains' to get a hint.)
Also, a little extra scene at the end.
Contains: Plant/f/m, F/m, soft vore
chimcharinsanity - 14 years ago
I dont know if you planned on this, or even want to but..
Maybe you could this:
Super Mario -From Peach to Poison pt3B
Where luigi manages to beat peach and kills or eats her. then goes and saves yoshi, where he proceeds to kill or eat her as well.
Interesting idea? if you dont do it thats fine, I am just offering ideas :p
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
You mean Yoshi. She ate Yoshi.
And thanks, glad you liked it.
Tsavo - 16 years ago
Great conclusion. Love the series, awesome stuff, w00t! W00t! What! what!!
Birdo eatin Boshi in the epilogue was a nice finisher as well.
Slash - 16 years ago
Heh heh. Just an after thought. Your story is fine as is. But it's up to you. If you are doing it, don't forget toad.^^
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Oh yeah, Daisy, I completely forgot about her. Hmmm, I wonder if I should include her in on the fun. Maybe just a short little add-on to the story. Perhaps...
Super Mario - From Peach to Poison pt2 � BerserkerB
(All Characters owned by Nintendo)
Bowser grinned gleefully as he strolled up to the castle entrance. He looked down at the frightened guards, who were shaking in their spores at the site of the massive koopa.
“I believe I have an invitation,” he said with a wide grin, his sharp teeth gleamed as a ray of light shined upon them.
The two small mushroom men looked at each other, not sure of what to do.
Bowser was not
Super Mario - From Peach to Poison pt2
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore Nintendo mario Soft Vore F/M writing Bowser Male Prey Female Pred Princess Peach implied sex
The second chapter in the series of Peach's transformation. Now that Mario is no more, what will happen to the wedding? Will Bowser's plans lead him to victory, or does Peach have something up her sleeve?
Contains: F/m, soft vore, implied sex.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
You better believe it. That game is a classic.
Slash - 16 years ago
Well now! You made my day with this one.^^
Peach being smart and ravenous. Also answered my question of luigi. A great story set up and it seems someone's played mario rpg.^^
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Thank you.
AtmosRobot - 16 years ago
Wow. Really nice. I liked the first one, and this one was an excellent continuation. Well done.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
I like to put a little story with my vore. As for who she is going to eat next, the last sentences after THE END give a hint.
Typical Snake Vore - Bad day at the zoo � Berserker B
(The main character is Anthro and the snake is not)
He pushed open the door to the holding area and stepped inside. He looked around at the remarkably big pen, and was astonished at how much decoration was used to create that natural feeling. He leaned through the door and picked up his broom, mop, and bucket of soapy water. He began his job of cleaning the pen. There was a plaque near the door on the other side. It read, “Warnin
Typical Snake Vore - A Day at the Zoo
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Furry Oral Vore Snake Soft Vore Constriction writing Snake Vore
Just wanted to write a generic snake vore story.
A poor Lemur finds himself at the mercy of a large constrictor.
Contains: Snake/m, soft vore, constriction, furry
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Thank you. It was just a little idea I had. I guess it does have a darkness to it.
Deleteduser_120 - 16 years ago
Now this is quite well-written. I like how the snake shows no regard for Bandit and the general darkness of the story.
Super Mario - From Peach to Poison � Berserker B
*All characters are owned by Nintendo*
Thunder rolled across the darkened sky above Bowser's castle. Periodic bolts of lightning accompanied the dreary atmosphere and rolling thunder. The stone castle stood atop a tall mountain, built so those who dared enter could only do so from the front, or by air.
From the sky descended the familiar figure of Bowser's clown copter. It hovered above the castle for a moment as the sky doors opened, a
Super Mario - From Peach to Poison
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore Nintendo mario F/M writing Bowser Male Prey Female Pred Princess Peach
It seems like a normal day in the Mushroom Kingdom. But something weird happens to Peach after she eats a strange mushroom. What will happen?
Contains; F/m, soft vore, and implied Soft vore
May write a sequel if enough people like it.
MichaelGrey - 15 years ago
...yeah. Indeed.
BerserkerB - 15 years ago
Ah, good song. Good play.
MichaelGrey - 15 years ago
Ah-hem. Allow me to respond to this series as a whole...
IN SOOOONG!
No one mourns the Wicked!
No one cries "They won't return!"
No one lays a lily on their grave
The good man scorns the Wicked!
Through their lives, our children learn
What we miss, when we misbehave:
And Goodness knows
The Wicked's lives are lonely
Goodness knows
The Wicked die alone
It just shows when you're Wicked
You're left only
On your own
Yes, Goodness knows
The Wicked's lives are lonely
Goodness knows
The Wicked cry alone
Nothing grows for the Wicked
They reap only
What they've sown!
Requiem - 16 years ago
Something I'm familiar with.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Thank you very much. Yeah, I sometimes have dialogue issues, but I am trying to get better at it. It's not easy thinking up what to say. :P
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Comic F/F Canime Pure Color Butt nom Cannibalism purple hair bound midriff dark skin Apple In Mouth
Posted with Canime's permission.
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Nintendo mario Yoshi Pre-Vore koopa
Posted with Canime's permission. Took all morning to do, but it was worth it.
Original: http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=159508
PM me if you would like me to color something of yours.
Ky-Guy - 16 years ago
It looks even cuter when it's colored. I wish I had a Shy-Guy costume to wear. :3
Teruyo - 16 years ago
Yeah. The picture practically begs for a sequel.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Thanks. We can only hope there is a sequel.
JQVore - 16 years ago
Judging from the responses on Canime's original post, EVERYONE wants a sequel. Nice coloring job by the way.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
I myself hope Canime does the sequel to it.
The Three Little Pigs - Redux � Berserker B
Once upon a time, there were three little pigs. Their names were Tommy, Robby, and Bill, from youngest to oldest. One day, their mother sent them on their way to find their fortunes, for she no longer could provide for them.
The youngest pig, Tommy, soon became a farmer, and built his house out of straw. The middle pig, Robby, became a logger, and built his house out of sticks, while the eldest pig, Bill, went into construction, and built his
Three Little Pigs - Redux (Cooking)
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore F/M Cooking writing
This is a retelling of the TLP story. However, the wolf is female, and is a wolf-girl rather than an anthro. Contains cooking, and some slightly graphic scenes, F/m. My first cooking pic (hurray).
icetray4 - 16 years ago
That was excellent! Love F/m!
Four Fairies and the Frog � Berserker B
(Note: I did not give the main characters too much description, so imagine them in any way you want.)
There once were four fairy siblings, who came from the house of Silverwing. They set out to collect mana-dew, a precious resource, for their village. The eldest child's name was Cailean, and he was the fastest flyer in the village. The second oldest was Bridget, and she was a hearty woman. The third sibling was Conan, and his head was full of knowle
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore Frog witch Fairy Fairy Tale Riddles
Four fairies make their way through a swamp to get home. However, when they encounter a frog guarding the path home, will they be able to best the frog and return home safely. Or will they end up as the frog's meal? I tried to give it a fairy tale feeling. Contains: F/m/f, Anthro-frog, Fairies, soft vore.
peteian - 16 years ago
Sure!! I'd love to see a sequel OwO Can't wait and that multiple ending sounds interesting XD
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Oh my... I'm glad to be an inspiration to people. Would you like to see a sequel to this story? Maybe I could make it a multiple ending.
peteian - 16 years ago
Whoa! Awesome story there. I actually lost track of the real world. For me though, I would've liked to see Haley digested, but then again it is your story. Hmm.... I might start drawing fairies soon and this story just encouraged me moar. Thanks.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Thanks. As for a sequel... eh, maybe, but it is a big maybe.
Sith - 16 years ago
omg you gotta come up with a really good ending were haley gets revenge on the witch by tricking her into doing something really smart *smirks and thinks of poor fairys* they must be avenged!, lol good story dude
To Become a God pt.1 - Cerberus � Berserker B
(Read the author's notes after the story for some tidbits about my inspiration)
A lone man stood in front of a large gate. What surrounded this gate was a vast land filled with nothing. The land itself was a flat piece of gray that stretched into infinity. Above the ground held an ominous fog that would chill the bravest of hearts. The sky was a mass of distorted bleakness that felt both alive and dead at the same time. In the middle of this w
To Become a God pt.1 - Cerberus
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
This chapter introduces Cerberus. Cerberus guards the Gate of Hell, but his life changes after defending it from three demons. Contains: Graphic violence, sexual themes, soul vore, soft vore, and strong language.
BerserkerB - 15 years ago
Hee hee. While I'm glad you like it... the rest of this story will never see the light of day. Sorry.
wolfstar - 15 years ago
This is a great story!! :) I hope I can see more of it!!! :)
maxim123456789 - 16 years ago
Good reading.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Glad to see you like it. I am actually proud of this idea, and I really want to see it through. I am currently working on Anbuis' intro for chapter two, and they will meet (probably) in chpater 3.
Slash - 16 years ago
Well done series start. Nice Character Development Happy to see it unfold.
Cat-girl & Mouse-girl � Berserker B
A terrible crash enshrouded the house as a vase hit the floor.
“Damn you!” came a shout from the same room. From the door a small gray mouse girl zipped across the floor, followed quite quickly by an angry red furred cat girl. The cat girl chased after the little mouse with fiery rage in her eyes.
“You can't catch me!' the mouse girl snapped as she dodged a grab by the cat girl. The little mouse girl made a straight shot for h
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore Micro Soft Vore F/F mouse girl tom and jerry
If Tom and Jerry were female, anthro, and Tom finally won. (SV, F/f, Micro)
Celestia - 2 years ago
This was a really fun story, though I feel like it could have used at least one attempt, if not the final outcome, of the cat girl preparing the mouse girl as a sandwich like in several of the old Tom and Jerry or loony tunes chase cartoons this was based on. Still really solid story.
Night5Gaming - 4 years ago
Eh, that’s literally just for motivation in the shows, not to mention the thing everyone’s heard of being cats eat mice, which they even made fun of sometimes
Night5Gaming - 4 years ago
You dare say Tom never thought of something clever? Kidding, but seriously, a lot of episodes from the show were really creative and original.
Ninatiels - 16 years ago
great story. even if it was a little short. and I think you will find there ARE voraphiles in the cartoon industry... how many times have you seen someone wanting to eat bugs bunny.. then tom/jerry wile e/roadrunner.. and that little bird in the tom and jerry cartoons too.. usualy by the time they are in the mouth, something comes up to smash a foot and make tom scream and drop his meal... and the one time that wile e caught the road runner, he had been turned into a micro...... and that carton shold of ended with the roadrunner eating HIM like a bug. I'm pretty sure I have seen vore in old school cartoons.. and I KNOW I have seen it in anime (naruto gets eaten by a snake) unfortunatly, there are few well done vore videos out there. and for well done furry, you need to look at disney... and they cant do anything for adults. well, that's the price of being a social deviant. no one caters to us except our own... either way,wouldnt change myself for the world
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Thank you.
Space Dragon � Berserker B. Inspired by a drawing from Salamander
The vast universe holds many secrets, some too immense for humanity to grasp. Nevertheless, the universe is in itself, a piece of nature, and as such, the rules of nature still apply. Even in the vastness of space, where no human thinks life can survive, predators lurk in the dark empty vacuum.
It moved through the vastness of space in speeds beyond human limitations. Its form was that of what humans would call a European
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore Macro Dragon Digestion Fatal writing planet moon Dragon pred Earth Planet Vore extinction mega macro
A story about a galactic dragon that (literaly) eats planets. Inspired by a pic from Salamander. (SV, Dragon/planet)
NikVulper - 16 years ago
I've been a fan of those pictures for ages, and I'm glad to see a faithful interpretation of it in words. Excellent work :)
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
It was one of my favorites. I see it as the ultimate micro and macro vore.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
If the Earth were to be destroyed, then let it be swallowed whole and digested, I say.
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
Thanks. It's good to know if I am over using a word so I can catch it next time.
Slash - 16 years ago
A world full of life and love of billions of people, now just a bulge and a belch to a galactic dragon. Wonderful short story. I remember Salamander's pic as well.^^
Dorian Draconskee - The Key � Berserker B
He flew through the night sky; the full moon at his back cast a dark silhouette that streaked along the heavens. The night air was refreshing, considering it was the middle of summer. He soared past rolling hills, grassy plains, and few small forests. He was out tonight for something special. He was out, for dinner.
Dorian Draconskee was little over a century old, which was young by dragon standards. He had an average height for a dragon, and was
Uploaded: 16 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: writing
A dragon goes out searching for a late meal, and ends up finding more than he expected. Its technically a prequel to another story, but it stands alone just fine. M/f/m, shrinking, soft vore, no sex, dragon pred, human prey, digestion (not graphic)
Slime Lake � Berserker B
The afternoon sun burned brightly on that clear and cloudless day. It was an unusual day for tropical weather, for there had been very little rain. The Manmaru rainforest was home to a plethora of plants and animals, some of which were considered extraordinary and incredibly rare. The rainforest was home to many adventures. Tales of lost civilizations and undiscovered species brought many explorers seeking fame, fortune, or both. However, the jungle was also home
Uploaded: 17 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Slime Digestion Absorption writing
A quick, short story. Four explorers find out why you should never visit a jungle, rumoured to have dangerous creatures. Was a little idea I had. Little editing was done to it, so it may contain a few errors. SV (quick), slightly graphic digestion, prey is furry/human; 2 male/2 female.
Ragtime - 17 years ago
I like it. Guess you can't expect a free lunch. Well, I mean... you know what I mean.
Uploaded: 17 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore Soft Vore Sex writing
An idea I had one night while in bed. Jan, an anthro fox, worries that her relationship may be failing. She comes ot the decision that there is only one thing she can do about it.
Contains: F/M, sex, soft vore, implied digestion, furry, and a small twist of an ending.
BerserkerB - 17 years ago
I'll have to look back for those spelling errors. I was not using my word processor, and I did not have my usual dictionary with me. Thanks for the comment, and I will try and rework the detail in my sex scenes.
Eka - 17 years ago
Nice commenting there Surreal_serenity
Surreal_Serenity - 17 years ago
Double check every time you use a word processors spell check. I noticed a few "spelling" errors that are completely impossible for a living person to make.
Sexually, this isn't terribly exciting. The detail and character development a bit lacking during your vore/sex scenes, which, when mixed, help make the best sorts of those scenes. However, I have to give you credit for your execution of the plot. The story was not very long, but the plot concept is classic and heart warming in it's own way.
What really caught my attention is that you had something from the beginning of the story effect the end of the story, namely, the gray wolf. Now, from your perspective you may not be seeing what is so impressive about that. Looking at professional work, it's easy to see why. However, since I've seen a lot of stories on the internet, I can say that it's actually quite rare here. This means that you pay more attention to detail about plot and whatnot than is typically seen, and that is a good thing.
As for your characters, I can't say that I've left this story with a good idea of who they are and what they are like. Perhaps in your sequel you can experiment with how they act and behave in different situations to fully display their personalities.
All in all, I'd say this story was well constructed. This is above normal for what I usually read, especially since I mostly prefer fantasy/sci-fi stories. I normally would have stopped reading after a few paragraphs if I didn't notice any "real, promising ability" present in those initial moments. However, you succeeded in making a story that I could enjoy reading from start to finish: I not only read it, but I don't regret reading it, and I'm a picky person.
In fact, I'm going to check around your archives for anything else of yours =D
Chrono Trigger: An Unwilling Betrayal
Frog woke to a dimly lit room. He felt cold metal below him, his armor was gone, and the sheath containing his sword was missing. As his eyes adjusted to the light, he noticed that he was no longer in Yakra's chamber. The room appeared to be a dungeon of some sort, but it was smaller than a normal dungeon. He tried to stand, but could not. His hands and feet were bound together, making it impossible for him to stand. He wiggled in an attempt to loosen hi
Uploaded: 17 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore Frog Soft Vore M/F Non-consensual Unwilling Pred
Frog tries to escape the lair of Yakra, but winds up in an unexpected situation. M/F, non-con soft vore, unwilling pred.
One Ate by Moonlight by: Berserker B
Rutee smiled as her date gloated about his job. She knew all about him, she had too. He was a well-to-do lawyer who, by his own gloating, had won many landmark cases. She knew he was full of bullshit, but she remained vigil, waiting for a golden opportunity.
“So,” her date said, “how would you like to take a trip with me in my Porsche?”
Rutee had waited for this moment. “Where should we go?” she asked seductivel
Uploaded: 17 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
A young fox vore finds her latest victim to be harder to catch than she thinks. But could things turn out differently than she expected? F/M and M/F, furry, masterbation.
Deleteduser_120 - 16 years ago
Revenge mementos are always good in Vore. This story's very detailed and descriptive, and it is structured very well. You've perfectly conveyed the emotions displayed by each character and at the same time also wrapped it so that what is contained in the text can easily be envisioned. Most satisfying was the way in which the vixen met her deserved demise. Excellent work.
Scratch - 17 years ago
I actually felt sorry for the vixen at the end for some reason, even if she had it coming. Stories don't usually pull at me like that. Nice work.
Slime in a Forest
Kyle tripped over an unseen root and fell flat on his face. He cursed his luck, got up, and wiped the dirt from his clothes. He had been walking through the forest all morning, trying to find his brothers, who in their twisted little joke had separated him from the hunting party, and without any food or water. He continued to wander through the forest, completely unaware of his surroundings or what direction he was going in.
After a few more minutes of walking, he final
Uploaded: 17 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Slime M/M Absorption Unwilling writing
My first take at slime vore. Slime/Male prey
Terris - 17 years ago
Not bad. :)
Author's Note: This is my first vore story so be gentle. I had this idea in my head for a while and I finally got it down on paper. I hope any of you CT fans enjoy and to those of you who have never play Chrono Trigger, I feel really, really sorry for you.
He awoke to a dimly lit room, his head throbbing with pain. He looked groggily gazed his surroundings as he tried to remember the events of a few minutes ago. He remembered fighting that giant beast with Frog and Lucca, and he remembered c
Uploaded: 18 years ago
Owner: BerserkerB
Tags: Oral Vore Human Sex Cum Orgasm Human Prey Climax
What should have happened after the fight with Yakra.
(Pred Fm/M Prey)
BerserkerB - 16 years ago
I'm glad you liked it. I had fun writing it. This is the last Bandit story for a little while. I have a few other ideas I want to work with.